Beyond Wonder (And Other Lands)
Entrepreneurship in a post-fairytale world...8 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was an original idea of Alice in Wonderland, lol, I enjoyed Cheshire Cat's banter with Tinkerbell, she really liked him, in her own way. lol. Well done, you did a brilliant job with this contest, the Stop! came in naturally, and I loved the reference of 'your late, your late!' Well done and good luck in the contest. ;0) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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That was an original idea of Alice in Wonderland, lol, I enjoyed Cheshire Cat's banter with Tinkerbell, she really liked him, in her own way. lol. Well done, you did a brilliant job with this contest, the Stop! came in naturally, and I loved the reference of 'your late, your late!' Well done and good luck in the contest. ;0) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 29-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2019
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So glad you enjoyed, Sandra -- thanx for your review! :) ;)
Comment from LIJ Red
I was born too soon...I remember sitting in the EM club drunk and some crowd
on the juke singing about a white rabbit, but the rest is Greek. Tink sounds like a minifox and I saw no glaring lapses in grammar or story flow...excellent.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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I was born too soon...I remember sitting in the EM club drunk and some crowd
on the juke singing about a white rabbit, but the rest is Greek. Tink sounds like a minifox and I saw no glaring lapses in grammar or story flow...excellent.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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A mini-fox and workaholic!! :) ;) Thanx for the review, LlJ! :)
Comment from giraffmang
Well, with those messed up mushrooms, the prince may have discovered another way to skin a cat...
"Uhm, Hey!" - hey doesn't need capitalised here.
You see, Ms. Liddell, our founder, - that would be Alice. (although not named as such in the Disney outing but rather the basis of the character it is supposed from a real person)
he one that I'd borrowed from Whitey's locker - white rabbit.
money from that hothead, the Queen? - of Hearts.
Oh, no! That was Tink, - now we're crossing to JM Barrie.
Sleeping Beauty
The Boys put the wrong piece - lost boys.
The caterpillar from AIW
with the Dwarves down there. - Snow White 7 dwarves.
want your Puck to have to find other ways - character from Disney's Gargoyles cartoon... unless you're chucking in a bit of Shakespeare for good measure.
laughed like that Mad Hatter - self-explanatory.
And of course the Cheshire cat.
Did I miss any...
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Well, with those messed up mushrooms, the prince may have discovered another way to skin a cat...
"Uhm, Hey!" - hey doesn't need capitalised here.
You see, Ms. Liddell, our founder, - that would be Alice. (although not named as such in the Disney outing but rather the basis of the character it is supposed from a real person)
he one that I'd borrowed from Whitey's locker - white rabbit.
money from that hothead, the Queen? - of Hearts.
Oh, no! That was Tink, - now we're crossing to JM Barrie.
Sleeping Beauty
The Boys put the wrong piece - lost boys.
The caterpillar from AIW
with the Dwarves down there. - Snow White 7 dwarves.
want your Puck to have to find other ways - character from Disney's Gargoyles cartoon... unless you're chucking in a bit of Shakespeare for good measure.
laughed like that Mad Hatter - self-explanatory.
And of course the Cheshire cat.
Did I miss any...
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Oh, no, it was definitely Shakespeare -- I think I might have heard of a Disney gargoyle movie, but I have no idea about characters, etc! :) ;) LOL! :) And you got 'em all (I'll give it to ya since you said the Dwarves even though you didn't mention Doc as being one of them)!! :) ;) This truly was a distraction from work for an hour or so... just really was not in the mood to grade papers! ;) LOL! :) Thanx for the review! :)
Comment from Miss Sherry
Test!! Tinkerbell, Sleeping Beauty, Caterpillar, Dwarves, The Queen, the Rabbit, Prince Charming...I'm exhausted!! Can't find your name so will just say, you have far too much time on your hands! Great story, fun to read and imagine. And a test to make us feel inadequate - cute!
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Test!! Tinkerbell, Sleeping Beauty, Caterpillar, Dwarves, The Queen, the Rabbit, Prince Charming...I'm exhausted!! Can't find your name so will just say, you have far too much time on your hands! Great story, fun to read and imagine. And a test to make us feel inadequate - cute!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Nah -- this was just an escape for an hour or so, Lady S!! :) ;) Procrastination, you know?! I'm ready for summer!! :) ;)
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Comment from Ricky1024
Entitled Beyond wonder and other lands was well-written rich in semen imagery it floating red well with no grammar issues as well the artwork and Van were excellent in Moab for 8 Pleasant reading and reviewing adjectives an object of contest were both excellent exceptional while descriptive measures lined up perfectly thanks for dissing of a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024 note this is being casted with cell phones that are will be grammar issues possibly and also run in sentences
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Entitled Beyond wonder and other lands was well-written rich in semen imagery it floating red well with no grammar issues as well the artwork and Van were excellent in Moab for 8 Pleasant reading and reviewing adjectives an object of contest were both excellent exceptional while descriptive measures lined up perfectly thanks for dissing of a blessed day dr. Ricky 1024 note this is being casted with cell phones that are will be grammar issues possibly and also run in sentences
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Thank you for your review, Ricky -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from Maria Millsaps
a precarious situation if that nature was allowed to make the decisions. And I would much prefer to be the one creating the precarious situation, not being caught in it...
(use another word on the second sentence, e.g. uncertain, unpredictable, to avoid redundancy.)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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a precarious situation if that nature was allowed to make the decisions. And I would much prefer to be the one creating the precarious situation, not being caught in it...
(use another word on the second sentence, e.g. uncertain, unpredictable, to avoid redundancy.)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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I'm not sure I understand your review, but thank you for taking the time. :) ;)
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Contest Author,
Ah ha ha ha ha! This is a really ingenious write for the Stop! contest, and a terrific one at that. I love that Cheshire Cat for sure - I think we all do. Nothing amiss here for me to suggest you consider reworking. Best of luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Hi Contest Author,
Ah ha ha ha ha! This is a really ingenious write for the Stop! contest, and a terrific one at that. I love that Cheshire Cat for sure - I think we all do. Nothing amiss here for me to suggest you consider reworking. Best of luck and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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So glad you enjoyed Chessie and Tink and 'company' -- thank you for your lovely comments! :)
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh my goodness! Here we go again. I am already out of sixes, and this little tail has so much going on my head is spinning with all the wonderful images.
Shame on that grinning Chesh--er--kitty cat for making a pixie blush (but what a delightful, well-organized, wonderfully adventurous, purrrrfectly paced... Well, you get the point. OUTSTANDING!)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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Oh my goodness! Here we go again. I am already out of sixes, and this little tail has so much going on my head is spinning with all the wonderful images.
Shame on that grinning Chesh--er--kitty cat for making a pixie blush (but what a delightful, well-organized, wonderfully adventurous, purrrrfectly paced... Well, you get the point. OUTSTANDING!)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one, O Lady of the North -- it was one of those really fun ones! :) Don't know how it will fare, but it is definitely different! ;) ;) Thanx for the wonderful review!! :) ;) Yvette
