Sweet Gratitude
Gratitude in a poem contest entry11 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
I'm pretty sure all who read this went back and read it again. i enjoyed your
clever ending and was happy to read it again and enjoy the fabulous imagery,
rhyme and meter. Obviously you don't need it if you can create these beautiful lines!
Nancy
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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I'm pretty sure all who read this went back and read it again. i enjoyed your
clever ending and was happy to read it again and enjoy the fabulous imagery,
rhyme and meter. Obviously you don't need it if you can create these beautiful lines!
Nancy
Comment Written 02-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Nancy. I really appreciate the generous stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. Have a wonderful rest of your weekend.
Ron
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I totally get this poem, but I had to get to the last stanza and read your author notes before it hit me exactly who or what you were grateful for. I re-read, and, bingo, it all clicked. Perhaps one has to have had the experience to truly understand (upon first reading) where your thoughts were coming from. I understand .. perhaps I've been there or perhaps not :), but, nevertheless, the effect of the 'killer weed' was very poetically and beautifully expressed.
The artwork was a good choice.
I love the black background and gray(?) font.
I love the style of font ... really good for this poem.
Beautiful rhyme.
You eloquently wrote on the subject of gratitude, and gratitude was clearly expressed.
If I had a six, you'd get a six!
Love it!
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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I totally get this poem, but I had to get to the last stanza and read your author notes before it hit me exactly who or what you were grateful for. I re-read, and, bingo, it all clicked. Perhaps one has to have had the experience to truly understand (upon first reading) where your thoughts were coming from. I understand .. perhaps I've been there or perhaps not :), but, nevertheless, the effect of the 'killer weed' was very poetically and beautifully expressed.
The artwork was a good choice.
I love the black background and gray(?) font.
I love the style of font ... really good for this poem.
Beautiful rhyme.
You eloquently wrote on the subject of gratitude, and gratitude was clearly expressed.
If I had a six, you'd get a six!
Love it!
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for the fantastic review and big sixer offer, Gale. I dearly appreciate the gracious stars and kind words. I'm glad you liked the piece. I hope you have a great weekend.
Ron
Comment from Michele Harber
Talk about an "aha" moment! I was convinced, as I'm sure you intended, that I was reading a love story to a spouse or partner or, perhaps, to God. I thought that some of the descriptions might have been a bit over done - until I read your final line. I then went back and reread the poem in a whole new light, and each "overdone" word or phrase made perfect sense, in the way that "Lucy In the Sky with Diamonds" does. Your "prank" was well played and well rhymed.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Talk about an "aha" moment! I was convinced, as I'm sure you intended, that I was reading a love story to a spouse or partner or, perhaps, to God. I thought that some of the descriptions might have been a bit over done - until I read your final line. I then went back and reread the poem in a whole new light, and each "overdone" word or phrase made perfect sense, in the way that "Lucy In the Sky with Diamonds" does. Your "prank" was well played and well rhymed.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Michele. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a wonderful weekend.
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It wasn't silly on the reread. You have a wonderful weekend as well (say that three times fast).
Comment from LisaMay
You have penned a double dose of skill here... a well-worked poem and a flash fiction with the 'reveal' at the end. You have described very eloquently how that herb opens up the mind to creativity, mind expansion, loss of inhibitions, and increased sensitivity to sights, sounds, colours..... but you didn't mention the munchies!
Just a couple of blips: In the first stanza, delete one of the spaces between the words "that" and "few". Also, in the 2nd-last stanza, if you intend an ellipsis (like in the last stanza) between "find" and "then", you will have to add another dot to make 3.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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You have penned a double dose of skill here... a well-worked poem and a flash fiction with the 'reveal' at the end. You have described very eloquently how that herb opens up the mind to creativity, mind expansion, loss of inhibitions, and increased sensitivity to sights, sounds, colours..... but you didn't mention the munchies!
Just a couple of blips: In the first stanza, delete one of the spaces between the words "that" and "few". Also, in the 2nd-last stanza, if you intend an ellipsis (like in the last stanza) between "find" and "then", you will have to add another dot to make 3.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review and for pointing out the goofs, Lisa. You're the only one to mention them. Lol, yeah, I should have put the munchies in there somewhere. I really appreciate the generous stars and help. Thank you again. Have a great weekend.
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You're welcome! You have a nice weekend too.
