Chasing The Rainbow
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Comment from AprilViolet
Excellent use of imagery in this poem. Also loved the use of the colors for each different stanza! Good luck in the contest! You have my vote!!!!!! :) :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Excellent use of imagery in this poem. Also loved the use of the colors for each different stanza! Good luck in the contest! You have my vote!!!!!! :) :)
Comment Written 13-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for this awesome review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Great meter and cadence and rhyme, a very true message, and I loved the picture and the colorful fonts. You thought of everything! Good luck to you with the contest. This is a wonderful entry.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Great meter and cadence and rhyme, a very true message, and I loved the picture and the colorful fonts. You thought of everything! Good luck to you with the contest. This is a wonderful entry.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your kind words..I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra Elizabeth Williams
I love the opening lines of your poem... "I followed my dreams to the rainbow's end,
expecting a pot of gold.
A wasted youth is all I got,
I searched 'till I grew old."
The rest is good guidance/philosophy and is admirable.
I enjoyed your presentation, it is a very good one and a good entry for the competition.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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I love the opening lines of your poem... "I followed my dreams to the rainbow's end,
expecting a pot of gold.
A wasted youth is all I got,
I searched 'till I grew old."
The rest is good guidance/philosophy and is admirable.
I enjoyed your presentation, it is a very good one and a good entry for the competition.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. :)
Comment from Denise Stoll
I am so impressed with how you present the rainbow as a parallel to dreams (goals). I can see your rainbow in my mind's eye but know from your other words that we don't always get what we aim for and thankfully sometimes the memories are even better. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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I am so impressed with how you present the rainbow as a parallel to dreams (goals). I can see your rainbow in my mind's eye but know from your other words that we don't always get what we aim for and thankfully sometimes the memories are even better. Well done!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Wow! Thank you so much for this great review and the six stars! It made my day. :)
Comment from Jennifer Carr
I like this poem and I think doing the stanzas in the rainbow colors is an absolutely brilliant idea. I kinda tossed around some ideas in my mind today but never came up with the prompt and of course, rainbows always make me think of dreams :)
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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I like this poem and I think doing the stanzas in the rainbow colors is an absolutely brilliant idea. I kinda tossed around some ideas in my mind today but never came up with the prompt and of course, rainbows always make me think of dreams :)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2019
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Thank you for such a nice review, I'm so glad you liked it. :)
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
What a delightful, bouncy, rhyming poem. A great contest entry. Best of luck to you in the voting booth!
I really like the ending, as it brings us full circle from silly youthfulness to a mature, wise outlook.
Nothing to suggest you consider improving upon. The image you selected complements your work very nicely.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Hi Mystery Author,
What a delightful, bouncy, rhyming poem. A great contest entry. Best of luck to you in the voting booth!
I really like the ending, as it brings us full circle from silly youthfulness to a mature, wise outlook.
Nothing to suggest you consider improving upon. The image you selected complements your work very nicely.
Thanks for sharing,
Jan
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your review and good luck wishes! :) I'm so glad you liked this poem.
Comment from Elizabeth Grey
This is a pleasant poem. The rhyme scheme and meter are smooth to read. I gave a presentation on rainbows. If you are interested in exploring more ideas like this, look up: snow dogs, the morning glory phenomenon, double rainbows, and solar pillars.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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This is a pleasant poem. The rhyme scheme and meter are smooth to read. I gave a presentation on rainbows. If you are interested in exploring more ideas like this, look up: snow dogs, the morning glory phenomenon, double rainbows, and solar pillars.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. I might just look that up! : ) Because you gave me fours stars I was wondering if you had any suggestions for improvement? I always appreciate constructive criticism because it helps me to grow as a writer. This poem is meant to be a metaphor and to be taken as a cautionary tale.
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I haven't written many reviews, and I am an English teacher, so I am not sure how detailed I should be in these comments. I don't want to overwhelm people or anything. Overall, I think the poem is nice and definitely is clearly cautionary. I don't want to sound too nit-picky but rainbows are made of water droplets and light, rather than air (although you see them in the air). In the second stanza, you start with "though" which indicates that an opposing idea is about to present itself but then the rest of it seems to all go together (the dreams are still intact and the person doesn't look back - two seemingly positive things). Perhaps it would help if there were a concrete problem presented that made the rainbow and the hope of gold truly appear to be a lie. Those are my thoughts. Sorry if it's too much.
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I really appreciate your reply. Please feel free to be as detailed and as honest as you want when writing reviews on this site. We are all here to learn and share. I think you have made some excellent points. Thank you so much. Have a great day. : )
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You too!
