Tiny Footprints
They've become a touchpoint for me...11 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is so sad but beautiful.
Love all the color, starting with the footprints down through every line of your poem. You have a good eye for color.
I just love your repeating verse :)
I enjoyed had you went through time with the 'tiny footprints leading away'.
I almost cried reading the last stanza.
This is a GREAT contest entry!!
Thank you for sharing :)
Gale
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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This is so sad but beautiful.
Love all the color, starting with the footprints down through every line of your poem. You have a good eye for color.
I just love your repeating verse :)
I enjoyed had you went through time with the 'tiny footprints leading away'.
I almost cried reading the last stanza.
This is a GREAT contest entry!!
Thank you for sharing :)
Gale
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Yeah, well, you aren't the only one, Gale! :) I hadn't set out to write something that actually made me cry as I finished it....but that's where the pencil went..... Thanx for stopping by today! :) ;)
Comment from Bill Schott
This kyrielle, Tiny Footprints, has the proper formatting and hits the emotional mark. This poem will gut anyone with toddlers or, God forbid, who know this feeling.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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This kyrielle, Tiny Footprints, has the proper formatting and hits the emotional mark. This poem will gut anyone with toddlers or, God forbid, who know this feeling.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Wow, Bill! :) Thanx for those wonderful stars! :) I hadn't set out to write something that actually made me cry as I finished it....but that's where the pencil went..... Thanx for stopping by today! :) ;)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Your Kyrielle contest entry is a very well written, light hearted look at childhood, Anonymous Poet.
The last stanza made me pause a moment and remember that famous verse, Footprints.
Well done and best of luck.
~Dean
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Your Kyrielle contest entry is a very well written, light hearted look at childhood, Anonymous Poet.
The last stanza made me pause a moment and remember that famous verse, Footprints.
Well done and best of luck.
~Dean
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your review, Dean...always means a lot to hear from you! :) ;)
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You are welcome. :-)))
Comment from samantha0930
The poem is very touching, and a bit sad at the end. I like the color gradient, although I would suggest using the brighter colors at the beginning and then fade them to the darker tones to show how things have gone wrong.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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The poem is very touching, and a bit sad at the end. I like the color gradient, although I would suggest using the brighter colors at the beginning and then fade them to the darker tones to show how things have gone wrong.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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thank you for the review, Samantha! :) ;) And thank you for the suggestion -- appreciate the time! :) Take care! :)
Comment from Michele Harber
This is beautifully written yet so hard to read due to its subject matter. I was impressed with the different uses you found for the repeated line, from animal footprints to the footprints on the hospital floor, to the trail to heaven. This was obviously very personal, and your words are very loving and very moving. This is an excellent use of the Kyrielle form, and I wish you luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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This is beautifully written yet so hard to read due to its subject matter. I was impressed with the different uses you found for the repeated line, from animal footprints to the footprints on the hospital floor, to the trail to heaven. This was obviously very personal, and your words are very loving and very moving. This is an excellent use of the Kyrielle form, and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Michele, for the review and for your lovely comments. I cannot imagine the pain and heartbreak associated with the loss of a child...... I am honored that my words were able to stir such emotion in you....it is high praise indeed, and I do not take it lightly- thank you. ;)
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You're very welcome, and the words were well-deserved.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such a sad poem of loss and grief and brought a tear to my eye. It must be so hard losing a child, I loved your colourful presentation, well thought out and well rhymed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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This is such a sad poem of loss and grief and brought a tear to my eye. It must be so hard losing a child, I loved your colourful presentation, well thought out and well rhymed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 26-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your review and lovely comments, Dolly -- and, you are right: I cannot imagine the pain and
heartbreak associated with such a loss.... it is good to know that my writing touched you. ;)
Comment from gramag4
WOW! A very emotional presentation. I can feel the tears of pain in your heart, but what a lovely remembrance. I was very moved. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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WOW! A very emotional presentation. I can feel the tears of pain in your heart, but what a lovely remembrance. I was very moved. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the wonderful review....it means a lot to me that you felt the emotional impact I tried to convey in my poem. ;) ;) No worries, though, this was simply a poem I wrote for the contest! :) ;) Have a wonderful weekend! ;)
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You are most welcome!
Comment from RodG
This poem is very poignant as we learn about this child who loved "tiny footprints leading away." We dread hearing about the "darkness" that eventually led him away from his parents. The refrain really touches our hearts. Rod
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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This poem is very poignant as we learn about this child who loved "tiny footprints leading away." We dread hearing about the "darkness" that eventually led him away from his parents. The refrain really touches our hearts. Rod
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Rod - I do so appreciate your time! :) ;)
Comment from Christine C Autry
This is so heartwarming. Pulled on my heart strings. Thank you for sharing this poem. I sure did enjoy reading it. Please keep up your work. You have a talent. I appreciate it.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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This is so heartwarming. Pulled on my heart strings. Thank you for sharing this poem. I sure did enjoy reading it. Please keep up your work. You have a talent. I appreciate it.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your review, Christine -- much appreciated. :)
Comment from Anntonette
Very colorful and vibrant piece!
It starts off dark and then light then dark again. Very creative.
Good luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing!
- Anntonette J
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reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Very colorful and vibrant piece!
It starts off dark and then light then dark again. Very creative.
Good luck in the contest! Thanks for sharing!
- Anntonette J
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your review, Anntonette -- much appreciated. :)
