Man, an Animal?
Men are animals at times!4 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
According to science we are the highest functioning animals. But for some criminals this is not true. Or maybe their brains are just wired to be dangerous and lecherous.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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According to science we are the highest functioning animals. But for some criminals this is not true. Or maybe their brains are just wired to be dangerous and lecherous.
Good luck in the contest. Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading and your kind review. This was fun even though in the contest it didn't do very well. I don't mind because I love writing and have people like you, read.
Many blessings,
Mystery writer
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Don't mention it. I feel the same way about contests. I just love writing.
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Comment from sfharper
A little bit too violent in this poem, lol, I assume you mean with words, such as the hidden wonder that humans are animals. Good use of voice to carry through the poem.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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A little bit too violent in this poem, lol, I assume you mean with words, such as the hidden wonder that humans are animals. Good use of voice to carry through the poem.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Violence in slang only, not shooting. Thank you for reading and your kind review.
Many blessings,
Mystery writer
Comment from victor 66
Man is truly the most arrogant animal. How he/she thinks that they will not become extinct, is beyond me. We think we're so special when we have the same situation as every other creature on this earth, but we just don't know. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Man is truly the most arrogant animal. How he/she thinks that they will not become extinct, is beyond me. We think we're so special when we have the same situation as every other creature on this earth, but we just don't know. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading this. It may be disqualified because of the subject. But man is an animal, right? I wanted to be different.
Many blessings,
Mystery writer
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I don't believe you'll be disqualified. If you have followed the prompt rules, you should be fine.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Author,
Your image and verse are great here, except that your second line has eight, rather than seven, syllables. (If you adjust to conform, please private message me and I'll up rating. I have been off line for a few days ill, so I'm way behind on replies, hence the request for a pm.)
Very nicely done and it will make for a great contest entry if you adjust that second line.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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Hi Author,
Your image and verse are great here, except that your second line has eight, rather than seven, syllables. (If you adjust to conform, please private message me and I'll up rating. I have been off line for a few days ill, so I'm way behind on replies, hence the request for a pm.)
Very nicely done and it will make for a great contest entry if you adjust that second line.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 20-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2019
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I checked the second line, treacherous (3) beast(1) ego(2)trip(1)+ = 7
I did change the last line though.
Thank you for reading and the comments.
Many blessings,
Mystery Writer
