Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

I feel your pain, except in my case it's more, 'My thoughts don't rhyme, I can't do the structure, I ain't a poet'. Love the musicality of
'Thoughts are
fleeting, each competing;' Made me think about 'Westward leading, still proceeding', now I've got 'we three kings' stuck in my head'.


No hot shot? I beg to differ.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019

I often read a sequence of words or sounds in someone's poem, and it reminds me of some unrelated song, poem or line from a story. Do you think he is guiding you to his perfect light, Emma?

Many thanks for the lovely review.

Craig

reply by Scarbrems on 09-Feb-2019

Always, Craig, Always.

Comment from tbacha58

Excellent

OK, you don't have to make it rhyme if it is not there one day you will see it happen on its own. Exciting poem to enter this particular contest. I liked the way you added the picture and your thoughts underneath. Good luck. Terry.

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thanks very much, Terry. Much appreciated -- Craig

Comment from alf collier

Exceptional

Oh my how I smiled as I read this!!! Takes one to know one, and I recognize the lament so succinctly described!! Best of luck in the contest, my friend. It has been too long since I read your poetic flow!!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thanks so much for the glowing rating and terrific comments, Alf. Not to mention the good luck wishes. Nice to hear from you again :) Cheers, Craig

reply by alf collier on 07-Feb-2019

Yeah, I've been gone too long!!

Comment from bichonfrisegirl

Excellent

This is a fun entry for the Nonet contest, Craig ... and you said that you weren't good at writing Nonets. I think that you did a great job with this one. I especially like the command of "Write Them Down!". It adds impact to your poem. Syllable count for each line is spot on, and you've made excellent use of enjambment.

Great job. Good luck in the contest!

Cheers,
Connie

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019

Thanks so much for the lovely comments and the kind wishes, Connie. It's not a form I'm all that comfortable with, but I think I might be getting a bit better :)

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from --Turtle.

Exceptional

Hey, Craig

I'm not an expert on forms... or meter... or, well... I'm not an expert on anything. : )

I enjoyed this entry, because I see the lime/rhyme rhyme, but because of the form there's a record skip sensation that gives an initial sensation of breaking rhyme (visually) and in the pace caused by the fast, punchy inner rhymes.

You almost get to have your cake and eat it too with the lime/ rhyme... being accurate that it's rhyming, but also having a freestyle bucking of... obscured enough that there's a sensation of breaking what word I was on the roll of expecting to rhyme.... like with shot... or down.

I thought it worked well with the secret wish to be able to freeverse it.

(Not that I would be able to spot freeverse, though.)

Anyway, I read your entry and it was very entertaining. Even if I got it all wrong, I got a kick at they feeling the need to rhyme, yet the rhyme being hidden, and the theme being a want to freeverse too.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019

You didn't get it wrong, Turtle. In fact, I can't recall the last time you did. Also, I'm sure you're expert at quite a few things. Maths, for starters (I think you call it math, there). I'm sure you're not too shabby at parenting, either. And then there's writing excellent sci-fi. And writing perceptive and helpful reviews. Thanks for yet another brilliant one. Craig

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Craig, this is a great entry for the contest. I can hear and feel the fright in your wonderful Nonet. Yeah, you still have to make it rhyme but time is running out. I loved it. Good luck. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019

Haha, time has run out, Ulla! Thanks so much for the fun review, I appreciate the lovely comments.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This nonet, I Wish I Were a Freeverser, has the proper nine-t-one descending syllable formatting and ironically creates the patterned verse and sneaks in the important ending word. Nice.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019

Thanks very much, Bill. Most grateful, Craig

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

So this is the entry, huh? I love it. You lived up to all my expectations for your Nonet. Sorry to put that pressure on you. I always suspected that you speak, or at least think, in rhyme. This sort of confirms my suspicion. I think you will win with this one. It's clever, unusual, and fun. I love all the internal rhymes that find their way into your words. Sadly, I am out of six stars. I haven't felt much like writing this week. Been doing a lot of reviewing.
My fingers are crossed for you.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2019

Yes, it's true, about my thought. Seems it rhymes more than it ought :)

You've been doing well with the writing you HAVE done this week, Debbie. Congrats on the wins.

Thanks for a lovely review.

Craig

reply by Debbie Pope on 06-Feb-2019

I enjoy writing the little daily ones. I just can't make myself write something over 3 lines and 17 syllables. Even the 20 syllable contest has been too much for me.

Comment from Dorinda Palmisano

Exceptional

Six stars for your fun use of words and your extraordinary rhyme. I was so drawn into the read by it. Thanks for making me read this over and over to absorb again and again the cadence and the rhyme. Very clever.

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019

I'm so glad you took the time to reread it until the rhyme sunk in. I think quite a number of people didn't pick up on that. Thank you for the wonderfully kind assessment, and the generous rating. Your review has made my day :)

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Hi Craig, you crack me up. Yes, I think free verse is like a good jazz improvisation or a jam session, where you let the rhythm and images take you on a ride into the unknown. I write it best when I'm in the wee morning hours. When I overthink it, that's when it reads structured or arhythmic. Great nonet with an irregular rhyme scheme. Free style?

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2019

Hehe, now you're going to go and make me tell all my secrets, Pam. Well, one of them anyway, not that anyone would really benefit from knowing, or want to know.

I figured a nonet has 45 syllables in total, so I decided to make it three "stanzas" of 15 (never mind the lines, just count syllables). "Stanza" 1, which ends with "lime", rhymes with stanza 3 - ending with "rhyme". I threw in some internal rhymes just for fun.

If you read it not paying heed to the physical layout, I think it's pretty standard meter and rhyme.

There, you didn't really want to know that, did you?

Thanks for the lovely review. I'm happy to leave the free verse mostly to you and others who, like you, excel at it. I don't like it when I write it.

Cheers,
Craig