Victor
An anapestic poem for Potlatch Poetry26 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
WEll I cant do this type but this is an amazing piece. I truly loved hearing his story and figuring out the syllable use. Very well done in rhyme and flow
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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WEll I cant do this type but this is an amazing piece. I truly loved hearing his story and figuring out the syllable use. Very well done in rhyme and flow
Comment Written 19-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2019
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Thank you. I think I like anapest best of all. It's fun to write. You can do it, too! I know you can.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Charmed, I Am
by Dawn (for Yvonne)<--hey, rhyme! lol
This rocking-horse meter is lots of good fun,
and so is the 'picture' of Vic in the sun.
In fact, had I seen this before t'was so late,
a six it would have! So deserved, I hate
that we only have six of the damned, awful things!
You see what the lack of those damned sixes brings?
I'm cussing and swearing! An old sailor's wife!
I guess that'll give you a glimpse of my life... (*grin*)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Charmed, I Am
by Dawn (for Yvonne)<--hey, rhyme! lol
This rocking-horse meter is lots of good fun,
and so is the 'picture' of Vic in the sun.
In fact, had I seen this before t'was so late,
a six it would have! So deserved, I hate
that we only have six of the damned, awful things!
You see what the lack of those damned sixes brings?
I'm cussing and swearing! An old sailor's wife!
I guess that'll give you a glimpse of my life... (*grin*)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2019
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Hahaha. What a delight you are! This is worth lots more than a six to me. Thank you so much. Victor thanks you, too. 8-)
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:))) You are such a good sport! :)))
Comment from LIJ Red
Excellent dah dah DUM stuff. And a charming Aardvark biography. I think I could say whatever I needed to utter with iambs and anapests, as a general rule...
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Excellent dah dah DUM stuff. And a charming Aardvark biography. I think I could say whatever I needed to utter with iambs and anapests, as a general rule...
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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I like them the best.
Comment from Treischel
This is a delightful Anapestic Verse about and Aardvark. The meter had a nice waltzing cadence. His romantic overtures made me smile. Loved the line about aardvark-dom. The time really jumps from young to old. I felt there should be a transition stanza that started something like: "As the years slowly passed..." explaining that the had kids and she died. Just a suggestion
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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This is a delightful Anapestic Verse about and Aardvark. The meter had a nice waltzing cadence. His romantic overtures made me smile. Loved the line about aardvark-dom. The time really jumps from young to old. I felt there should be a transition stanza that started something like: "As the years slowly passed..." explaining that the had kids and she died. Just a suggestion
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thank you for a glowing review. I'll remember about a transition stanza.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Enjoyed reading about Victor the Aardvark the champion ant eater, however, after reading your cute poem and the rules for the anapest challenge several times, my head still hasn't got round it. Well done with this Yvonne, much cleverer with these latest forms than me,
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Enjoyed reading about Victor the Aardvark the champion ant eater, however, after reading your cute poem and the rules for the anapest challenge several times, my head still hasn't got round it. Well done with this Yvonne, much cleverer with these latest forms than me,
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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No, you do them very well, too, Valda. Don't sell yourself short. Thank you for reviewing this.
Anapest isn't hard if you remember da da DUM da da DUM da da DUM da da DUM.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Yvonne, what a sweet Aardvark Victor is...sounds like he had a full life...for twenty one years...and now at the end of his years...he now waits to go see his sweet Emily at their resting place...see even critters have hearts...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love this precious picture...very nicely written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Hi Yvonne, what a sweet Aardvark Victor is...sounds like he had a full life...for twenty one years...and now at the end of his years...he now waits to go see his sweet Emily at their resting place...see even critters have hearts...I love your poem my sweet friend...and love this precious picture...very nicely written sweet girl...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Yes, critters have heart. Thank you for seeing that, and for a delightful review.
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Yes, critters have heart. Thank you for seeing that, and for a delightful review.
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you are soooo welcome...smiling...love xxoo
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh, Yvonne, that was so romantic and sweet. I love the picture of Victor Aardvark. (love the name and the choice of the letter from his name.) You have told a lovely story of how he met his hearts desire and settled down, had a family and enjoyed life together for 21 years, and now he is waiting to join his sweet Emily on the Great Mound. Your rhyme and rhythm is perfect, and all in all, it was a pleasure to read. Superb, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Oh, Yvonne, that was so romantic and sweet. I love the picture of Victor Aardvark. (love the name and the choice of the letter from his name.) You have told a lovely story of how he met his hearts desire and settled down, had a family and enjoyed life together for 21 years, and now he is waiting to join his sweet Emily on the Great Mound. Your rhyme and rhythm is perfect, and all in all, it was a pleasure to read. Superb, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Oh, wow, Sandra! Thank you so much. I'm so glad you like it. He's kind of a sweet little guy. lol
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Oh, wow, Sandra! Thank you so much. I'm so glad you like it. He's kind of a sweet little guy. lol
Comment from judiverse
You have such interesting poetry challenges. You did great work with yours. Funny to choose an aardvark. That adds to the interest of the poem, though. You describe Victor as he was back in his youthful days. Then he met the love of his life. Sounds like the perfect family, but now his Emily is gone. He can now enjoy the grand-aardvarks, though. judi
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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You have such interesting poetry challenges. You did great work with yours. Funny to choose an aardvark. That adds to the interest of the poem, though. You describe Victor as he was back in his youthful days. Then he met the love of his life. Sounds like the perfect family, but now his Emily is gone. He can now enjoy the grand-aardvarks, though. judi
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate it.
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Thank you for reviewing. I appreciate it.
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from Gloria ....
That lil feller is just so cuteee, even though I feel the need to steer clear of his sharp claws. ;-)
And what a delightful tale you tell in fine anapestic metre. You've met and exceeded the challenge with a most enjoyable poem.
Gloria
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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That lil feller is just so cuteee, even though I feel the need to steer clear of his sharp claws. ;-)
And what a delightful tale you tell in fine anapestic metre. You've met and exceeded the challenge with a most enjoyable poem.
Gloria
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. I'm always happy to know you like what I write. He IS cute despite that someone said he was ugly.
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;;
> I really enjoyed this well-written and sweet piece of poetry about an aardvark named Victor. One day join his family and the favorite mound just like the mountains surrounding Stonehenge. The larger the mound and how close it is to the nest is all great Aardvark really is. Chuckle!
> The joy just to build amounts closer to the Stonehenge as they were more important in their class of people.
> I really enjoyed and was very entertained, my friend, take care and have a good one.
Alx
> I enjoyed your anapestic meter Aad done with fluidity and smooth rhythm.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Cheers, Damommy;;
> I really enjoyed this well-written and sweet piece of poetry about an aardvark named Victor. One day join his family and the favorite mound just like the mountains surrounding Stonehenge. The larger the mound and how close it is to the nest is all great Aardvark really is. Chuckle!
> The joy just to build amounts closer to the Stonehenge as they were more important in their class of people.
> I really enjoyed and was very entertained, my friend, take care and have a good one.
Alx
> I enjoyed your anapestic meter Aad done with fluidity and smooth rhythm.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much.
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You're welcome Damommy And blessings to you and your family.
Ax
