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Fluttering Feathered Friends

Featherdown floating away on the breeze.

12 total reviews 
Comment from nancyjam
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Congratulations on placing in the Nonet Contest.
Yours is lovely. The syllable count is right on.
The images are wonderful and your
use of alliteration adds to the pleasure of reading it.
Nancy

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
    I am so pleased that you liked my poem. I was delighted to gain a placing. Thanks for your congratulations and review Nancy.
Comment from Sally Law
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A beautiful nonet, Lisa May! Your syllable count is spot on, nine to one. I love all the pink, perfect for Valentines Day.
My best to you and in the contest,
Sally :+)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2019
    Thank you so much for your review Sally. I initially had a yellow background, but then changed it to be pink to fit in with the blossoms mentioned. Colour choice is so subjective with people... I am glad you are a pink appreciator!
Comment from Rob Caudle
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Well, aren't you the talented writer, a nonet. Well done by the way. this is not an easy form to conquer but you have done it quite well. Good luck in the contest this should do well.

Rob

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 03-Feb-2019
    Hi Rod... thanks for thinking this nonet is an ok one.
    I'm trying all sorts of different things with poetry at the moment, but will concentrate on some prose soon.
Comment from Mastery
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Brilliant observations for this nonet, Lisa. I like the way it flows.

I felt this part was so profound:

"a feather floats
so lightly
drifting
down."

Good luck in the contest, my friend: :) Bob

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    I thought that was the best bit too. I liked how the poem shaped like a nest, so I was going to work with that, but then the feather motif came to mind.
Comment from Mastery
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Brilliant observations for this nonet, Lisa. I like the way it flows.

I felt this part was so profound:

"a feather floats
so lightly
drifting
down."

Good luck in the contest, my friend: :) Bob

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Your review has come through twice... so again I will say thank you for your comments and good wishes.
Comment from kiwijenny
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On blossom bright twigs ...I love that. I am still in the midst of winter and I don't have a cherry tree or any tree near my window. There's a line of them at the back but I love seeing these birds flit on flashing wings in my mind's eye.
God bless

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Oh I do feel for you in the depths of winter. Rug up warmly!
    I am glad I could put some of God's creatures into your mind's eye.
    Thank you so much for your review comments.
Comment from patcelaw
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Lisa, I can truly say this was a pleasure for me to read. Since two of my favorite things to observe are birds and flowers you words bring joy to my soul, Patricia

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    I'm so glad my story was able to provide an uplifting read for you. I agree with you about birds and flowers.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A delightful nonet Lisa and I used to have the same tree in an old house I owned when my children were younger and I loved watched the changes as each season the tree looked so different, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Thanks for reviewing Dolly. I love that tree too... except maybe when it is so loaded with fruit (around mid Dec) that the wood pigeons make disgraceful gluttons of themselves, get inebriated, fly drunkenly, then crap all over my pavings. It is often a struggle between me trying to get the fruit from low down, and them getting as much fruit as they can from higher branches.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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A vividly descriptive nonet. I like the final image that you leave the reader with - the solitary feather drifting gently down.

Other things to like - the abundant alliteration and the engagement of the senses.

Good luck in the contest.

Steve

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    Hi Steve... Thanks for your terrific review and good wishes.
Comment from trimple
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This is quite beautiful, Lisa
.

You paint a whole scene here. I can see the birds fluttering and the noises produced by their feathers. Then they are gone
and zig-zagging down among the papery cherry blossoms, there is a feather as a reminder as if to say... I was here...

Beautifully executed, Lisa

Well done.

Good luck in the 'Nonet' poetry competition.

I think you will do very well.

much love

tracey

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2019

reply by the author on 02-Feb-2019
    H Tracey, thanks for your kind words of encouragement... fingers crossed others like it too.
    All the best, xx
reply by trimple on 02-Feb-2019
    Crosses fingers :)

    lovely poem, Lisa