Pappa's Memories and Ramblings
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "When People Lose Hope "Poems, Rants, Short Stories and Ramblings
4 total reviews
Comment from Carola Fernandez
Interesting and creative. Great rhyming and good selection of words in your writing piece. I like it sounds political and kind of reflective at the same time.
Best of luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Interesting and creative. Great rhyming and good selection of words in your writing piece. I like it sounds political and kind of reflective at the same time.
Best of luck with the contest!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the review and insight.
God's Blessings to you and your family.
Comment from GregoryCody
Really cool imagery! And a strong message. I like your word choices too, like
Just like the last time you looked into a kaleidoscope, Hunter without a scope.
One suggestion. Try leaving out unneeded words, like "the" or "like". You can use a hyphen. Or use another word than like. The close might be missing a word?
Stain "that" won't wash off? Unless you meant that?
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Really cool imagery! And a strong message. I like your word choices too, like
Just like the last time you looked into a kaleidoscope, Hunter without a scope.
One suggestion. Try leaving out unneeded words, like "the" or "like". You can use a hyphen. Or use another word than like. The close might be missing a word?
Stain "that" won't wash off? Unless you meant that?
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2019
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Yes, meaning as a question we alone have to answer .
Thanks again
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OOOH nice
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Btw, my 5-7-5. Can you go back to it by chance
Comment from country ranch writer
When we lose hope depression sets in and takes over our mind and body. It is so hard to get over and some never do. It is hard to focus on the everyday things around us.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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When we lose hope depression sets in and takes over our mind and body. It is so hard to get over and some never do. It is hard to focus on the everyday things around us.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the review.
I call them political distracters on bigger issues in society.
God Bless you and your family.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks about state of mind, status and stand of living, and state of head and heart as and when one loses hope on and for anything; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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This speaks about state of mind, status and stand of living, and state of head and heart as and when one loses hope on and for anything; well said, well done. Write inspire change for 1234 Years--- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the review and Kind words.
God Bless you and your family.