God Speaks
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Comment from Coco Jane
In interesting reflection.
In line 4, Knowledge removes three things: misconceptions, foul actions, and--His deeds to man? Is this what you intended?
In line 5, "for or at"--is this the right phrase?
In stanza 3, "and when we are unsuccessful" means the same as failures, doesn't it? Maybe that phrase can be removed. "Privately" and "secretly" also mean the same thing.
Stanza 4 is a great supplication. Maybe "removing" should be "to remove."
In stanza 7, "Manly human" seems redundant. Consider using just "human" or maybe "humane."
"Mortally immortal"--neat oxymoron there!
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In interesting reflection.
In line 4, Knowledge removes three things: misconceptions, foul actions, and--His deeds to man? Is this what you intended?
In line 5, "for or at"--is this the right phrase?
In stanza 3, "and when we are unsuccessful" means the same as failures, doesn't it? Maybe that phrase can be removed. "Privately" and "secretly" also mean the same thing.
Stanza 4 is a great supplication. Maybe "removing" should be "to remove."
In stanza 7, "Manly human" seems redundant. Consider using just "human" or maybe "humane."
"Mortally immortal"--neat oxymoron there!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi I like be your write. There will s so much in there that it will take me an entire day to bring down. This world and this life are both mysteries. One can explain it away in whatever way one want. But it does not necessarily mean one s right or wrong. For there is nothing like wrong or right here. Some say we are puppets or a moth bound to finish in the fire. Others say life is a glory, still say that it s all a play by God, he is the writer, the actor and the director and producer. Still it was is all a mystery and He wanted it to be so. He made provision for your curses and your discontents. He gave us free will and we are allowed to take any direction we choose. But if we choose, then we need to take the consequences too. If we silently follow his instructions, then he takes over your stresses and distresses.
Benny
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Hi I like be your write. There will s so much in there that it will take me an entire day to bring down. This world and this life are both mysteries. One can explain it away in whatever way one want. But it does not necessarily mean one s right or wrong. For there is nothing like wrong or right here. Some say we are puppets or a moth bound to finish in the fire. Others say life is a glory, still say that it s all a play by God, he is the writer, the actor and the director and producer. Still it was is all a mystery and He wanted it to be so. He made provision for your curses and your discontents. He gave us free will and we are allowed to take any direction we choose. But if we choose, then we need to take the consequences too. If we silently follow his instructions, then he takes over your stresses and distresses.
Benny
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Halfree
I read this posting several times....had problems. First lines...to whom is the poem addressing...talk with God..."teach us his words today..."somewhat confusing
Third verse, also very confusing " cause to us..."
Think the poem needs a rewrite. It seems to be just thoughts loosely connected.
Think a rewrite is needed for clarity of expression.
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I read this posting several times....had problems. First lines...to whom is the poem addressing...talk with God..."teach us his words today..."somewhat confusing
Third verse, also very confusing " cause to us..."
Think the poem needs a rewrite. It seems to be just thoughts loosely connected.
Think a rewrite is needed for clarity of expression.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from Elizabeth Johnson1
This is an excellent expression of how many are in their relationship with God. I fully believe prayers are only answered when He and only He knows it is the right thing.Many are so caught up in why me. Each piece of Life is a lesson or a blessing.
Thank you so much for sharing
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This is an excellent expression of how many are in their relationship with God. I fully believe prayers are only answered when He and only He knows it is the right thing.Many are so caught up in why me. Each piece of Life is a lesson or a blessing.
Thank you so much for sharing
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from The Death
It's a well written poem, which is thought provoking as well. Most of us blame God whenever any thing goes wrong, but we don't see our flaws. It's all about having faith in Him and doing the right thing. Your poem captures many such issues. I enjoyed reading it.
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It's a well written poem, which is thought provoking as well. Most of us blame God whenever any thing goes wrong, but we don't see our flaws. It's all about having faith in Him and doing the right thing. Your poem captures many such issues. I enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2019
Comment from kleck140
You deserve the best today.
Your poem is right on and tells us in an eloquent
way that the crime in this world needs God.
Thanks for sharing.
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You deserve the best today.
Your poem is right on and tells us in an eloquent
way that the crime in this world needs God.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
Comment from Tpa
This item is absolutely perfect for me. I must enjoy every single aspect of the item. I must leave that particular item and feel like I would tell someone about it, think about it or refer to it with confidence later during the day. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes. I would highly recommend this item to a friend.
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This item is absolutely perfect for me. I must enjoy every single aspect of the item. I must leave that particular item and feel like I would tell someone about it, think about it or refer to it with confidence later during the day. The Author has paid particular attention to the language used and the words were chosen. Every single grammar issue has been resolved and there are no spelling mistakes. I would highly recommend this item to a friend.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
Comment from Ben Colder
I need a six for this. Sorry. I am reminded of His word being a light before my path and how he lives within us who are His. Avery good stanza.
We innocently or deliberately make God responsible for or at our sufferings
In all cruelties and crime committed, we ignore our faults, and rush to God to save us
Treat God as our last resort, as we do it often, to save us from the losses incurred
Hourly, selfishly or proudly, we worship or pray to God for having peace in lives
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I need a six for this. Sorry. I am reminded of His word being a light before my path and how he lives within us who are His. Avery good stanza.
We innocently or deliberately make God responsible for or at our sufferings
In all cruelties and crime committed, we ignore our faults, and rush to God to save us
Treat God as our last resort, as we do it often, to save us from the losses incurred
Hourly, selfishly or proudly, we worship or pray to God for having peace in lives
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
Comment from Habib Oke
Talented writer! I don't know what more to say. You are just exceptional. I wonder if you have written all of these in a day or just in a sitting or at intervals for several days. You have described people's perception about God in just a few lines of poem well detailed. And to the prayer-words and requests in your poem, I say Aameen!
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Talented writer! I don't know what more to say. You are just exceptional. I wonder if you have written all of these in a day or just in a sitting or at intervals for several days. You have described people's perception about God in just a few lines of poem well detailed. And to the prayer-words and requests in your poem, I say Aameen!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
Comment from Sanku
I liked your last stanza best. Your heart felt prayer which reminded me of Tagore's poem."this is my prayer to thee my lord...."
Every request you made is relevant today .that is what we need today
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I liked your last stanza best. Your heart felt prayer which reminded me of Tagore's poem."this is my prayer to thee my lord...."
Every request you made is relevant today .that is what we need today
Comment Written 28-Jun-2019
