Mosaic of Blues
Feelings of longing/Free Verse7 total reviews
Comment from Sally Law
The is positively delicious! How lovely this is. I can see a similarly in your poems and WalkerMan's romantic love poetry. I am bookcasing this treasure right now. I am near blind with low vision so vivid artwork is and extra treat for me. How blessed I am to see this today.
All my best,
Sally :+)
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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The is positively delicious! How lovely this is. I can see a similarly in your poems and WalkerMan's romantic love poetry. I am bookcasing this treasure right now. I am near blind with low vision so vivid artwork is and extra treat for me. How blessed I am to see this today.
All my best,
Sally :+)
Comment Written 04-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thank you Sally for this smile making review!
Comment from WalkerMan
Yes, we all have (or have had) our romantic dreams, day or night, whether of real love we share or of love we long to share, especially in some joyful imagined setting, such as the beautiful one you here describe.
For those apart, separated either by distance or by loss, this fantasy embrace of merging souls among the stars both fills mutual needs for a few precious moments and reminds us that true love is eternal, even beyond physical contact.
Even after waking from such a dream, its effect lingers, softening our longings, while giving us strength to face our reality. Superb.
I'm not surprised you won the "Feelings" contest with this positive post.
Please consider this rated as a Virtual Six, as mine are depleted this week.
Some minor things, easily fixed:
setting-aglow => setting aglow [should be two separate words]
forevermore; => forevermore -- [long dash, as this is not a clause break]
mine; => mine, [comma, as this is not a clause break]
together, soar => together soar [comma not needed]
two lover's at => two lovers at [plural, not possessive singular]
strong arms, => strong arms; [semicolon for clause break]
a heart so true ! => a heart so true! [remove extra space]
rendezvous'. => rendezvous, [no apostrophe; comma instead of period]
Bestowing => bestowing [sentence continues]
possibilities, => possibilities -- [long dash for stronger pause]
Please tell me when these are fixed, and I'll remove the relevant comments
to leave you a clean review.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Yes, we all have (or have had) our romantic dreams, day or night, whether of real love we share or of love we long to share, especially in some joyful imagined setting, such as the beautiful one you here describe.
For those apart, separated either by distance or by loss, this fantasy embrace of merging souls among the stars both fills mutual needs for a few precious moments and reminds us that true love is eternal, even beyond physical contact.
Even after waking from such a dream, its effect lingers, softening our longings, while giving us strength to face our reality. Superb.
I'm not surprised you won the "Feelings" contest with this positive post.
Please consider this rated as a Virtual Six, as mine are depleted this week.
Some minor things, easily fixed:
setting-aglow => setting aglow [should be two separate words]
forevermore; => forevermore -- [long dash, as this is not a clause break]
mine; => mine, [comma, as this is not a clause break]
together, soar => together soar [comma not needed]
two lover's at => two lovers at [plural, not possessive singular]
strong arms, => strong arms; [semicolon for clause break]
a heart so true ! => a heart so true! [remove extra space]
rendezvous'. => rendezvous, [no apostrophe; comma instead of period]
Bestowing => bestowing [sentence continues]
possibilities, => possibilities -- [long dash for stronger pause]
Please tell me when these are fixed, and I'll remove the relevant comments
to leave you a clean review.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019
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Thank you mike for this wonderful review. I do appreciate it. I'll start correcting soon.
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You are most welcome, Susan. As usual, I'll remove the relevant comments when the corrections are made. I like the post.
-- Mike
Comment from rheabug
This is a top notch entry for this contest and I am sure you will win the most votes. I love the picture as well as the poem. You have a very creative pen and I appreciate you posting it for all the folks at Fanstory. Hugs
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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This is a top notch entry for this contest and I am sure you will win the most votes. I love the picture as well as the poem. You have a very creative pen and I appreciate you posting it for all the folks at Fanstory. Hugs
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Well thank you very much!!! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review! Contest are what they are..I always go in with an open mind. :-) Thanks again for this smile making review! AND the extra star! :-))))))))))))))))))))
Comment from CathyM
You took us on a journey with your mosaic of blues. I love the image and the script you used to write the poem. Punctuation was key with this along with the word choices and formation. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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You took us on a journey with your mosaic of blues. I love the image and the script you used to write the poem. Punctuation was key with this along with the word choices and formation. Nicely done.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thank you Cathy for taking the time to read and review!! I do appreciate it! :-)
Comment from Richard J
Ahhh, Susan,
Such is the wonder of your pen that it, obviously, conspired with your heart and soul to splash its ink across the page in such a way the very essence penetrates our very fibre.
What a gorgeous mosaic flower, color, and font choice you've selected to most effectively display this amazingly emotional, tenderhearted, tug of sheer, blissful feelings ... sighhh!
One never knows how a contest might go, but you've my vote, not because I like you so much (though, I do), but because it's just THAT damned good! ~ Richard : )
PS: "GREAT WIN, POETESS!"
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Ahhh, Susan,
Such is the wonder of your pen that it, obviously, conspired with your heart and soul to splash its ink across the page in such a way the very essence penetrates our very fibre.
What a gorgeous mosaic flower, color, and font choice you've selected to most effectively display this amazingly emotional, tenderhearted, tug of sheer, blissful feelings ... sighhh!
One never knows how a contest might go, but you've my vote, not because I like you so much (though, I do), but because it's just THAT damned good! ~ Richard : )
PS: "GREAT WIN, POETESS!"
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Richard Richard Richard! ya not suppose to write a review better then the poem! heheh,,,but thank you!!! You are a constant source of encouragement and I truly appreciate that! :-) Thanks for the extra start! :-)))))))))))))
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- this is an epic romp through such a wonderful flowing rhythm of your daydream joys and heart felt emotions... just awesome! ;) This has definitely got to be the top contender...can't wait to see them all!! :) ;) Thank you so very much for sharing your 'mosaic' with all of us! ;) Best of luck at the polls! :)
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Wow -- this is an epic romp through such a wonderful flowing rhythm of your daydream joys and heart felt emotions... just awesome! ;) This has definitely got to be the top contender...can't wait to see them all!! :) ;) Thank you so very much for sharing your 'mosaic' with all of us! ;) Best of luck at the polls! :)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Thank you so much for reading and leaving this lovely review!!! You certainly put a smile on my face! Thanks again..
Comment from kiwijenny
suddenly ...
my world gleams
brightly clear ~ to a soft
mosaic of blues....... blue is like this for me...a revelation a clarity...and it makes me happy..
Well penned ...beautiful
God bless
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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suddenly ...
my world gleams
brightly clear ~ to a soft
mosaic of blues....... blue is like this for me...a revelation a clarity...and it makes me happy..
Well penned ...beautiful
God bless
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2019
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Aww Thank you for taking the time to read and leave me this wonderful review! I do appreciate it! :-)
