Battery
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Comment from elmorose
I needed to come across your writing today, it was fate. I am concerned by my sister's gradual decline into dementia, and your well written poem helps me to understand some aspects. I am glad that you have made it to the other side of this painful episode. Your gift for writing must be quite a blessing right now.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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I needed to come across your writing today, it was fate. I am concerned by my sister's gradual decline into dementia, and your well written poem helps me to understand some aspects. I am glad that you have made it to the other side of this painful episode. Your gift for writing must be quite a blessing right now.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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It has been a real Blessings for sometime now. I thank you for the kind words and wish you and your sister well. I had hopes this writing would help others, Blessings, Barbara.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written heartfelt poem. When there were many bad things in our lives, I think it will be a blessing to forget about the hurtful horror times and just live in a state of no thoughts or memories.
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A very well-written heartfelt poem. When there were many bad things in our lives, I think it will be a blessing to forget about the hurtful horror times and just live in a state of no thoughts or memories.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
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You got it dear Sandra. It is a Blessing. Blessings to you. Barbara
Comment from seaglass
The only thing I can think of worse than experiencing battery is having to relive it through the memories. So glad you were able to conquer them. Thank you for sharing.
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The only thing I can think of worse than experiencing battery is having to relive it through the memories. So glad you were able to conquer them. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you for your insightful words. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Joanna S. Blue
You are so honest and so generous to share your struggles. "memories would hit
me like bullets . . ." is so effective. I would imagine that writing helps you get to
your inner core.
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You are so honest and so generous to share your struggles. "memories would hit
me like bullets . . ." is so effective. I would imagine that writing helps you get to
your inner core.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
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It does ideed help and I hope this will perhaps help others in some way. Thank you and Blessings, BarbaraThank you
Comment from Cole King
Great poem. It really captures the subject matter well. I might suggest switching some of the terms for "mind" around a bit. In line nine, maybe try "my psyche". Then in line eleven, I would use "injuries to the mind". This would add a bit of end rhyme to lines nine and ten with "me" and "psyche". It would add some alliteration between lines eleven and twelve with "mind" and "much". Just some thoughts.
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Great poem. It really captures the subject matter well. I might suggest switching some of the terms for "mind" around a bit. In line nine, maybe try "my psyche". Then in line eleven, I would use "injuries to the mind". This would add a bit of end rhyme to lines nine and ten with "me" and "psyche". It would add some alliteration between lines eleven and twelve with "mind" and "much". Just some thoughts.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you Cole. I appreciate the input and I will consider it. I dislike too much repetition. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Ogden
Your writing is welcome proof the dementia medicine is an effective treatment for the condition your poem describes (quite well, indeed). Keep up the good work, Lovnpeace!
Ogden (Don)
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Your writing is welcome proof the dementia medicine is an effective treatment for the condition your poem describes (quite well, indeed). Keep up the good work, Lovnpeace!
Ogden (Don)
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you Ogden. I hope this work helps someone. Blessings, Barbara
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You are most welcome, Barbara.
Best wishes,
Don
Comment from Chris Davies
That was so interesting. My husband took those medications and he used to ask me the strangest questions. I never knew why. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. The picture was perfect, too. Best wishes.
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That was so interesting. My husband took those medications and he used to ask me the strangest questions. I never knew why. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. The picture was perfect, too. Best wishes.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you Chris for sharing. I hope this helps someone. in some way. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Sally Law
Dear Barbara, what a trauma retold here. I continue to uphold you in prayer. Jesus can heal the mind, anything really. I am glad these did not last long and pray for restored peace. Your art selection was again the set up for the delivery of your deep and fine poetry.
All my best,
Sally
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Dear Barbara, what a trauma retold here. I continue to uphold you in prayer. Jesus can heal the mind, anything really. I am glad these did not last long and pray for restored peace. Your art selection was again the set up for the delivery of your deep and fine poetry.
All my best,
Sally
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much Sally. Your kind words mean so much. I am in the hope this can help others. Blessings, Barbara
Comment from Bill Pinder
We do have a "fragile core", and I agree that it is extremely painful to keep reliving hurtful memories from the past. I'm thankful for God's grace that we can die to them overtime, but it is still a battle.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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We do have a "fragile core", and I agree that it is extremely painful to keep reliving hurtful memories from the past. I'm thankful for God's grace that we can die to them overtime, but it is still a battle.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
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Amen Bill.
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Amen
Comment from Sugarray77
You have shared a personal and vivid write, Barbara. Well done on conveying these sentiments in a logical manner. Your artwork is perfect and a great enhancement to your poem. Well done.
Melissa
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You have shared a personal and vivid write, Barbara. Well done on conveying these sentiments in a logical manner. Your artwork is perfect and a great enhancement to your poem. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you Melissa. I hope this might help others, Blessings, Barbara
