On Grandpa's Swing
Love listening to Grandpa tell his story10 total reviews
Comment from livelylinda
Author: I'm having a problem understanding how this is a poem. There is no discernible rhythm. It reads as an essay would read. Because of this, the message is lost on me. This is just my opinion, of course. Maybe I need another cup of coffee! Best wishes in the contest. livelylinda
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Author: I'm having a problem understanding how this is a poem. There is no discernible rhythm. It reads as an essay would read. Because of this, the message is lost on me. This is just my opinion, of course. Maybe I need another cup of coffee! Best wishes in the contest. livelylinda
Comment Written 03-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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This is a prose poem possessing poetic qualities, including intensity, compactness, and imagery. The sentiment expressed is the key in this type of poetry, in my opinion.Thanks for the feedback. Enjoy your coffee.
Comment from JudyE
Your grandfather had a remarkable life and how great that you got to hear so many of his stories. I really enjoyed reading this thanks, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Your grandfather had a remarkable life and how great that you got to hear so many of his stories. I really enjoyed reading this thanks, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and evaluate.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
Awww, this is such a sweet story. I am happy for you that you had time with him. My grand parents were all dead before I was born. One offering:
"My grandfather would come home from
His job as at the Chicago stockyards"
I think deletein "as" here would help the flow.
Thanks for sharing.
Jan
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Hi Contest Author,
Awww, this is such a sweet story. I am happy for you that you had time with him. My grand parents were all dead before I was born. One offering:
"My grandfather would come home from
His job as at the Chicago stockyards"
I think deletein "as" here would help the flow.
Thanks for sharing.
Jan
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thanks for the catch. I proof read this thing five times and didn't catch it. Thank you for the read and the comments.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem about a child's wonderful experience with his grandparents especially a grandfather that ewas the story teller and served as second parent and life teacher.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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A very well-written heartfelt poem about a child's wonderful experience with his grandparents especially a grandfather that ewas the story teller and served as second parent and life teacher.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and the review.
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem has a lovely sense of nostalgia. Sharing time with a grandparent is special as they have had such different life experiences to our own, and particularly so in your own grandfather's case. Time on the porch swing was time well spent.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Your poem has a lovely sense of nostalgia. Sharing time with a grandparent is special as they have had such different life experiences to our own, and particularly so in your own grandfather's case. Time on the porch swing was time well spent.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and the review. Went back to his old house a few years ago. The swing was gone.
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Our memories often get carried away, just like the swing.
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So true. Good reason for writing them down.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
This is a wonderful list of recollections of time spent with a beloved grandparent -- it is so very evident through your words and clear descriptions that those times meant a lot to you -- thank you for sharing them with us and best of luck at the polls! :) :)
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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This is a wonderful list of recollections of time spent with a beloved grandparent -- it is so very evident through your words and clear descriptions that those times meant a lot to you -- thank you for sharing them with us and best of luck at the polls! :) :)
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and the review.
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
I was taken back to the swing at my grandparents' house. My grandmother told lots of stories, which I treasure. Not my grandfather, though. I have wonderful memories of him to cherish, but I now wish I had asked him about his life, especially his childhood. You have wonderful details in your poem, an American story. I really like that he told you he couldn't look at their eyes and about the radio. I make a point to tell my granddaughter about my early life. You remind us how important that is.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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I was taken back to the swing at my grandparents' house. My grandmother told lots of stories, which I treasure. Not my grandfather, though. I have wonderful memories of him to cherish, but I now wish I had asked him about his life, especially his childhood. You have wonderful details in your poem, an American story. I really like that he told you he couldn't look at their eyes and about the radio. I make a point to tell my granddaughter about my early life. You remind us how important that is.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and the review. Luckily, my grandfather liked to talk and tell stories. Glad you are tell the younger generation about ours.
Comment from SLMorrical
This is a wonderful entry for the contest. The picture just adds to it. This flows very well. It is an easy read to follow. This is very sweet. I feel this is from the heart and a real account of a boy and his grandfather. Good luck in the contest. Very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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This is a wonderful entry for the contest. The picture just adds to it. This flows very well. It is an easy read to follow. This is very sweet. I feel this is from the heart and a real account of a boy and his grandfather. Good luck in the contest. Very well done.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my effort.
Comment from shaffer40
What a well-written tribute to your beloved grandfather. I liked mention of the coal mines of PA. I'm from that part of the state. I was also touched by his concern for the animals at the Stockyards, because I've stopped eating meat because of that cruelty. Well, but, this is about your writing, and it is quite good. I like the image of the colorful sunset.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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What a well-written tribute to your beloved grandfather. I liked mention of the coal mines of PA. I'm from that part of the state. I was also touched by his concern for the animals at the Stockyards, because I've stopped eating meat because of that cruelty. Well, but, this is about your writing, and it is quite good. I like the image of the colorful sunset.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your read and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Judy Swanson
Wonderful memories - encapsulated in brief lines - that chronicle an important time in our nation's history, and tell of times that challenged the souls of our people. Thank you for sharing these memories that we all need to be mindful of. Your words made me think of what my own grandchildren will remember of my stories through times when the challenges are different.
Beautiful photograph.
Judy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Wonderful memories - encapsulated in brief lines - that chronicle an important time in our nation's history, and tell of times that challenged the souls of our people. Thank you for sharing these memories that we all need to be mindful of. Your words made me think of what my own grandchildren will remember of my stories through times when the challenges are different.
Beautiful photograph.
Judy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work. Your comments and review are much appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
