Beach Front Property
Not all that it is cracked up to be...50 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
As the ending says, 'By the grace of God... There are many Mary's and even more John's out there, it's so sad. A bit more compassion, a bit more help could change their lives. This is a very well constructed story prose, with a sad message. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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As the ending says, 'By the grace of God... There are many Mary's and even more John's out there, it's so sad. A bit more compassion, a bit more help could change their lives. This is a very well constructed story prose, with a sad message. Well done, and good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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By the grace indeed... My Mom having been a paranoid schizophrenic was foiled by life and I would have (if I could have) taken that from her!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Recently, I've found myself writing not because I had something to say, but because I felt I needed to post something. For this reason, I am taking a break from FanStory. I will be back when I've written something interesting.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Recently, I've found myself writing not because I had something to say, but because I felt I needed to post something. For this reason, I am taking a break from FanStory. I will be back when I've written something interesting.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey Thomas Bowling... I know exactly of what you speak and I find myself doing that sometime and reign myself when it happens I don't want to say something... not just have something to say... I'm with you, Thomas...
Comment from victor 66
The poorest and most down trodden of us have hearts, feelings and emotions like everyone else. Why would a "Cart Lady" be any different. When we die, Mary doesn't' get to take her carts with her and I don't get to take my beat-up 1996 Miata with me. We're all the same, sometimes we just don't know it. This is a very touching poem. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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The poorest and most down trodden of us have hearts, feelings and emotions like everyone else. Why would a "Cart Lady" be any different. When we die, Mary doesn't' get to take her carts with her and I don't get to take my beat-up 1996 Miata with me. We're all the same, sometimes we just don't know it. This is a very touching poem. Best wishes.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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victor... ditto... thanks...
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You're welcome, Mystery Author.
Comment from QC Poet
It still amazes me how some folks will gladly support organizations for animals and other causes yet move away and brush off humans who have obvious issues asking for help get through a day. Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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It still amazes me how some folks will gladly support organizations for animals and other causes yet move away and brush off humans who have obvious issues asking for help get through a day. Thank you for Sharing your Gifts and insight.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Oh boy, don't get me started... If only our everyone felt the same... from your lips to God's ears... I agree!!!!!
Comment from coffeeandink
Not a very nice way to picture a lady, but then, maybe you were talking about how people, come to the ocean, and leave behind, bottles, plates and plastic bags, then your were right, not a nice way to picture a lady. But too the waves crash and curse, and i wonder how deeply the ocean was hurt, by people. Very nice poem. Just who was the lady? Nicr way to see it. Not beautiful, but you made a point or five Nice work.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Not a very nice way to picture a lady, but then, maybe you were talking about how people, come to the ocean, and leave behind, bottles, plates and plastic bags, then your were right, not a nice way to picture a lady. But too the waves crash and curse, and i wonder how deeply the ocean was hurt, by people. Very nice poem. Just who was the lady? Nicr way to see it. Not beautiful, but you made a point or five Nice work.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey coffee and, I am writing about a homeless woman who lives out of her carts... God Bless all of those in need... yours, diana
Comment from 24chas
I liked this piece, unknown writer. It had a good flow to it. The story itself was sad and tragic with Mary preferring to live in fantasy rather than deal in reality. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I liked this piece, unknown writer. It had a good flow to it. The story itself was sad and tragic with Mary preferring to live in fantasy rather than deal in reality. Nice job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from jenintorre
Poor Mary. I suspect she has dementia or something similar. This is a great story/poem and a very good entry for the competition.Best wishes and good luck. Jen.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Poor Mary. I suspect she has dementia or something similar. This is a great story/poem and a very good entry for the competition.Best wishes and good luck. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Story/Prose Poem contest.
Your story, although sad, is clear and well told within the verse.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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I think this is a good entry for the Story/Prose Poem contest.
Your story, although sad, is clear and well told within the verse.
Well done and good luck with the contest.
Sharon
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Joy Graham
Poor Mary :( I was happy to visualize her playing in the surf at the beach. You described it so well that I could picture it. I understand life can get crazy that people turn to the homeless life. A lot of it being mental health issues, and that the homeless are territorial. You make your readers see the reality of the situation. Their world isn't an easy place to be. I wish there were more things we can do to lighten their load like this moment at the beach.
Best wishes in this contest. I think this is a strong story poem contender.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Poor Mary :( I was happy to visualize her playing in the surf at the beach. You described it so well that I could picture it. I understand life can get crazy that people turn to the homeless life. A lot of it being mental health issues, and that the homeless are territorial. You make your readers see the reality of the situation. Their world isn't an easy place to be. I wish there were more things we can do to lighten their load like this moment at the beach.
Best wishes in this contest. I think this is a strong story poem contender.
Joy xx
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
Comment from Treischel
Homeless and on the beach, you convey the tragic reality of panic and confusion of Mary. All too often this ia the reality. Was it humane to eliminate asylums?
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Homeless and on the beach, you convey the tragic reality of panic and confusion of Mary. All too often this ia the reality. Was it humane to eliminate asylums?
Comment Written 06-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hey, thanks for your sage review... yours, di
