A Mother's Love
A Rondel Entry10 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Mystery poet,
I gave you your 6th vote .. You're leading and I wish you the best.
It's such a cute scene to watch those scrawny stretched out necks beg for food .
Their mamma works tireless to feed them and then during the night she keeps them warm and protected under her wings .
You did a great job describing the love and dedication these tiny mammas have for their offspring.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Ciao Mystery poet,
I gave you your 6th vote .. You're leading and I wish you the best.
It's such a cute scene to watch those scrawny stretched out necks beg for food .
Their mamma works tireless to feed them and then during the night she keeps them warm and protected under her wings .
You did a great job describing the love and dedication these tiny mammas have for their offspring.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for your support and sensitive insights!
Comment from Debbie Pope
What a charming poem. I love the image of the young woman waiting for her lover in her new red dress and high heels. Time will reveal the success of this relationship. The fact that she is waiting and he has had so many other women does not bode well for this young lady. That is the impression that your poem gives me. Even the title does not offer promise.
Poor girl. I enjoyed the poem though.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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What a charming poem. I love the image of the young woman waiting for her lover in her new red dress and high heels. Time will reveal the success of this relationship. The fact that she is waiting and he has had so many other women does not bode well for this young lady. That is the impression that your poem gives me. Even the title does not offer promise.
Poor girl. I enjoyed the poem though.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights. Always nice to hear from you!
Comment from royowen
This is a really good Rondel, you've manicured this very well, indeed, with accurate form and meter, great rhyming and a very sound thematically speaking, a very good entry in this Rondel poetry contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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This is a really good Rondel, you've manicured this very well, indeed, with accurate form and meter, great rhyming and a very sound thematically speaking, a very good entry in this Rondel poetry contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights. Always nice to hear from you!
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My pleasure
Comment from kiwijenny
Yes it is the dress...that dress that lures entices and pleases...and red is the best color
Reminds me of Scarlett O'Hara in Gone With The Wind....not the curtains the other one
Good luck...beautiful picture with it
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Yes it is the dress...that dress that lures entices and pleases...and red is the best color
Reminds me of Scarlett O'Hara in Gone With The Wind....not the curtains the other one
Good luck...beautiful picture with it
God bless
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights. Always nice to hear from you!
Comment from Mad jester
Thank you for writing and sharing.
I would play with the ( when he proposed she just said yes, wanting instead to do cartwheels)
Maybe ... when he proposed, cartwheels came to mind..... instead she (happily,excitedly) said yes.
Also the last part is confusing, is he a cheating no good pig? If so, she knows it and why would she say yes to him? Ya that one got me, I was feeling the love and passion until that last part... if that's what you were going for bravo! If not I guess I am confused sorry just my opinion, I am no pro or anything just a reader. So please excuse the confusion and take what I say with a grain of sand. Again thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for writing and sharing.
I would play with the ( when he proposed she just said yes, wanting instead to do cartwheels)
Maybe ... when he proposed, cartwheels came to mind..... instead she (happily,excitedly) said yes.
Also the last part is confusing, is he a cheating no good pig? If so, she knows it and why would she say yes to him? Ya that one got me, I was feeling the love and passion until that last part... if that's what you were going for bravo! If not I guess I am confused sorry just my opinion, I am no pro or anything just a reader. So please excuse the confusion and take what I say with a grain of sand. Again thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
Comment from JudyE
Mother birds must spend some anxious moments at times. You've reminded us here of the varying weather conditions that birds must cope with, not to mention baby birds that seem constantly hungry. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Mother birds must spend some anxious moments at times. You've reminded us here of the varying weather conditions that birds must cope with, not to mention baby birds that seem constantly hungry. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights. Always nice to hear from you!
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, I really like your poem... although I'm afraid it's not a true Rondeau according to the rules in the notes there. The last two lines also need to be the same... you have the last line as a carry-over but not the last two. (I gave you a 5 because I actually like the way you wrote it better than it would have been as a Rondeau.) :) If the contest hasn't gone off yet I suggest you fix it so it makes the contest and doesn't get tossed out before judgeing starts! It's really good. Good luck! :)
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Hello Author, I really like your poem... although I'm afraid it's not a true Rondeau according to the rules in the notes there. The last two lines also need to be the same... you have the last line as a carry-over but not the last two. (I gave you a 5 because I actually like the way you wrote it better than it would have been as a Rondeau.) :) If the contest hasn't gone off yet I suggest you fix it so it makes the contest and doesn't get tossed out before judgeing starts! It's really good. Good luck! :)
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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This was an entry for the Rondel contest - very similar to a Rondeau. Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights.
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Whichever one it is... the directions at the bottom were the ones I was following which should be the ones you followed. If I mixed Rondeau and Rondelle... my bad... I've never done the Rondelle before though I have done the Rondeau a couple of times.
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
He sounds like a player to me! He's probably inside the apartment with some other girl while she waits outside in her red dress for him! LOL! Just kidding, cute poem and nice picture to go with it. Let's hope he's decent enough since he proposed to her to be her true love.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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He sounds like a player to me! He's probably inside the apartment with some other girl while she waits outside in her red dress for him! LOL! Just kidding, cute poem and nice picture to go with it. Let's hope he's decent enough since he proposed to her to be her true love.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
Very nicely written and great visual presentation. The image you have chosen is perfect.
Very good contest entry. Best of luck and thanks for sharing.
Jan
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Hi Mystery Author,
Very nicely written and great visual presentation. The image you have chosen is perfect.
Very good contest entry. Best of luck and thanks for sharing.
Jan
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights. Always nice to hear from you!
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My pleasure. :-)
Comment from jmshumate
Wow! This is a really good read. You've done well with this format. And, you have told a wonderful tale of love and maybe a bit of seduction on the woman's part, attracting this lady's man with her looks and red dress with heels. Great picture for this. Thank you for sharing this.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Wow! This is a really good read. You've done well with this format. And, you have told a wonderful tale of love and maybe a bit of seduction on the woman's part, attracting this lady's man with her looks and red dress with heels. Great picture for this. Thank you for sharing this.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you for dropping by to read and share your insights.