Comment from kiwijenny
Ok it's because I write for children and have a whacky sense of humor I read...who sells me killer Herb...it's a guy... he's a Uber driver will take you where you want to go ...this Herb...but he's fast very fast and well he's got the name killer for that reason...lol
Lol
God bless... thankfully his brother is Sage and he'll help you...sister Rosemary but who's got Thyme for that?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Ok it's because I write for children and have a whacky sense of humor I read...who sells me killer Herb...it's a guy... he's a Uber driver will take you where you want to go ...this Herb...but he's fast very fast and well he's got the name killer for that reason...lol
Lol
God bless... thankfully his brother is Sage and he'll help you...sister Rosemary but who's got Thyme for that?
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Haha. Thank you for the great humorous review, Jenny. I really appreciate the gracious stars. Have a great weekend.
Comment from LyndaS
OMG!! You totally got me. I was floating along, weaving in and out of this hypnotic meter, landing occasionally on a careful chosen word to breathe deep. Such imagery! Very beautiful.
And then I got to the end.
I doubled over in laughter. You got me bad!
Excellent job poet. :-)
U P
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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OMG!! You totally got me. I was floating along, weaving in and out of this hypnotic meter, landing occasionally on a careful chosen word to breathe deep. Such imagery! Very beautiful.
And then I got to the end.
I doubled over in laughter. You got me bad!
Excellent job poet. :-)
U P
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the fantastic review and the big sixer, Lynda. Yeah, I wanted to tell my little joke artistically, lol. I dearly appreciate the gracious rating, L. I'm glad you liked this silliness. have a great weekend.
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Oh, plus someone mentioned how whenever they went to my portfolio, they were tired of seeing the picture of my last post come up over and over so I gave them a prettier pic to look at. Lol. Thank you again.
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Lol!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem of gratitude. I have no knowledge of what can happen when one uses weed to smoke and how it can make one write master pieces. I think I should give it a try maybe I get to write at least one master piece. Lol.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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A very well-written poem of gratitude. I have no knowledge of what can happen when one uses weed to smoke and how it can make one write master pieces. I think I should give it a try maybe I get to write at least one master piece. Lol.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Lol. Thank you for the great review, Sandra. It was a long time ago but it did in some instances help me write better. Not sure why but it did. I really appreciate the generous stars. Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing this interesting poem. I got to the last line and had to go back and re-read to make sure I was understanding that the thing that sparked your muse was mary jane.
The photo threw me off, and the poem you wrote withoutthe use of a drug came out wonderfully. I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm and I wish you luck in the contest,
~Mustang Patty~
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Dear Anonymous Poet,
Thank you for sharing this interesting poem. I got to the last line and had to go back and re-read to make sure I was understanding that the thing that sparked your muse was mary jane.
The photo threw me off, and the poem you wrote withoutthe use of a drug came out wonderfully. I enjoyed the rhyme and rhythm and I wish you luck in the contest,
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Mustang Patty. When I found the picture it was bigger on my end. When looking closer at it, her cigarette looks to be more hand rolled than with a rolling machine so it looks a bit like a joint. Plus I wanted a sort of classy picture to go with the words, leading up to the silly ending. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. Have a wonderful weekend.
Comment from robyn corum
hahahaha!
Dear Mystery Toker.. er... Writer,
This was fresh and different and lots of fun. I enjoyed and I'[m sure it will stand out from the others in the voting booth. I'm wishing you lots of luck!!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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hahahaha!
Dear Mystery Toker.. er... Writer,
This was fresh and different and lots of fun. I enjoyed and I'[m sure it will stand out from the others in the voting booth. I'm wishing you lots of luck!!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Robyn. I really appreciate the gracious stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silliness. Have a great weekend.
Comment from Miss Sherry
The ending is quite a surprise, but I suppose one must thank the provider of inspiration. I am not sure what you meant by people judging work by skill and not silliness. I try, regardless of the content, to look at what skill the poet has. Having never indulged, I am no judge of what 'herb' does. Well-written!
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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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The ending is quite a surprise, but I suppose one must thank the provider of inspiration. I am not sure what you meant by people judging work by skill and not silliness. I try, regardless of the content, to look at what skill the poet has. Having never indulged, I am no judge of what 'herb' does. Well-written!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the great review Miss Sherry. There will be a few people who won't admire the work that went into it simply because of the silly content ending. Once they read that it's about weed it doesn't matter how well it was written, they won't bother reviewing it, I really appreciate the gracious stars, Sherry. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Oh, piffle - herb is just that - a natural growing item. I can't indulge as I have lung problems, though the docs have recommended it for my pain.
