Teenagers Today
Do not dismiss or write them off...please17 total reviews
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really cool post and makes some very important arguments in favor of our troubled teens. Although the message is a bit garbled (sorry!) because of the alliteration, it is still clear enough to understand. And it's one we all should heed. Thanks and good luck!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Dear Mystery Writer,
This is a really cool post and makes some very important arguments in favor of our troubled teens. Although the message is a bit garbled (sorry!) because of the alliteration, it is still clear enough to understand. And it's one we all should heed. Thanks and good luck!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Gaaaah...I seriously felt like a child with a stuttering problem after I read it through a few times...LOL! ;) Thanx for the review, Robyn, and for the smile -- both much appreciated! ;) ;)
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Very nice job writing an alliteration celebration poem. Toxic tale of tortured teenaged telephone terrors. Best of luck in the contest, you should do well!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Very nice job writing an alliteration celebration poem. Toxic tale of tortured teenaged telephone terrors. Best of luck in the contest, you should do well!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thanx so much for your review and for joining in the "T-write" madness -- LOL! :) ;) Take care! :)
Comment from lyenochka
Terrific t-text! Yes, there are so many stresses due to being overly plugged in today's teen life. I think you did a marvelous job presenting the tension these kids feel. Great message! Best to you in the contest!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Terrific t-text! Yes, there are so many stresses due to being overly plugged in today's teen life. I think you did a marvelous job presenting the tension these kids feel. Great message! Best to you in the contest!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the review and your wonderful comments, Helen -- always appreciated! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
He he he, told with tantalising truth here! I wish you luck with the contest, torturous telephones hold us to ransom these days, well said, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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He he he, told with tantalising truth here! I wish you luck with the contest, torturous telephones hold us to ransom these days, well said, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you for the review, Dolly, and for your sunshine comments - always appreciated! :)
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Teens today need help, and that is a fact that you well stated in your perfect alliteration poem. This was a very hard contest, I believe, but you pulled it off. I could actually make sense of what you were saying.
I do not like teens having such ready access to Snapchat, Twitter, Facebook, Instagram, etc.. I think it promotes bad, immoral, self-destructive behaviors as being the cool thing to do in order to fit in and be accepted. It is also not a safe environment for the teens.
I could go on, but I'd rather focus on how appreciative I am of this poem and tell you what a GREAT job you did.
This is a super great contest entry!
Gale
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Teens today need help, and that is a fact that you well stated in your perfect alliteration poem. This was a very hard contest, I believe, but you pulled it off. I could actually make sense of what you were saying.
I do not like teens having such ready access to Snapchat, Twitter, Facebook, Instagram, etc.. I think it promotes bad, immoral, self-destructive behaviors as being the cool thing to do in order to fit in and be accepted. It is also not a safe environment for the teens.
I could go on, but I'd rather focus on how appreciative I am of this poem and tell you what a GREAT job you did.
This is a super great contest entry!
Gale
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review and your insightful comments, Gale -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from Chris Davies
Good job! You got a lot of words in and the poem actually made sense! Not an easy feat. Perfect picture for the theme. Good luck with the contest - I wish you good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Good job! You got a lot of words in and the poem actually made sense! Not an easy feat. Perfect picture for the theme. Good luck with the contest - I wish you good luck.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Making sense is a good thing! LOL!! :) ;) ;) Thank you so very much for your review and your awesome comments, Chris -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from alf collier
This is not only great alliteration, but has a wonderful flow...and makes sense!! Really enjoyed reading this piece. Bravo!!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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This is not only great alliteration, but has a wonderful flow...and makes sense!! Really enjoyed reading this piece. Bravo!!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you so very much for your review, alf -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from JennaG
This piece really hit home with me. I have an 11 year old son. He's not too far from being a teenager and I worry about so much of what you've written here, especially the bullying that goes on in social media. This poem is very well written. You've managed to write a powerful piece despite the strict requirements of this prompt. That is definitely hard to do! Well done! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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This piece really hit home with me. I have an 11 year old son. He's not too far from being a teenager and I worry about so much of what you've written here, especially the bullying that goes on in social media. This poem is very well written. You've managed to write a powerful piece despite the strict requirements of this prompt. That is definitely hard to do! Well done! Best of luck to you in the contest! :)
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Wow! :) ;) Thank you so very much for your review and wonderful comments, Jenna -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from Mark D. R.
Incredible that you could extend this alliterative t-letter for the entire verse! Lots of great words and phrases. Your note just adds to the overall effect. Wow!
I had attempted to do the same in my published e-book, "Animals Become Chatty," but my title for each letter-page of the illustrated alliteration book was just 5-7 words!
My guess it will be a terrific entry. Good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Incredible that you could extend this alliterative t-letter for the entire verse! Lots of great words and phrases. Your note just adds to the overall effect. Wow!
I had attempted to do the same in my published e-book, "Animals Become Chatty," but my title for each letter-page of the illustrated alliteration book was just 5-7 words!
My guess it will be a terrific entry. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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You are so awesome awarding those shining stars, Mark!! :) ;) Thank you so very much for your review and wonderful comments, sir -- much appreciated! :) ;)
Comment from KyColonel Randal
Thank you for sharing this poem. I am simply amazed at the quality entries coming out of this prompt. Your presentation is very nice as well: you have a relevant illustration and good contrast between background and font which have been changed from the default. Your informative author's notes are also a pleasure to read. Good luck with your contest entry!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you for sharing this poem. I am simply amazed at the quality entries coming out of this prompt. Your presentation is very nice as well: you have a relevant illustration and good contrast between background and font which have been changed from the default. Your informative author's notes are also a pleasure to read. Good luck with your contest entry!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
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Thank you so very much for your wonderful comments, KyColonel -- please know that they are much appreciated! :) ;)
