Christian By Day
Metaphorical 5-7-5 for contest16 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ooooh! Good one!! Perfect syllable count, I love the picture, and the message rings true for OH-so many people we all know. Wonderful job with this, and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Ooooh! Good one!! Perfect syllable count, I love the picture, and the message rings true for OH-so many people we all know. Wonderful job with this, and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Rachelle. I really appreciate the gracious stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from sfharper
You paint a stark picture of an angel trying to protect someone then getting burned at the 12:00 call, when that person perhaps does something naughty. Enjoyed reading it. I like the change of view that occurs in the last line.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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You paint a stark picture of an angel trying to protect someone then getting burned at the 12:00 call, when that person perhaps does something naughty. Enjoyed reading it. I like the change of view that occurs in the last line.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review, sfh. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this little piece.
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO POET: I like your posting here in that it is brief, clear, and to the point. With only three lines and fourteen words you express a complete angelic story. This is good. I have imagined that our angel here turns into a phoenix. I suppose that it's because I dream up excuses for beautiful women who do, "HOT STUFF," to themselves. With any luck, they will then come to me...and light my fire. (smile) Thank you for sharing. God bless. Cordially: rhonnie69.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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HELLO POET: I like your posting here in that it is brief, clear, and to the point. With only three lines and fourteen words you express a complete angelic story. This is good. I have imagined that our angel here turns into a phoenix. I suppose that it's because I dream up excuses for beautiful women who do, "HOT STUFF," to themselves. With any luck, they will then come to me...and light my fire. (smile) Thank you for sharing. God bless. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2019
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Hey, Rhonnie, hi. Thank you for the fantastic review, friend. Yeah, she looks like she could light a fire or two, lol. I really appreciate the generous stars, R. Thank you again. Have a great day.
Comment from HealingMuse
Hi Mystery Author,
LOL - good one!
Very nicely done. Great image you've selected to complement your well-written verse.
Nothing here that I can see to suggest improving upon. It's great "as-is."
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
Jan
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Hi Mystery Author,
LOL - good one!
Very nicely done. Great image you've selected to complement your well-written verse.
Nothing here that I can see to suggest improving upon. It's great "as-is."
Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest,
Jan
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Jan. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this little piece. Have a great day.
Comment from Irish Rain
Well. I just love this.
Could be most of us, ha ha.
We try, but...I think we all have a bit of hell in us even so.
Excellent entry!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Well. I just love this.
Could be most of us, ha ha.
We try, but...I think we all have a bit of hell in us even so.
Excellent entry!
Blessings...
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the great review, Irish R. Yeah, I'm sure there's a little of this in everyone, lol. Have a great rest of your weekend.
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You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. While everything goes well it is good to be a Christian for many but when there is darkness many prefer the deceit of pleasure.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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A very well-written 5-7-5 poem. While everything goes well it is good to be a Christian for many but when there is darkness many prefer the deceit of pleasure.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thanks for sure. Thank you for the great review, Sandra.
Comment from LyndaS
First of all.... Loved the title of this piece. Even without art this title grabs you. The art on this is powerful and almost tells a story by itself. It sells the poem well. Your 5-7-5 is haunting. Your syllables easily glide within each other to tell this story. Can't tell if she's conflicted or a master of disguise. Yes, you made me think here. Which is the point, eh?
Very well done. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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First of all.... Loved the title of this piece. Even without art this title grabs you. The art on this is powerful and almost tells a story by itself. It sells the poem well. Your 5-7-5 is haunting. Your syllables easily glide within each other to tell this story. Can't tell if she's conflicted or a master of disguise. Yes, you made me think here. Which is the point, eh?
Very well done. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Wow, thank you so much for the excellent review and the big six, Lynda. I actually mixed a couple pictures together to get the one I needed, lol. I dearly appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked my little offering. Have a great rest of your weekend.
Comment from meeshu
gives the phrase "clipped her wings" new meaning. really nice adherence to the prompt rules. a great piece, all in all. good luck..
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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gives the phrase "clipped her wings" new meaning. really nice adherence to the prompt rules. a great piece, all in all. good luck..
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Lol, yes it does. Thank you fore the great review, Meeshu. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from Miss Sherry
This is very different. What I take away is that she is a fallen angel after midnight. A very stunning artwork that fits well with the verse. You have done well with the short form you had to work with. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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This is very different. What I take away is that she is a fallen angel after midnight. A very stunning artwork that fits well with the verse. You have done well with the short form you had to work with. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Yes, that's exactly what it's saying. Thank you for the great review and good luck wishes, Sherry. I'm glad you liked the piece.
Comment from seaglass
Hmmmm, this could certainly mean a lot of different things. my first thought was that this woman lives a double life church lady in the daytime and Bar Hopper at night...then another idea occurred maybe she just gets more fired up in her beliefs at night and gets more productive things done... Very interesting
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Hmmmm, this could certainly mean a lot of different things. my first thought was that this woman lives a double life church lady in the daytime and Bar Hopper at night...then another idea occurred maybe she just gets more fired up in her beliefs at night and gets more productive things done... Very interesting
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the fantastic review, seaglass. Your first thought was right, she's not quite the angel once nighttime comes. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked the piece.