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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your sentiments here but the iambic pantermeter is missing from your flow and you will need to adjust this for the contest. It will also improve the metre too, best of luck, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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I enjoyed your sentiments here but the iambic pantermeter is missing from your flow and you will need to adjust this for the contest. It will also improve the metre too, best of luck, love Dolly x
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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This is my first attempt at a sonnet and I do battle with the iambic pentameter. Thank you, Dolly , for your honest opinion in that respect. I shall take your advice and attempt to improve.
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If you look it up on line and take one of Shakespeares sonnets as an example you will soon get into the flow! Good luck! Love Dolly x
Comment from meeshu
You have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive. and your rhyme scheme really stands out. well done, Persevere..................meeshu
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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You have created some great images here, and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive. and your rhyme scheme really stands out. well done, Persevere..................meeshu
Comment Written 27-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019
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Your review is greatly appreciated, meeshu, . Thank you. I shall try to improve the metre before the closing date.