'Horror at Film Studio'
Even in death, things aren't always what they seem.21 total reviews
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A very well written poem for the 3-word contest.A dark tale but interesting to read! It rhymes well and the story moves forward with well-chosen words. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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A very well written poem for the 3-word contest.A dark tale but interesting to read! It rhymes well and the story moves forward with well-chosen words. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Seshadri - thank you very much for your excellent review. It's wonderful to hear that the narrative is interesting and that there is movement in the work. Thank you for the well wishes. Best of luck to you and your work here on Fanstory as well.
Comment from karenina
Love how you rhymed "key" with A R S E N I C!
A dark tale but oddly entertaining to read! I got into the flow and was happy to follow your leads...
Elaborate work to include three words! I enjoyed it...
Good luck on the contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Love how you rhymed "key" with A R S E N I C!
A dark tale but oddly entertaining to read! I got into the flow and was happy to follow your leads...
Elaborate work to include three words! I enjoyed it...
Good luck on the contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Karenina - so happy you found this work entertaining (even if "oddly" so). Thanks for following the leads through the narrative and the appreciation of the rhyme. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the piece. Thank you again for your kind words and excellent rating!
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I meant "oddly" in the nest possible way! I sort of felt guilty enjoying it so much! Bet writing transcends AND enhances any genre!
Karenina
Comment from nomi338
As a former military police officer, I have learned to never jump to conclusions. Things are very rarely all that they seem on first impression. Of course when the victim(s) are prominent, children, elderly or infirm, there are sometimes an urgency to rush to a solution. That should be avoided at all costs. This rush has caused innocent people to be railroaded into lengthy jail sentences then exonerated later on and paid off by the city.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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As a former military police officer, I have learned to never jump to conclusions. Things are very rarely all that they seem on first impression. Of course when the victim(s) are prominent, children, elderly or infirm, there are sometimes an urgency to rush to a solution. That should be avoided at all costs. This rush has caused innocent people to be railroaded into lengthy jail sentences then exonerated later on and paid off by the city.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Well said, nomi338. I often write as a means to put the real world to the side for the moment, while I explore whatever theme seems entertaining at them time. Your points are valid, and there is a wonderful real-world application and education you have afforded this work through your experiential review. Thank you for your excellent rating and for applying the themes of the work to the world around us.
Comment from Eunice Amero
wow You did a good job. you said Each was shaken I think maybe it should be Each were shaken. Sorry if I'm wrong. Very interesting poem. Scary and I felt maybe those red dots or make was caused by a vampire. i thank you for sharing. I liked it. keep up the good job.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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wow You did a good job. you said Each was shaken I think maybe it should be Each were shaken. Sorry if I'm wrong. Very interesting poem. Scary and I felt maybe those red dots or make was caused by a vampire. i thank you for sharing. I liked it. keep up the good job.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Eunice - thank you so much for this review. I feel you may be on to something with "each were" rather than "each was". I was thinking "Each [man] was shaken", so it sounded stronger in the singular than "Each [man] were shaken" but, as I'm certain you are aware, English grammar is a delightful trickster at times. I'll mull it over. That said, please never apologize for a suggestion - this is wonderful advice, and I appreciate it. Thank you for your kind words and excellent rating. Best of luck to you and your work on Fanstory.
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You are more than welcome and it is certainly true with English. I have been trying to learn all I can through the years I've been writing. Thank you for your kindness I appreciate it.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I did enjoy your Horror poem E Denison and the setting in a film studio.You have told the story well using the three required words. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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I did enjoy your Horror poem E Denison and the setting in a film studio.You have told the story well using the three required words. Good luck in the contest. Cheers
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2021
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Pearl - this is a lovely review of the poem. I am pleased you enjoyed it. Thank you for the kind words and excellent rating.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Horror at Film Studio'
by E. Denison
Great entry for the 3 Words In A Poem writing prompt contest. You made good use of the three words.... animal - horror - short. I love horror, crime, and thrillers. The presentation goes well with the poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Horror at Film Studio'
by E. Denison
Great entry for the 3 Words In A Poem writing prompt contest. You made good use of the three words.... animal - horror - short. I love horror, crime, and thrillers. The presentation goes well with the poem.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Gypsy Blue Rose. I appreciate your considerate review and excellent rating.
