After sundown
A French expression for after midnight2 total reviews
Comment from DragonSkulls
Thank you for entering my contest with this great entry, author. I do need you to revise it slightly though. One of the only two rules I had for the contest was that there could be no author notes. I see you actually have some. So if you could do a reedit and take them out, that would be great. Great entry but the rules need to be followed by everyone. Thank you.
DS
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Thank you for entering my contest with this great entry, author. I do need you to revise it slightly though. One of the only two rules I had for the contest was that there could be no author notes. I see you actually have some. So if you could do a reedit and take them out, that would be great. Great entry but the rules need to be followed by everyone. Thank you.
DS
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
Comment from rspoet
This could be an excellent 5-7-5 end entry for the contest
but syllables are off: move the 'and'
The dark, between dogs
[and] Wolves often together
In French they stand
Last lines also needs a syllable
Otherwise, well done
Good luck
RS
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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This could be an excellent 5-7-5 end entry for the contest
but syllables are off: move the 'and'
The dark, between dogs
[and] Wolves often together
In French they stand
Last lines also needs a syllable
Otherwise, well done
Good luck
RS
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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I have taken advice on a website. Of course you are
a native speaker but this time, I am not sure that you are
on the good path.