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Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Oh my! What a shock for poor Charles- I did not see that one coming.
The twists and turns just keep on coming and the story line remains interesting and intriguing.
Quite a feat.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2019


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2019
    Ha! Ha! I'm not sure that I saw that one coming either, until it actually hit the paper! All the best, Tony
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Tony,
An excellent chapter, as the revelations continue
not that they were a big to surprise, except to Charles.
I guess Charles has simply led a sheltered life as a travel writer.
Being in the theatrical world of Andre and Kayla, and the drug world of Bellini
is a bit out of his normal area of comfort.
But now he has time to think; I'm not sure if he still has the diary or not.
That seemed to be the key in previous chapters.
Well done.
No sixes left
Robert

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks for the review, Robert. Yes, he still has the diary. It seems that Helen forgot to retrieve it from him - or perhaps she still doesn't want Jeanne to get hold of it, for some reason or another.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-A chapter full of surprises, and Charles's
world turning upside down.
-Thanks for the "orange" reference. Orange
you glad I mentioned that?! (ha, ha).
-I think Charles definitely needs
the escape to the English country cottage.
-You balance the serious with levity,
beginning with the artist's caricature of Charles,
and the appearance of Andre, and then Kayla.
-Kayla seems like the life of the party type, so
she is a good one to lift Charles's spirits.
-Unfortunately, it didn't quite go that way.
-You tastefully show how Jeanne might
have an emotional hold over Helen.
-I think she is at a crossroads, and that
doesn't leave a lot of chance for Charles.
-Now, he is feeling worse than he was, but you
break that up with his imbibing
a large gulp of champagne.
-The friends now relax, and then each went
their own way-Charles to the countryside with
his brain turning "like the wheels of the train."
-A chapter well done, my friend.

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 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks very much, Pam. This is something of a pivotal chapter, and I appreciate the help you have given me in polishing off some of the rough edges. All the best, Tony
reply by Pam (respa) on 20-Jan-2019
    You are very welcome, Tony. I am glad I was able to help. You did a great job with the chapter. It was very polished.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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Well I wasn't really expecting that, with Helen torn between Charles and Jeanne. Quite a twist in this story, or maybe I'm just slow on the uptake. Informative chapter Tony, well told.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks for your review, Valda. As you say, unexpected, but it may start to explain a few things. All the best, Tony.
Comment from LIJ Red
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That was a bit of a shock for your protagonist, I dare say. I like the line about the wheels in his head and the wheels on the train clacking in unison....excellent chapter.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Red. I appreciate the review. All the best, Tony
Comment from Bichon
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Oh wow, this was very interesting. I haven't read any of the previous chapters, but this definitely caught my attention. The characters seem very unique. Great job!

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Bichon. I appreciate the review. All the best, Tony
Comment from Hugh McDowell
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Tony, I haven't read any other chapters of this but it is great. My wife and I spent seven weeks in Paris in 2010. You have captured the essence of the city we fell in love with. The Sacre Coeur was where my had her Blackberry phone stolen. Monmartre was a gem of an area that we visited often. Your characters are so well developed in this story with excellent dialogue. I was transported back to Paris as I read. Excellent. Hugh

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Hugh. I appreciate the review. Glad this brought back some happy memories. Quite a few of the earlier chapters are also set in Paris. All the best, Tony
Comment from Mastery
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Excellent writing here, Tony. I do have a question for you: What does this mean? I ave never heard it before: " like a lovesick orange..."

Your use of images is absolutely wonderful: "The artist smiled with delight, exposing nicotine stained teeth."

And: "Before I had time to answer, Kayla came flouncing down the street towards us. She looked ravishing in a tight-fitting white frock festooned with scarlet poppies the size of dinner plates."

Excellent dialogue, too. Tony. I would like to award you six stars each time but alas I have to spread them around. You are aware of that situation, I am sure. LOL
Sorry, I missed your explanation on the orange before I closed out. I still think it's silly, but maybe that's just me. :) Bob

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Bob. I appreciate the review and the sixth star.
    I had almost decided to delete the lovesick orange, but one reviewer pointed out to me that the words 'orange juice' and 'I love you' are often confused by lip readers. I might weave that into one of the preceding chapters, to give context to the expression.
    All the best, Tony
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
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This is extremely well written. I like your characters and the natural sounding dialogue. I could visualize their laughing fit. I'm glad you explained orange love. That one had me baffled.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Rhonda. I appreciate your generous review and the sixth star. All the best, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
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This continues to be an intriguing write which I thoroughly enjoy.

around with Helen like a lovesick orange. - lol, love this. Funnily enough a deaf kid explained to me that orange juice and I love are show up the same movements when lip-reading. lol


 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thanks, Gareth. I appreciate the review and particularly the comment about lip-reading. I may weave that into an earlier part of the scene at Montmartre, to give context to the expression, which has bamboozled almost everyone!. All the best, Tony