Renewal
the sparrow51 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
Hello Victor,
I'm a sucker for bird pictures and poems :) This sparrow makes me think of that song, His Eye is on he Sparrow. I can hear them singing it in my head. Yes, I'd love to be able to fly. I enjoyed your ending the best.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hello Victor,
I'm a sucker for bird pictures and poems :) This sparrow makes me think of that song, His Eye is on he Sparrow. I can hear them singing it in my head. Yes, I'd love to be able to fly. I enjoyed your ending the best.
Joy xx
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Joy.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Victor, Yeah, if we could just spout wings and fly out there. That would be a dream. But then again it's always good to have dreams. I liked your well composed poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hi Victor, Yeah, if we could just spout wings and fly out there. That would be a dream. But then again it's always good to have dreams. I liked your well composed poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Ulla.
Comment from rjuselius
this is a profound piece of poetry dear Doug! if only we could regain the wings of an angel in all its purity. but sinners we are, unfortunately.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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this is a profound piece of poetry dear Doug! if only we could regain the wings of an angel in all its purity. but sinners we are, unfortunately.
thank you for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Rebekka.
Comment from LisaMay
I so like the tone of wistful optimism in this simple/complex poem. The ability to fly away from our cares and start again, in a clearer reality. Your sparrow carries much symbolism.
In your notes, do you mean the right side of the brain for the magic of creativity?
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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I so like the tone of wistful optimism in this simple/complex poem. The ability to fly away from our cares and start again, in a clearer reality. Your sparrow carries much symbolism.
In your notes, do you mean the right side of the brain for the magic of creativity?
Comment Written 27-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Yes, I do. Thank you.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow! This is so simply written, with just the right amount of words, to say something so significant, and real. You captured me from the first line, and then take me, where you will, to a place of "innocence, and grin, and fly again?" I simply love this poem and every part of it. The artwork, the structure, the rhyme sequence, and the build-up to the final end, in all its glory. The message surpasses the poem, but not by much. You have written the quintessential philosophical poem. I'd give you more stars if I had them to give. Thank you for your enlightening "Renewal."
Take care, Jesse
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Wow! This is so simply written, with just the right amount of words, to say something so significant, and real. You captured me from the first line, and then take me, where you will, to a place of "innocence, and grin, and fly again?" I simply love this poem and every part of it. The artwork, the structure, the rhyme sequence, and the build-up to the final end, in all its glory. The message surpasses the poem, but not by much. You have written the quintessential philosophical poem. I'd give you more stars if I had them to give. Thank you for your enlightening "Renewal."
Take care, Jesse
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Jesus Jesse, what a review. Thank you. Doug
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Hello Doug
I'm glad you saw value in my review. I love your 'take' on life. And, you're welcome.
Jesse
Comment from rspoet
Hello Victor,
Yes, to be a sparrow and fly..
of course, birds eat bugs, which I don't care for too much
but flying for fun, and just because...
There are no Mulligans in life,
but there are dreams
Nicely written
Robert
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hello Victor,
Yes, to be a sparrow and fly..
of course, birds eat bugs, which I don't care for too much
but flying for fun, and just because...
There are no Mulligans in life,
but there are dreams
Nicely written
Robert
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Robert. No, I don't think we get a mulligan. But, then again, that is why we learn.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation,Victor.
-I like your poem, using the sparrow
as your reference for the questions.
-Effective use of rhyme and there
is a smooth flow to the poem.
-I like the opening verses about
taking the tears and the whys
and carting them all away.
-As you ponder reaching for
the sky, you get to the conclusion,
which shows the potential of happiness.
-Thanks for sharing this, and
making us think a little about
these well written ideas.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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-Nice image and presentation,Victor.
-I like your poem, using the sparrow
as your reference for the questions.
-Effective use of rhyme and there
is a smooth flow to the poem.
-I like the opening verses about
taking the tears and the whys
and carting them all away.
-As you ponder reaching for
the sky, you get to the conclusion,
which shows the potential of happiness.
-Thanks for sharing this, and
making us think a little about
these well written ideas.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Malerie
Beautiful, Renewal...."can you take these tears from my eyes." Great choice of pictures, the picture your selected immediately evokes the emotion that your words reveal. I like the way you ended this "What if we all could just...." thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Beautiful, Renewal...."can you take these tears from my eyes." Great choice of pictures, the picture your selected immediately evokes the emotion that your words reveal. I like the way you ended this "What if we all could just...." thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from geetha silvaratnam
Very nicely written and a very heart touching poem. How nice if we could all fly like the sparrow. The artwork is perfect for the poem. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Very nicely written and a very heart touching poem. How nice if we could all fly like the sparrow. The artwork is perfect for the poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thank you.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi there,
Your simple poem which asks that the main character is turned into a sparrow resonates deep inside of me.
How often have I wished to be able to fly away from all the mess?
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Hi there,
Your simple poem which asks that the main character is turned into a sparrow resonates deep inside of me.
How often have I wished to be able to fly away from all the mess?
Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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You and me both, Patty.