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A child is born who will be a champion

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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Hi Roxanna,
Wow! This story is proving to be a huge success for you.
You have managed to maintain intrigue, drama and logistics of war in this chapter.
The chapter follows on readily from the last and promises more action to follow.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2019
    Wow, you went back and read it all with no payment. Thank you so much!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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What a nasty man. Perhaps he'll be killed, but most likely not. At least Hamish and Lydia will have a good start getting away from Lucas. Not that I like him any better. Now the fight will begin. Moving on! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 17-Mar-2019
    Thanks Sandra. =}
Comment from royowen
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It looks like unbeknowns to Lucas, Hamish has run off with his wife and
The Wahalanders have sneaked up on him, and are ready to counter attack, he is really angry and ready to vent his anger on any unsuspecting goal! Great episode Rox, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019
    Thank you Roy. And thanks for hanging in there with this story. I know I go too long between postings, I'm trying to do better and have written well ahead so I can post with short breaks.Tthe next few chapter with have lots of action as there will be lots of dragon drama. I hope am doing it justice. I haven't really seen or read about dragons fighting each other, ususlly it's one dragon terroizing a town or smething. So hope I got it right. I guess I'll find out =} Thanks so much again. Rox
reply by royowen on 12-Mar-2019
    You're a good writer Rox, don't let others say otherwise,
Comment from Sally Law
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This is a good installment and full or rich, meaty details. I also see spiritual implications representing our modern times. My favorite line, "Why had they not discovered the enemy right in their doorstep?" Reminds me of America right now.

A broad critique in the hope of getting this fine work noticed here on FanStory. Too much time lapses between the chapters and the characters are so similar, we forget who is who. Especially, which ones are the good guys. Thank you for offering the characters at the bottom, but possibly consider at the beginning a refresher for those who may not remember the characters from the previous chapter. Long intervals between chapters tend to erase our memories, and we have to backtrack before we read. Just a thought. I want this fine story reviewed and appreciated. It really is so well done!

All my best,
Sal xo


 Comment Written 08-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
    Thank you Sally. You are right, I do worry about people forgetting the story and I don't really promote it much as I know it won't get many reviews. I was stuck for a while, but have been working hard on it and have enough chapters,( or parts as in a real book my whole book could fit in 2 chapters0 to post often as I did in the beginning.The next few I hope will be exciting as there is lots of dragon drama.=} Thank you for the read and hanging in there and I'll try to do better with it.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
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Looks like Lucas and the Hoard are about to get their
come-up-ance. Evil will usually burn itself up as it is doing to Lucas. Hate and cruelty have taken hold leaving
no room for other strategies'. Hamish and Lydia are long gone. Too bad. LOL Nancy

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
    Thanks Nancy for hanging in there with this. I know I don't post often and people forget who's who, but I have been working on it and hopefully can post more often as I have quite a few pages now. Yes Lucas will reap what he sowed. Foolish man. Thank you. Rox
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Roxanna, so Joshua is angry and feels not only angry with himself but with everybody else. Especially his brother Hamish. Good Scottish name as it were.
and had been caught awares. Do you mean unawares? All the best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
    Yes I mean 'unawares', better fix that. Thanks so much Ulla, I know it is hard to read as I don't post often enough and it makes it hard to follow. I'm working hard to get a lot done so I can post more often. Thanks for hanging in there. Rox
Comment from Miss Sherry
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This guy is a real jerk. You have done a great job of portraying him. I didn't want the story to end, the sign of a good writer...keep them wanting more. I will be back for the next chapter and I will NOT be cheering for Lucas!!

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2019


reply by the author on 08-Mar-2019
    Thank you Sherry. I know I don't post often enough and it make it hard to remember who's who, so am trying to get much done so I can keep them coming closer together. The next chapter should be exciting as there is lots of dragon drama. =} Thanks so much, glad you enjoy it. It's very encouraging. Rox