Ghost
A True Story15 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Your poem really touched me with its tenderness and the strength of love between daughter and father. Ghostly memories will watch over us forever. My own father and I shared a close bond... he lived till he was 88 but his ghost is with me, I see him in the back yard and in his favourite old armchair. He lived with me for the past 8 years of his life.
My mother died when I was 15 but she never came back for me, although i was sure of her love for me. I think there is a special bond between a girl and her Dad.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Your poem really touched me with its tenderness and the strength of love between daughter and father. Ghostly memories will watch over us forever. My own father and I shared a close bond... he lived till he was 88 but his ghost is with me, I see him in the back yard and in his favourite old armchair. He lived with me for the past 8 years of his life.
My mother died when I was 15 but she never came back for me, although i was sure of her love for me. I think there is a special bond between a girl and her Dad.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading and for sharing your story with me.I believe you are right,. Dads and daughters share a strong bond. My dad was a gentle man in life and in death. Thanks again for reading my poem and for your kind words.
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Your dad sounds like mine... gentle.
Comment from Miss Sherry
My Grammy, the only one who ever loved me, comes to me in times of trouble. She soothes as your Dad does, because love never dies or ends...it lives with us always. You have done a beautiful job with this write. It touched me deeply.
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My Grammy, the only one who ever loved me, comes to me in times of trouble. She soothes as your Dad does, because love never dies or ends...it lives with us always. You have done a beautiful job with this write. It touched me deeply.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I'm glad you liked it. Thank you for reading my poem and for sharing your own story. :).
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You are so welcome!!
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Boogie,
This is a wonderful poem and a super contest entry that should fare very well. Best of luck!
What a tremendous gift you have been given to see your dad after he transitioned to spirit. Yes, I agree that he will always be with you.
Thanks for sharing
Jan
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hi Boogie,
This is a wonderful poem and a super contest entry that should fare very well. Best of luck!
What a tremendous gift you have been given to see your dad after he transitioned to spirit. Yes, I agree that he will always be with you.
Thanks for sharing
Jan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I believe that too. It.changed my life at 15. THANKS FOR READING.
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Absolutely life changing and likely intended to be. Jan :-)
Comment from Coco Jane
Touching poem. I am a total believer in ghosts such as the ones you describe. Sometimes they take the form of animals, especially birds. My sister-in-law saw a whole bunch (flock? gaggle? buttload? I looked it up--kaleidoscope) of monarch butterflies and knew they were her dad.
In line 12, you need to use "all right." Alright is not a word. Just a grammar thing!
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Touching poem. I am a total believer in ghosts such as the ones you describe. Sometimes they take the form of animals, especially birds. My sister-in-law saw a whole bunch (flock? gaggle? buttload? I looked it up--kaleidoscope) of monarch butterflies and knew they were her dad.
In line 12, you need to use "all right." Alright is not a word. Just a grammar thing!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thanks for the correction, I really appreciate it. Thank you also for such a nice review. :)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Our loved ones who have crossed over may be gone from this earthly realm, Anonymous Poet. However, they will never be forgotten by us nor us by them.
I like to believe they watch over us in a sense, making sure we're doing alright.
Our guardian angels, as it were.
That's a comforting thought.
Nice writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Our loved ones who have crossed over may be gone from this earthly realm, Anonymous Poet. However, they will never be forgotten by us nor us by them.
I like to believe they watch over us in a sense, making sure we're doing alright.
Our guardian angels, as it were.
That's a comforting thought.
Nice writing.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this nice review. I was in 3rd place, which is great! Thank you for reading.
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My pleasure. :)
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's nice to have that feeling of someone watching over you. We had a family friend die and every once in awhile something weird will happen at my parents house and we always say its him keeping us on our toes. You did a great job and I'm sure many can relate
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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It's nice to have that feeling of someone watching over you. We had a family friend die and every once in awhile something weird will happen at my parents house and we always say its him keeping us on our toes. You did a great job and I'm sure many can relate
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading. My sister recently passed away, and I was driving home after the funeral, when our favorite song that we always sang together came on the radio. It made me feel better and I think she had a hand in that.:)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really precious poem, but I'm not quite sure it will pass the CEC for the contest requirements, so you may need to be thinking of options for edits, jic. Since the contest asks for a poem where each line starts with the same letter, please notice that a lot of your lines 'bleed' over into a second line. That will often count as another line.
You may want to consider reducing your font?
Good luck!
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really precious poem, but I'm not quite sure it will pass the CEC for the contest requirements, so you may need to be thinking of options for edits, jic. Since the contest asks for a poem where each line starts with the same letter, please notice that a lot of your lines 'bleed' over into a second line. That will often count as another line.
You may want to consider reducing your font?
Good luck!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading. Thankfully my poem passed muster, as the contest already began. I appreciate your advice and the nice review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I identify with this beautiful piece you created here. I'm glad you found the comfort of his constant presence. I see 'signs' often, and cherish each and every one. You did a terrific job here. I wish you good luck in the contest...but whether it wins or not, it's still a memorable piece. xo
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I identify with this beautiful piece you created here. I'm glad you found the comfort of his constant presence. I see 'signs' often, and cherish each and every one. You did a terrific job here. I wish you good luck in the contest...but whether it wins or not, it's still a memorable piece. xo
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading and for your best wishes. My poem came in 3rd, which was great. Thanks again.
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Third is terrific! That was some stiff competition for everyone! Congratulations to you!
Comment from Michele Harber
First, I want to thank you. This poem very much hits home for me, as today is the one-year anniversary of my father's passing. I'm having a hard time with it; my nearly 15-year-old daughter is having a harder time. Your poem is very comforting to me, as I hope it will be to her when I show it to her.
As a poem, it is beautifully written. The meter and rhyme work perfectly. One of the best things about it is that I had to read it twice before I even realized I was reading a Pleiades Poem. In other words, although you followed the poetry form's requirements, I never saw seven lines starting with the same letter as the title but, rather, words that flowed smoothly and gracefully, and which were filled with emotion and love. The better poems are those where the meaning and emotion supersede the form while following it, and that's what you've accomplished. Good luck in the contest. You'll have my vote.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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First, I want to thank you. This poem very much hits home for me, as today is the one-year anniversary of my father's passing. I'm having a hard time with it; my nearly 15-year-old daughter is having a harder time. Your poem is very comforting to me, as I hope it will be to her when I show it to her.
As a poem, it is beautifully written. The meter and rhyme work perfectly. One of the best things about it is that I had to read it twice before I even realized I was reading a Pleiades Poem. In other words, although you followed the poetry form's requirements, I never saw seven lines starting with the same letter as the title but, rather, words that flowed smoothly and gracefully, and which were filled with emotion and love. The better poems are those where the meaning and emotion supersede the form while following it, and that's what you've accomplished. Good luck in the contest. You'll have my vote.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your kind words. I'm sorry for your loss, and I hope this poem makes you and your daughter feel better. Even now, all these years later, I still feel him near and believe that when I am troubled he helps me through. Thank you again for reading.
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Thank you. I feel my father too. Whether it's real or just wishful thinking, it makes me feel better. As promised, I voted for your poem.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
So heartbreaking that you lost your dad at such an early age. I can only image the lasting effect that came from your encounter with your dad after his death, giving you hope and reassurance to take you through life.
This is a beautiful Pleiades poem and a great, great contest entry!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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So heartbreaking that you lost your dad at such an early age. I can only image the lasting effect that came from your encounter with your dad after his death, giving you hope and reassurance to take you through life.
This is a beautiful Pleiades poem and a great, great contest entry!
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review and for your kind words.