Comment from Begin Again
as a prose writer, Mystery and Crime seem to run through my veins, but dark horror tends to curdle my blood. Your story/poem is well written and shows the writer to have a clever, yet devious mind. You met the writing prompts requests of using the three words, and also managed to skillfully entertain the reader. I wish you the best of luck.
Smiles as always, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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as a prose writer, Mystery and Crime seem to run through my veins, but dark horror tends to curdle my blood. Your story/poem is well written and shows the writer to have a clever, yet devious mind. You met the writing prompts requests of using the three words, and also managed to skillfully entertain the reader. I wish you the best of luck.
Smiles as always, Carol
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Carol - thank you so much for this incredible review. I truly appreciate the kind words and excellent rating. Thank you for the well wishes. Best of luck for your work on this site as well.
Comment from HarryT
This is an excellent story poem. I like the rhyming scheme it works well; it is never forced and moves the story along. Good use of imagery, the reader can see the setting.
Your explanation has typos, probably not your fault but I would check and correct: "Storyline seeks to �¢??breathe�¢?? a little history" and "I know it is not everyone�¢??s cup of tea."
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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This is an excellent story poem. I like the rhyming scheme it works well; it is never forced and moves the story along. Good use of imagery, the reader can see the setting.
Your explanation has typos, probably not your fault but I would check and correct: "Storyline seeks to �¢??breathe�¢?? a little history" and "I know it is not everyone�¢??s cup of tea."
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Harry T - thank you for this incredible review! I appreciate the kind works and exceptional rating. It truly means a lot. I see what you are saying in the author notes. This happens for me from time to time when I publish from my phone. It?s not consistent but seems to be something to do with special characters. I?ll take a look on my computer to see if I can?t resolve it that way. Thank you again for your time and review - I appreciate it!
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I had the same problem. I have corrected it from my computer.
Comment from Wendy G
A well- written poem of horror and murder, with a lot of mystery. One small detail. You mentioned her hometown was Auckland, which is not in Australia, but in New Zealand. However the actress could have been overseas in Australia when these dramatic events occurred! Or you could slightly adjust your Author's Notes. Nevertheless, a good entry!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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A well- written poem of horror and murder, with a lot of mystery. One small detail. You mentioned her hometown was Auckland, which is not in Australia, but in New Zealand. However the actress could have been overseas in Australia when these dramatic events occurred! Or you could slightly adjust your Author's Notes. Nevertheless, a good entry!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Wendy - quite right! I have removed the reference to Australia from the notes; I think it is cleaner this way. I wanted to provide names, locations and themes that hinted at early cinema outside the US industry, but I think a reference to hometown alone provides the reader with the freedom to determine where this story may take place instead. Thank you for your insightful feedback and sound review! I appreciate the kind words and will improve my poetry and world-building from it. All the best to you and your work on this site!
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Thank you for your good wishes. Good wishes for your entry. (I noticed the place-name because I am Australian!
Comment from Senyai
Hi E Denison,
I found this crime/murder suspenseful poem a delight to read. I wonder, did Colin King recover from his arsenic ingestion or croak at the end? I enjoyed another one of your delightfully dark story poems and look to read more of your work by becoming a fan.
Glad to meet you here on |FanStory and hope you like it here.
Have a great week!
Senyai
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Hi E Denison,
I found this crime/murder suspenseful poem a delight to read. I wonder, did Colin King recover from his arsenic ingestion or croak at the end? I enjoyed another one of your delightfully dark story poems and look to read more of your work by becoming a fan.
Glad to meet you here on |FanStory and hope you like it here.
Have a great week!
Senyai
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Senyai - I am humbled by this review. ?Delightfully dark? is such a wonderful way to describe someone?s work. I appreciate it! Beyond that, thank you for becoming a fan! I hope I can produce more content that you?ll enjoy! Thank you for your kind words and thoughtful review - it makes my day!
