Buying Time for Ms. Darby
An apple a day....right?8 total reviews
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
This is cute. So nice of him to be concerned for his old teacher. This was a great way to use the writing prompt. Good luck in the contest. Cheers, Rhonda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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This is cute. So nice of him to be concerned for his old teacher. This was a great way to use the writing prompt. Good luck in the contest. Cheers, Rhonda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Kids are certainly a wonder! :) :) Thanx for the read and review, Rhonda -- so glad you enjoyed our little Chandler's point of view! ;) :) Yvette
Comment from Debbie Pope
I love your title. I think that you have a winner here just based on your title alone. Poor Ms. Darby. The way that kids think, she may just be in her late twenties. They think that everyone over twenty-five is over the hill.
At least Ms. Darby is liked enough to be thought of. Or young Chandler is just particularly kind. The fact that I am musing about your two characters indicates that your characterization is good, even given just 50 words to develop them.
To me, this is good dribble fiction. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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I love your title. I think that you have a winner here just based on your title alone. Poor Ms. Darby. The way that kids think, she may just be in her late twenties. They think that everyone over twenty-five is over the hill.
At least Ms. Darby is liked enough to be thought of. Or young Chandler is just particularly kind. The fact that I am musing about your two characters indicates that your characterization is good, even given just 50 words to develop them.
To me, this is good dribble fiction. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this little fruity dribble, ma'am -- reassures me that it had the right twist! :) ;) Thanx for dropping by on this one! ;) :)
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Oh, you again.:)))
Comment from Scarbrems
Out of the mouths of babes. This is a great entry for this fruity contest. I bet the teacher would be so pleased with her bag of apples, but less pleased with her pupil's reasoning.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Out of the mouths of babes. This is a great entry for this fruity contest. I bet the teacher would be so pleased with her bag of apples, but less pleased with her pupil's reasoning.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed! :) :) Thanx for the read and review and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from LisaMay
This is an entertaining, funny piece of logic from the schoolboy. Mind you, at his young age, all schoolteachers look old. Probably, poor Ms Darby is only about 45.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This is an entertaining, funny piece of logic from the schoolboy. Mind you, at his young age, all schoolteachers look old. Probably, poor Ms Darby is only about 45.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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You are so right, Lisa! :) :) Thanx for the read and review and have a wonderful evening! ;)
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Thank you!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks the story and makes us laugh about buying an apple is buying time for Ms. Darby, it will keep the doctors away from her for a week; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing; Happy Hug Day! -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This speaks the story and makes us laugh about buying an apple is buying time for Ms. Darby, it will keep the doctors away from her for a week; well said, well done. Keep Writing Inspire Changing; Happy Hug Day! -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed! :) :) Thanx for the read and review and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from Raul1
This is very good that you did this. Apples are healthy to eat. Chand looks like he has lots of apples. I like your story. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This is very good that you did this. Apples are healthy to eat. Chand looks like he has lots of apples. I like your story. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thanx for the read and review, Raul, and have a wonderful evening! ;)
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You're welcome! You too! :)
Comment from Christine C Autry
What a fun story. I enjoyed reading this. It made me smile. Sometimes it is nice not to be so serious. This story was very well written. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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What a fun story. I enjoyed reading this. It made me smile. Sometimes it is nice not to be so serious. This story was very well written. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed, Christine! :) :) Thanx for the read and review and have a wonderful evening! ;)
Comment from meeshu
This is a very good bit of flash fiction. It is humorous, unusual, clever and concise. Well done, I wish you well in the contest..
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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This is a very good bit of flash fiction. It is humorous, unusual, clever and concise. Well done, I wish you well in the contest..
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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So glad you enjoyed, dude! :) :) Thanx so much for the read and review and have a wonderful evening! ;)
