My True Wealth
Yep, I am loaded.39 total reviews
Comment from nuzhatshireen
Its story of a brave woman. She struggled with hope from life. My own written poem for you.
Beam of hope
Keep in heart
having no fear
you will win
In dark
It will shine
like full moon
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Its story of a brave woman. She struggled with hope from life. My own written poem for you.
Beam of hope
Keep in heart
having no fear
you will win
In dark
It will shine
like full moon
Comment Written 14-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2019
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Thank you very much for the kind review and poem. It is so appreciated.
Sending you my best today as well,
Sally
Comment from aanneee
Absolutely brilliant and beautifully told. Thank you so much for sharing your life story here. Totally held my attention and put a big old smile on my old face...Dinah
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Absolutely brilliant and beautifully told. Thank you so much for sharing your life story here. Totally held my attention and put a big old smile on my old face...Dinah
Comment Written 01-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2019
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Dear Dinah, thank you for the wonderful review and kindest compliments. I?m so pleased you enjoyed my older post. You must be viewing me from the top story ranking. I appreciate your time, and again, the kind review.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally Law xo
Comment from David R. Davis
Thank you for the story. The line "I also witnessed things... too much for a little one to bear, in my opinion." Very powerful sentence. I would suggest you consider removing the "in my opinion." The sentence is powerful and true without qualifier. I also liked that you spoke of the kindness of the apartment landlord. We need to reinforce that there is goodness in this world. This is picky on my part, but the sentence that ends with "with a scant bone, and prime rib" makes it sound like the soup also had prime rib. I know you were comparing the poverty and riches, perhaps rearranging the sentence structure. The last two lines brought the story together very nicely. Very nice job with the story and with the writing. Very well told. Go well.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
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Thank you for the story. The line "I also witnessed things... too much for a little one to bear, in my opinion." Very powerful sentence. I would suggest you consider removing the "in my opinion." The sentence is powerful and true without qualifier. I also liked that you spoke of the kindness of the apartment landlord. We need to reinforce that there is goodness in this world. This is picky on my part, but the sentence that ends with "with a scant bone, and prime rib" makes it sound like the soup also had prime rib. I know you were comparing the poverty and riches, perhaps rearranging the sentence structure. The last two lines brought the story together very nicely. Very nice job with the story and with the writing. Very well told. Go well.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2019
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2019
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind encouragement. It is so appreciated. I made the improvements you suggested, too. I?m a new writer( one year) as blindness is taking my sight and altering my career. I appreciate your helpful critiques and good eyes.
Sending you my best today as well,
Sally :+)
Comment from Ma-Jali Mbali
I have mixed feelings about this story and I'm mindful of the fact that what I don't like about it probably represents cultural differences between British and American people but then it's useful for you to know how to write for and appeal to British markets too :-)
What I liked: your writing is wonderful. Very natural and effortless feeling, not at all contrived which makes it feel all the more personal. I loved the honesty of your account and enjoyed reading it.
What I didn't like: this could really be phrased 'what made me feel uncomfortable'. British people feel very uncomfortable with the very direct way in which Americans express their love for Christ. I'm actually a Christian, child of a priest, who goes to church weekly and prays daily yet still I find the sentence, "Jesus Christ did that for me. He showed me how to love him back and to love others" cringe-inducing. It just feels corny and insincere to me, slightly moralistic and it's jarring considering the rest of your piece is so honest.
Overall though the positive message at the end of your writing made me feel joy and that's a great gift to give readers. Thank you for sharing your writing and I hope you take my comments in the constructive manner in which they are intended.
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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I have mixed feelings about this story and I'm mindful of the fact that what I don't like about it probably represents cultural differences between British and American people but then it's useful for you to know how to write for and appeal to British markets too :-)
What I liked: your writing is wonderful. Very natural and effortless feeling, not at all contrived which makes it feel all the more personal. I loved the honesty of your account and enjoyed reading it.
What I didn't like: this could really be phrased 'what made me feel uncomfortable'. British people feel very uncomfortable with the very direct way in which Americans express their love for Christ. I'm actually a Christian, child of a priest, who goes to church weekly and prays daily yet still I find the sentence, "Jesus Christ did that for me. He showed me how to love him back and to love others" cringe-inducing. It just feels corny and insincere to me, slightly moralistic and it's jarring considering the rest of your piece is so honest.
Overall though the positive message at the end of your writing made me feel joy and that's a great gift to give readers. Thank you for sharing your writing and I hope you take my comments in the constructive manner in which they are intended.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2019
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Nothing here is corny or insincere, this is my story of true faith. In the future, please refrain from reviewing my works.
