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Comment from trimple
Good afternoon, Dear Tom
What a delightful poem. You have, over the years captured your everyday life in so many ways with your handy camera and poems and stories and general thoughts. A visual diary :)
Your author's notes are such a delight to read, Tom, and give your reader a greater knowledge of each of your chosen subjects.
This Cinquain poem lends its self well to nature :)
I have a couple suggestions that you may or indeed may not wish to consider--
as bright
as the flowers--
bright as
any flower?
In either case, a joy to read
kind regards
tracey
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Good afternoon, Dear Tom
What a delightful poem. You have, over the years captured your everyday life in so many ways with your handy camera and poems and stories and general thoughts. A visual diary :)
Your author's notes are such a delight to read, Tom, and give your reader a greater knowledge of each of your chosen subjects.
This Cinquain poem lends its self well to nature :)
I have a couple suggestions that you may or indeed may not wish to consider--
as bright
as the flowers--
bright as
any flower?
In either case, a joy to read
kind regards
tracey
Comment Written 15-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2019
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Thank you Tracey. That is a very good suggestion. It keeps the same sentiment, but eliminates the double "as". I like that, and will adopt you recommendation.
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Hehe
Always a pleasure, Our Tom :)
hugs
x
Comment from Joan E.
Yes, the photograph of the butterfly is indeed spectacular. Thank you for your notes on the Red Admiral and your creating the clever Butterfly Cinquain with the addition of rhyme as well. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Yes, the photograph of the butterfly is indeed spectacular. Thank you for your notes on the Red Admiral and your creating the clever Butterfly Cinquain with the addition of rhyme as well. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Joan. I didn't create it. Found it on the internet
But I like it.
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You certainly managed it well--thanks for sharing a variation on a form that I find very appealing, especially when it has a substantive title the way yours does. More cheers- Joan
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
The butterfly image is impressive as is the Butterfly Cinquain style.
You have used the butterfly as a fine muse.
Thank you for the detailed style notes-perhaps I'll try one too.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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The butterfly image is impressive as is the Butterfly Cinquain style.
You have used the butterfly as a fine muse.
Thank you for the detailed style notes-perhaps I'll try one too.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Shirley. Please do, sometime. Glad you liked the poem, the image, and the format. One of ther issues I had, is after I wrote it, one wing was much shorter than the other, so I had to replace the smaller word "as" with "while" and the word "to" with "through". Like so
As we hasten to your lovely
While we hasten through your lovely
That gave me the balance I needed.
Comment from ciliverde
Your post is a beautiful creation Tom, I like the Butterfly Cinquain form a lot, and the photo and poem together are wonderful. Butterflies are truly amazing creatures. Thanks you too for the information on the Red Admiral -who knew their interactions were so complex?!
Carol
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Your post is a beautiful creation Tom, I like the Butterfly Cinquain form a lot, and the photo and poem together are wonderful. Butterflies are truly amazing creatures. Thanks you too for the information on the Red Admiral -who knew their interactions were so complex?!
Carol
Comment Written 14-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Carol. They are amazing. Glad you liked my poem, the format, and the notes. I like dragonflies as well.
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Oh, me too - dragonflies are amazing! I recently heard that insect populations are dying off, it is quite alarming. Butterflies among the highest decline.
Comment from damommy
First of all, beautiful picture. I'd never heard of a Butterfly Cinquin, but I like it very much. I once had a butterfly land on my hand while I was sitting reading. He stayed for quite a while. I could see its little tongue flick in and out. Quite a moment.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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First of all, beautiful picture. I'd never heard of a Butterfly Cinquin, but I like it very much. I once had a butterfly land on my hand while I was sitting reading. He stayed for quite a while. I could see its little tongue flick in and out. Quite a moment.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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thank you damommy. They are very friendly, and have very long tongues for their size.Appreciate the review.
Comment from royowen
I like this butterfly cinquain, and never thought of expanding its horizons by adding four lines, it gives a greater dimension to an otherwise limited format, Thank you, great job I recently combined s suite of lantern poems to a variant on that form, successful I thought. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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I like this butterfly cinquain, and never thought of expanding its horizons by adding four lines, it gives a greater dimension to an otherwise limited format, Thank you, great job I recently combined s suite of lantern poems to a variant on that form, successful I thought. Well done, blessjngs, Roy
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Roy. I'll have to come over to your site and check it out when I get a chance.
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Well done
Comment from Pantygynt
A lovely poem for a lovely insect. We do get them in UK in the summer months but not as many as we did when I was a boy. It is the same here with all butterflies more's the pity.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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A lovely poem for a lovely insect. We do get them in UK in the summer months but not as many as we did when I was a boy. It is the same here with all butterflies more's the pity.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Jim. Yes, they have declined everywhere. I know that Monarchs are because of destruction of milkweed. These Red Admirals lay eggs in nettle.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Tom, that is really a beautiful Butterfly.
You were able to get this wonderful Picture
Of him. Thanks for the information about the
insect and his habitat. Nice poem. well done.
Nancy:)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Tom, that is really a beautiful Butterfly.
You were able to get this wonderful Picture
Of him. Thanks for the information about the
insect and his habitat. Nice poem. well done.
Nancy:)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Nancy. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written butterfly cinquain and what a wonderful honor to be visited by such a beautiful butterfly that seems to come especially to pose for a perfect picture.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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A very well-written butterfly cinquain and what a wonderful honor to be visited by such a beautiful butterfly that seems to come especially to pose for a perfect picture.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Sandra. I think you should have some there too, but they would be found in damp woodland areas.
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Beautiful poem, and fascinating format in the butterfly cinquain. You managed to catch the butterfly on the sidewalk in a lovely close-up photo which helped bring your poem to life. Good job!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Beautiful poem, and fascinating format in the butterfly cinquain. You managed to catch the butterfly on the sidewalk in a lovely close-up photo which helped bring your poem to life. Good job!
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2019
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Thank you Stephanie.
