God Speaks
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Comment from Boogienights
This is an interesting g free verse poem that has a lot of good ideas. It makes a lot of valid points about man's relationship with God, but it feels a little disjointed to me. It's a style that I need to get used to. I like what it has to say though.
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This is an interesting g free verse poem that has a lot of good ideas. It makes a lot of valid points about man's relationship with God, but it feels a little disjointed to me. It's a style that I need to get used to. I like what it has to say though.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
Comment from Dean Kuch
There sure was a lengthy laundry list of rules accompanying this contest, DR ALCREATOR. I see that only one other entrant has decided to take you up on your challenge
So, now you have two entries rather than just your own, which is the poem I've just read here, I imagine.
I've found the less restrictive you make a contest to be for potential contestants the more likely your contest will be to fill up.
And isn't that the point of having a contest, after all? To allow people to express themselves in their own unique way?
Good luck...
~Dean
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There sure was a lengthy laundry list of rules accompanying this contest, DR ALCREATOR. I see that only one other entrant has decided to take you up on your challenge
So, now you have two entries rather than just your own, which is the poem I've just read here, I imagine.
I've found the less restrictive you make a contest to be for potential contestants the more likely your contest will be to fill up.
And isn't that the point of having a contest, after all? To allow people to express themselves in their own unique way?
Good luck...
~Dean
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from gsuarez
What a beautiful prayer asking God to help humanity who has fallen from Grace. Just as impressive is how you were able to stay within the parameters of an acrostic free verse. A job very well done.
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What a beautiful prayer asking God to help humanity who has fallen from Grace. Just as impressive is how you were able to stay within the parameters of an acrostic free verse. A job very well done.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from tfawcus
You have placed some interesting restrictions on the composition of this poem, in terms of the precise use of the word 'God '. I like your general theme of living morally and with a degree of tolerance.
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You have placed some interesting restrictions on the composition of this poem, in terms of the precise use of the word 'God '. I like your general theme of living morally and with a degree of tolerance.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Ross E Silke
I really like the theme of this poem and the moral standards and values you've raised here. You've used some good images. However, the poem is a bit difficult to read as you do not seem to use proper grammar in each sentence and words tend to repeat a lot. Try tightening your poem so the ideas come across more compacted which will help hold your readers attention. I question is English your first language? For example, the first stanza could be edited to read more properly where I've inserted proper punctuation and words in brackets () to help connect your thoughts and have it flow grammatically,
Walk (and) talk with God(--)guide us living
And let us know how to live today(--)God speak() to you
Look for, and freely go on(,) to walk and talk with God this day
Know the alphas, words, (and) lessons (that) teach us (how to live) on this earth
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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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I really like the theme of this poem and the moral standards and values you've raised here. You've used some good images. However, the poem is a bit difficult to read as you do not seem to use proper grammar in each sentence and words tend to repeat a lot. Try tightening your poem so the ideas come across more compacted which will help hold your readers attention. I question is English your first language? For example, the first stanza could be edited to read more properly where I've inserted proper punctuation and words in brackets () to help connect your thoughts and have it flow grammatically,
Walk (and) talk with God(--)guide us living
And let us know how to live today(--)God speak() to you
Look for, and freely go on(,) to walk and talk with God this day
Know the alphas, words, (and) lessons (that) teach us (how to live) on this earth
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you, I appreciate your wisdom.
Comment from Mustang Patty
A vey interesting free verse poem. Contests with such narrow rules are very hard to be creative in, and the process becomes awkward.
God is a wonderful subject though.
~Mustang Patty~
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A vey interesting free verse poem. Contests with such narrow rules are very hard to be creative in, and the process becomes awkward.
God is a wonderful subject though.
~Mustang Patty~
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Artasylum
Hey Alcreator Litt Dear... this is crazy good... I love that your acrostic is a paragraph unto itself... enjoyed and wishing you good luck in the contest... looking forward... yours, diana
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Hey Alcreator Litt Dear... this is crazy good... I love that your acrostic is a paragraph unto itself... enjoyed and wishing you good luck in the contest... looking forward... yours, diana
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This reads like a sermon you would hear in church and your faith obviously means a lot to you, righteous living can be achieved without belief in God, moral fibre is often lacking in society today, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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This reads like a sermon you would hear in church and your faith obviously means a lot to you, righteous living can be achieved without belief in God, moral fibre is often lacking in society today, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from A. Willow Bends
Out of sixes, sorry! When I saw this contest, I envisioned you winning it, based on what I read of yours in the past. You certainly have created a piece worthy of winning. This is very well done, all the requirements met, but I didn't count, no time. It is beautiful and Good Luck! Great Job!
Wendy
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Out of sixes, sorry! When I saw this contest, I envisioned you winning it, based on what I read of yours in the past. You certainly have created a piece worthy of winning. This is very well done, all the requirements met, but I didn't count, no time. It is beautiful and Good Luck! Great Job!
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
Comment from Cedar
This is a great spiritual message to your readers. We must try to understand the teachings of God and follow His word as best we can.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
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This is a great spiritual message to your readers. We must try to understand the teachings of God and follow His word as best we can.
Good luck in the contest...Bill
Comment Written 18-Feb-2019
