Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Impressive that you made this kyrielle a monorhyming one! And the message of "cooling our internal fire" avoids all kind of problems. Best to you in the contest.

Comments on missing apostrophe for the possessive:
Title has "Heavens" but if feels like a possessive so I'd suggest: Heaven's.
"Delayer of funerals pyre." (funeral's)
"Better singing in churches choir," (church's)

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

I wondered about that, and agree. I told myself if it got mentioned I'd fix it.
Thanks for the suggestion, I will correct shortly,

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

This is a fine piece of Kyrielle poetry.. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. In mono-rhyme with good verse and verbiage. Well done, good luck in the contest..

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Thank you for the review and compliments. My first one interesting format.

Comment from Randa Dayle

Good

I enjoyed your poem using the Kyrielle style, I think your have done an exceptional job. I love the picture and the poem, it's the perfect combination!

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Thank you for the review.

Comment from djeckert

Excellent

Well done, Im not big on formal poems, but I do appreciate this particular form . A lot of great wisdom and beautiful presentation. The last line confuses me, but itm a bit slow. God surely Blesses

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Thanks for the review and time to read it.

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was a good read. I like the flow of the piece, it has a consistent smooth pace throughout. Good message as well. Nice job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Thank you for the review and compliments, Greatly appreciated.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

An unusual write with much aliteration and he repeated words and sounds reminded me of a slow burning fire crackling with remembrances, foreboding and ultimate forgiveness, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Thank you for the review and compliments.

Comment from HealingMuse

Excellent

Hi Contest Author,

Beautiful poem here and a super contest entry! Best of luck in the competition.

Just two teeny offerings for yoir consideration:

"Preventionof "

and

"Delayerof "

Did you mean to leave the space out between the words?

Thanks for sharing.

Jan

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019

Corrected, I missed it on my review. Thank you for the review and compliments.

reply by HealingMuse on 09-Mar-2019

My pleasure. :-)