The Food Bank
These are sad economic times for many families.6 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Brigitte,
I like the onomatopoeia in the first line and the internal and end rhyme
in the last two. These words tell us how the hungry feel when they can get food at a food bank so they don't have to stay hungry.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
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Brigitte,
I like the onomatopoeia in the first line and the internal and end rhyme
in the last two. These words tell us how the hungry feel when they can get food at a food bank so they don't have to stay hungry.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
Comment from l.raven
there truly times when people need help...I have a friend who's husband hadn't been able to work...it's all they can do to survive...and the bills just keep going up...so they go to a food bank for help...thank God they are there for the...very well written...and he perfect picture...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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there truly times when people need help...I have a friend who's husband hadn't been able to work...it's all they can do to survive...and the bills just keep going up...so they go to a food bank for help...thank God they are there for the...very well written...and he perfect picture...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Our economic times are hard on families, so I felt this relevant. Thank you for reading and commenting. I hope your friend soon finds employment and enjoys better times.
Many blessings,
Anon
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Hi Anon, so do I...I hope they all find work that don't have any...you are so welcome...and blessing to you...love Linda xxoo
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Many blessings back. You are so sweet, wish I could meet you. I'm sure you would be a great friend.
Anon
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thank you...I'm sure we would be great friends...smiling...xxoo love
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:) Hugs,
Brigitte
Comment from sfharper
Wonderful social commentary on the plight of being poor and the wonderful gift of food banks. Good use of the 5-7-5 form. I especially like the image that goes with it. Enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Wonderful social commentary on the plight of being poor and the wonderful gift of food banks. Good use of the 5-7-5 form. I especially like the image that goes with it. Enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading. It is difficult to tell a tale with so few words. Our economic times prompted this write.
Have a blessed day.
Anon
Comment from JudyE
It must be awful to have hunger growling and roaring but no money for food. Although this is short (I know it is meant to be) I found it quite powerful. Well crafted.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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It must be awful to have hunger growling and roaring but no money for food. Although this is short (I know it is meant to be) I found it quite powerful. Well crafted.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reading. It is difficult to tell a tale with so few words. Our economic times prompted this write.
Have a blessed day.
Anon
Comment from estory
This was interesting in that you rhymed the last two lines, and it created a jingling, ringing effect. It was sort of a combination between haiku and more formal rhymed English couplets, and that's what got my attention. The subject matter is pretty deep and probably better in a short story. estory
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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This was interesting in that you rhymed the last two lines, and it created a jingling, ringing effect. It was sort of a combination between haiku and more formal rhymed English couplets, and that's what got my attention. The subject matter is pretty deep and probably better in a short story. estory
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Yes, the subject matter is deep. Today's plight of many should be a problem for all. Thank you for reading and your insightful comments.
Have a great evening.
Anon
Comment from RodG
Interesting timing. Our local food pantry was seeking donations at the grocery store this past weekend. Indeed many families do depend on such help.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Interesting timing. Our local food pantry was seeking donations at the grocery store this past weekend. Indeed many families do depend on such help.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Yes, the subject matter is deep. Today's plight of many should be a problem for all. Thank you for reading and your insightful comments.
Have a great evening.
Anon