Comment from ngage

Excellent

Another fantastic chapter, Ms. Shana, full of emotions. The part where Eliza came to help Sebastian was a tear jerker. You brought the scene to life with your realistic imagination. You amaze me dear friend. Now that Sebastian is out of his coma and back with his family, I wonder how the Breedline will react. His fate seems to lie in their hands.
Looking forward to more!

Great artwork too!

Nate

 Comment Written 24-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Thank you, Nate :)

Glad you enjoyed another Breedline adventure! It's great to hear the emotions are clear to the reader. That's what I love to hear. It's getting closer to the big battle with the Fury. Hope to keep you entertained dear friend.

Big hugs,
Shana :)

Comment from apky

Exceptional

I'm sure it's not a farce. But knowing the writer in you, I won't be surprised if you throw something else on the reader in the next scene.

Very engaging chapter, with your usual brilliant observation to details.

"Yes(,) my sweet boy," Eliza said softly.

"But other than that, everything seems normal." ~ You could drop the "But" if you like, and merely begin with "Other...."

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Thanks dear friend :)

Sorry it took me so long to respond. I've been so busy with my new dog I recently got. Had to fix fence and get the little bugger neutered. I so adore him though. My other two passed last year, and I was ready for another pal.
Hope all is well with you. How's your book doing?

As always, thanks so much for your expert eyes and great advice. The next chapter will be getting ready for a big battle with the Fury. I hope everyone enjoys it. It's building up for an ending and I promise it will be full action.

You're the greatest!
Always your fan,
Shana :)

Comment from Graybærd

Excellent

This is an amazing tale with a new take on werewolf mythology. From what I've read, the storyline is very well thought out and put together. I also got a lot of information on Sebastian for just one chapter.
Great job

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Thank you, Greybaerd :)

It's nice to hear that you enjoyed this chapter. There are a lot of twists and turns in my series, and it's building up to a big battle between good and evil. The Breedline may need help from something other than what's on earth. Stay tuned ... more to come.

Thanks so much!
Sincerely,
Shana :)

Comment from royowen

Exceptional

A great episode dear Shana, Sebastion appears to be accepting his judgement and fate at the hands of the covenant, Helen is amazed at the sheer contrition of Sebastion, and having followed all the way through, so am I. But you are determined to reveal the love of God though the covenant and the grace that dwells therein. Beautfully and touchingly written, with the love of family flowing through every word, well done dear girl, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 22-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Thank you dear friend :)

Sorry it took me so long to respond. I've been on the go this week. Now, some free time to get in touch here on FanStory. So glad you enjoyed this chapter. Sebastian is finally opening his heart and excepting what he must do. His love for Eve and his twins sons are more important than power. Stay tuned ... more to come!

Always your fan,
Shana :)

reply by royowen on 27-Jan-2019

Love does it every time dear Shana,

reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

Yes it does my friend ... yes it does. :)

Comment from fm wright

Exceptional

Should n't it be Anna said in a tear stained voice and not Anna's said in a tear stained voice after Sebastian? Anyway, that's the only thing that comes to my attention, besides the usual writing that keeps me engaged. You do have me very interested in what happens next to Sebastian and how it will affect Anna. Well, I guess that's it till the next chapter. So continued good writing!

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019

Thank you, Faye! :)

Thanks for catching that. I really enjoy hearing feedback that helps my writing. I can read it a hundred times and never see this, but it sure is nice to have another pair of eyes on my chapter.
Glad you also enjoyed. Please fill free to let me know if you see anything that catches your eye that I need to change. This is how I learn and improve. I appreciate your support!
Big hug,
Shana :)

reply by fm wright on 21-Jan-2019

That was the only thing that caught my eye. The rest seemed flawless.

reply by the author on 27-Jan-2019

You are such a great help! Thanks for taking the time to read my chapters. I sure appreciate it.

Hugs,
Shana :)

reply by fm wright on 27-Jan-2019

You sure are welcome! I love reading your work!