Sally
Comment from Sam Frearson-Tubito
Hi Sally, I couldn't agree with you more. How wonderful to have such riches in your life in your husband, children, and grandchildren. I feel I am as blessed as you. I have a wonderful husband and four loving children. I feel truly wealthy in life. Hope you are having a great summer. Best, Sam.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hi Sally, I couldn't agree with you more. How wonderful to have such riches in your life in your husband, children, and grandchildren. I feel I am as blessed as you. I have a wonderful husband and four loving children. I feel truly wealthy in life. Hope you are having a great summer. Best, Sam.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Thank you for stopping by my older article and leaving such a wonderful review, Sam. It is a blessing to hear of your great wealth, too.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Darlene BoClair
Hello Sally! I enjoyed reading your family story. I love to read. I want to write. I am grateful to take the time to read the writing of a top ranked author. I have taken notes about the sentence structure and perfect grammar. I praise the family photo you shared. Blessings for the Love!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Hello Sally! I enjoyed reading your family story. I love to read. I want to write. I am grateful to take the time to read the writing of a top ranked author. I have taken notes about the sentence structure and perfect grammar. I praise the family photo you shared. Blessings for the Love!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Aren?t you just a dear! I am so pleased you enjoyed my story. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. It means so much. By the way, welcome to FanStory. I am fanning you now and hope to see you writings very soon.
Sending you my best today, as always,
Sally xo
Comment from Bill Pinder
This is exceptional writing that presents the truth in a simple, non-confrontational way. I appreciate how you have seen God's love and blessings in your own life and family. Thanks for sharing with everyone.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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This is exceptional writing that presents the truth in a simple, non-confrontational way. I appreciate how you have seen God's love and blessings in your own life and family. Thanks for sharing with everyone.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for the kind review and outstanding rating. I am glad you were able to appreciate my true story and glimpse into my life. My love for Jesus is central to my writing as He has made all the difference.
Fanning you now. I am a blind writer and keep my fans close to me for reviewing. I look forward to catching up with your writing, as well.
Have a blessed day and thank you, again.
Sally :+)
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You are very welcome!
Bill
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
I don't know how I got passed this one in my mailbox! I was looking at the booth at what I could vote for and when I saw your name, I thought, let me see what Sally wrote! We share a lot in common as my dad was a drinker too growing up. While I haven't read everyone's story, I will vote for you for many reasons as this is your true story of what great wealth truly is and I'm glad you have it. You write very well and clear with a strong moral background. I enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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I don't know how I got passed this one in my mailbox! I was looking at the booth at what I could vote for and when I saw your name, I thought, let me see what Sally wrote! We share a lot in common as my dad was a drinker too growing up. While I haven't read everyone's story, I will vote for you for many reasons as this is your true story of what great wealth truly is and I'm glad you have it. You write very well and clear with a strong moral background. I enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2019
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Ah, thank you dear Kathleen. I am deeply honored by you. Your kinds words lift my spirits! I am sorry to hear about your circumstances. Is your dad still living?
Dad died January 1, 1976 of cirrhosis of the liver. He was resident at the Atlanta Resuce Mission. Years later, my siblings and I bought and placed a headstone on his grave. He died a pauper. My husband, nor my children, have ever met him. I did share the gospel with him and send him a bible. We spoke on the phone about the saving power and forgiveness of Jesus Christ. He said he asked for forgiveness, so, I just trust that I may possibly see him if that was true. I hope so.
Thanks again for the sweet compliments.
Love, Sal
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No, both my parents have passed away. He redeemed himself from those bad years and I did all I could do to lead him to the Lord so I hope and pray to see him on the other side as well. Hope you win, I voted for you!
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Thank you! That means so much! I am glad to hear about your dad. That is good news!!
Comment from WryWriter
Love is the mother load of wealth and I am so glad you have it in your life. You've written this story beautifully. The photo is fabulous. I so enjoyed reading this.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019
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Love is the mother load of wealth and I am so glad you have it in your life. You've written this story beautifully. The photo is fabulous. I so enjoyed reading this.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much for outstanding review and kind words. Love IS the mother load of wealth...I love that! My family are my jewels in this world. I can see you have found this kind of love, too.
All my best to you and those you love,
Sally :+)
Comment from Scarbrems
Yep. I've never had the kind of monetary wealth you describe, but I've always had a roof over my head, and have never been materialistic beyond that. It's just stuff, it don't mean a thing without good friends and family. Crass, materialist capitalism has overtaken the Western world, where we are judged by the THINGS we have, not the people we have. A good write, reminding us that monetary wealth is not the key to happiness
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Yep. I've never had the kind of monetary wealth you describe, but I've always had a roof over my head, and have never been materialistic beyond that. It's just stuff, it don't mean a thing without good friends and family. Crass, materialist capitalism has overtaken the Western world, where we are judged by the THINGS we have, not the people we have. A good write, reminding us that monetary wealth is not the key to happiness
Comment Written 10-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2019
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Thank you so much Sarkems. It was so good of you to stop by. I appreciate the excellent and insightful review.
All my best,
Sally :+)