Timeless
A poem in the 5-7-5 format28 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
Father time has more time to keep. I'd sigh too.
I like the personification, I like the artwork and the way it flows into the background colour.
Wonderful, Yvette!
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Father time has more time to keep. I'd sigh too.
I like the personification, I like the artwork and the way it flows into the background colour.
Wonderful, Yvette!
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for the read and review on this one, Sandra -- much appreciated!! :) ;) Can't tell you just how good this weekend's been to kinda get caught up to take off running with the beginning of the fourth quarter....we can make it til exams in May, right?! :) ;) Take care, ma'am, and have a wonderful week! :) ;)
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvette,
Yay!! Congratulations on surviving the third quarter. I only have one week, and it is simply collecting papers and grading them. I'm glad I decided to take off until fall. I need the time to finish my novel and get some rest!!
Looking forward to more of your book,
~MP~
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Hi, Yvette,
Yay!! Congratulations on surviving the third quarter. I only have one week, and it is simply collecting papers and grading them. I'm glad I decided to take off until fall. I need the time to finish my novel and get some rest!!
Looking forward to more of your book,
~MP~
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Our exams are the second week in May (and I don't have to spend the summer 'designing' a brand new class like last summer!)....I am counting down the weeks!! :) :) Good to hear you're taking some time off, ma'am -- look forward to 'reading' you in your interim! :) :) Thanx for dropping in, MP -- take care! :) ;)
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
This is clever, witty, and very well thought out. I love how well the three lines flow together so well. The artwork is wonderful and compliments your work very well. I enjoyed reading this well written poem Y.M. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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This is clever, witty, and very well thought out. I love how well the three lines flow together so well. The artwork is wonderful and compliments your work very well. I enjoyed reading this well written poem Y.M. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Thanx for stopping in for my celebration write, Jeffrey -- glad to have you join in! :) ;) Enjoy your Sunday! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Timeless, has the right set up and equates the sea, I think, with that sense of endlessness that reminds us we are only a drop. Nice.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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This 5-7-5, Timeless, has the right set up and equates the sea, I think, with that sense of endlessness that reminds us we are only a drop. Nice.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Thanx for stopping in for my celebration write, Sir Bill -- glad to have you join in! :) ;) Enjoy your Sunday! ;) ;Yvette
Comment from Mark D. R.
Yippee Yvette!
Terrific three lines with this terse 5-7-5 'tome.'
Father Time is most impressed by the illustration that accompanies your verse.
Let's assume this sail boat has painted across 'her' bow the name, "Infinity."
Mark
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Yippee Yvette!
Terrific three lines with this terse 5-7-5 'tome.'
Father Time is most impressed by the illustration that accompanies your verse.
Let's assume this sail boat has painted across 'her' bow the name, "Infinity."
Mark
Comment Written 09-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Wow, Mark!! :) :) Thanx so much for these wonderful stars, sir -- you helped me smile more than just the end of exams!! :) :) And thanx for stopping in for my celebration write -- glad to have you join in! :) ;) Enjoy your Sunday, Mark! ;) ;Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
The life of a teacher must be 9 to 5 and up all night. It must seem like forever seeing paper after paper---who to give a little leeway and who to chop. Yvette, this is a good way to relax by writing a quickie. :);) Good 5-7-5. thank you for sharing,
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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The life of a teacher must be 9 to 5 and up all night. It must seem like forever seeing paper after paper---who to give a little leeway and who to chop. Yvette, this is a good way to relax by writing a quickie. :);) Good 5-7-5. thank you for sharing,
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Thanx for stopping in for my celebration write, Jose -- glad to have you join in! :) ;) Enjoy your Sunday! ;) ;Yvette
Comment from Miss Sherry
Very nice situation when life is caught up! I am so glad for you. This is sure a pretty piece of artwork and a cunning poem that really appeals to me. There is something so peaceful about a boat on the water. Your verse is wonderful. It sings to me, soft words so sweet. Good job!!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Very nice situation when life is caught up! I am so glad for you. This is sure a pretty piece of artwork and a cunning poem that really appeals to me. There is something so peaceful about a boat on the water. Your verse is wonderful. It sings to me, soft words so sweet. Good job!!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2019
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Thanx for stopping in for my celebration write, Lady S -- glad to have you join in! :) ;) Enjoy your Sunday! ;) ;Yvette
Comment from Debra White
Hi Yvette :)
Congrats on the end of exam gradings!
I love your 5-7-5 - the imagery is stunning.
You have brought to me such a sense of peace. Thank you.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Hi Yvette :)
Congrats on the end of exam gradings!
I love your 5-7-5 - the imagery is stunning.
You have brought to me such a sense of peace. Thank you.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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You got it, Debra -- this was definitely my 'weight being lifted' write since I had all my grades entered for the quarter.....and I can see Spring Break coming up the week of Spring's Dawning...Hooray!! :) ;) Glad I could pass just a bit of that along to you, ma'am!! :) ;) Thanx for your wonderful comments, ma'am, and be sure to have a wonderful weekend! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from Dean Kuch
Your 5-7-5 is very haiku-like, Yvette.
In haiku, punctuation and capitalization is frowned upon, where in 5-7-5 poetry it is enthusiastically encouraged.
Although they are similar in syllable count, this is one of the primary differences between the two forms.
Having said that, a 5-7-5 would read as such:
"Forever whispers
across infinity's bow--
and Father Time sighs."
A haiku also utilizes a kigo, or seasonal reference and a satori, or moment of insight--the famed "Ah ha!" moment--as the last line.
None of this is required in 5-7-5 poetry.
The following is a link to a guide that might help you make a better distinction between the two forms in the future. I refer to it a LOT when writing haiku:
Why No 5-7-5?
~Dean
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Your 5-7-5 is very haiku-like, Yvette.
In haiku, punctuation and capitalization is frowned upon, where in 5-7-5 poetry it is enthusiastically encouraged.
Although they are similar in syllable count, this is one of the primary differences between the two forms.
Having said that, a 5-7-5 would read as such:
"Forever whispers
across infinity's bow--
and Father Time sighs."
A haiku also utilizes a kigo, or seasonal reference and a satori, or moment of insight--the famed "Ah ha!" moment--as the last line.
None of this is required in 5-7-5 poetry.
The following is a link to a guide that might help you make a better distinction between the two forms in the future. I refer to it a LOT when writing haiku:
Why No 5-7-5?
~Dean
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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Thanx, Dean -- I have changed the title tag line to reflect the non-professionalism as it certainly was not meant to cause any waves. I also capitalized 'Father Time' but I don't really care for the hyphen...too harsh for the mood I was feeling at the time/that I want to convey. I really just wrote it to celebrate not for any real authenticity or anything. Thank you for the direction, I will be sure to refer to it in the future. I do appreciate your assistance. Yvette
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My pleasure, Yvette.
Comment from aryr
I liked the picture Yvette. It created so many emotions as did your words. It was implying a sense of timelessness, a sense of loneliness and a sense of adventure. Very well done, Rather enjoyable.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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I liked the picture Yvette. It created so many emotions as did your words. It was implying a sense of timelessness, a sense of loneliness and a sense of adventure. Very well done, Rather enjoyable.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
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You got it, Alie -- this was my 'weight being lifted' write since I had all my grades entered for the quarter.....and I can see Spring Break coming up the week of Spring's Dawning...Hooray!! :) ;) thanx for your wonderful comments, ma'am, and be sure to have a wonderful weekend! :) ;) Yvette
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You are so welcome Yvette.
