Pete
A Morning I will Never Forget18 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very touching story, my friend. It must have been quite traumatic as a child. I like the way you spoke of the interactions between humans-- stopping to yell at each other before taking the needed action. It's the blame game so many play. Thanks for sharing this. I am glad you have a dog you love. Some never get over the fear. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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This is a very touching story, my friend. It must have been quite traumatic as a child. I like the way you spoke of the interactions between humans-- stopping to yell at each other before taking the needed action. It's the blame game so many play. Thanks for sharing this. I am glad you have a dog you love. Some never get over the fear. Best wishes in the contest, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 31-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Debbie.
Comment from JLR
What a gut wrenching set of events that obviously had a huge impact on your life far beyond the immediate set of circumstances and ending events. Your story, while, difficult shows the character of your compassion and personal strength. Thank you for sharing and good success in your writing.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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What a gut wrenching set of events that obviously had a huge impact on your life far beyond the immediate set of circumstances and ending events. Your story, while, difficult shows the character of your compassion and personal strength. Thank you for sharing and good success in your writing.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thank you
Comment from Dale Caswell
Wow. What a clear and painful memory of your childhood. Shows how the things that happened to us affect us for the rest of our lives. Your words are colorful and heartfelt. It was easy to re-live that with you and share your pain.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Wow. What a clear and painful memory of your childhood. Shows how the things that happened to us affect us for the rest of our lives. Your words are colorful and heartfelt. It was easy to re-live that with you and share your pain.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thanks, Dale.
Comment from Pushpa2
Hello,
Best thing to say it was really good thought and everyone understood violet and also realize the reality of current situation. It creates interest. It reflects the people behaviour.
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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Hello,
Best thing to say it was really good thought and everyone understood violet and also realize the reality of current situation. It creates interest. It reflects the people behaviour.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Randa Dayle
What a great story! Good luck in the contest! The way you wrote your experience was intriguing to read, and it flowed nicely. It is true that one incident has many different perspectives.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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What a great story! Good luck in the contest! The way you wrote your experience was intriguing to read, and it flowed nicely. It is true that one incident has many different perspectives.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2019
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Thanks Randa.
Comment from Coco Jane
This must have been a harrowing experience for you. Many lessons in that one horrible day.
You have numerous mechanical errors, especially with sentence fragments and run-ons. They detract a little from an otherwise good story. Here are a few:
In paragraph 1, you need a comma after "sky."
In paragraph 3, remove "after" and put a comma after "wood."
In paragraph 3, you start four consecutive sentences with modifiers. Work for variety in structures.
Once you clean up the mechanics, this will be a very engaging story.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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This must have been a harrowing experience for you. Many lessons in that one horrible day.
You have numerous mechanical errors, especially with sentence fragments and run-ons. They detract a little from an otherwise good story. Here are a few:
In paragraph 1, you need a comma after "sky."
In paragraph 3, remove "after" and put a comma after "wood."
In paragraph 3, you start four consecutive sentences with modifiers. Work for variety in structures.
Once you clean up the mechanics, this will be a very engaging story.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from tfawcus
This is a vivid recount of the story which brings out a number of emotions - fear and guilt being the predominant ones. I enjoyed the immediacy of it.
Just one typo to fix before the contest deadline.
we made our way over to great (greet) him.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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This is a vivid recount of the story which brings out a number of emotions - fear and guilt being the predominant ones. I enjoyed the immediacy of it.
Just one typo to fix before the contest deadline.
we made our way over to great (greet) him.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2019
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Thank you! For catching that.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written true story. Animals cannot always be trusted around young children unattended. Misunderstandings between dog and child can lead to tragic disasters.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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A very well-written true story. Animals cannot always be trusted around young children unattended. Misunderstandings between dog and child can lead to tragic disasters.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Gail Denham
You told your story well - and it's amazing that you remember that much detail. Sad the dog turned on you - we try not to have dogs around that might do this - we have small grandchildren. We had to give away a heeler who did like to follow at the heel and nip a bit. Sad - but some dogs don't do well with kids.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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You told your story well - and it's amazing that you remember that much detail. Sad the dog turned on you - we try not to have dogs around that might do this - we have small grandchildren. We had to give away a heeler who did like to follow at the heel and nip a bit. Sad - but some dogs don't do well with kids.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Darlene Franklin
A story about your dog--your father?--or both! I love the way it comes around at the end with your dog getting in your father's face. A telling portrait of what sounds like a troubled relationship without attacking it directly.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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A story about your dog--your father?--or both! I love the way it comes around at the end with your dog getting in your father's face. A telling portrait of what sounds like a troubled relationship without attacking it directly.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2019
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Thank you, Darlene.
