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Comment from Sugarray77
This is a wonderfully historical account of the 8th Texas Rangers. It is very accurate as well as moving to read all that they endured during the war. The details make this so good and your handling of the facts in a first person manner keeps the reader engaged because it appears personal. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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This is a wonderfully historical account of the 8th Texas Rangers. It is very accurate as well as moving to read all that they endured during the war. The details make this so good and your handling of the facts in a first person manner keeps the reader engaged because it appears personal. Well done.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Thank you for your excellent rating and the kind words. Catherin
Comment from Earl Corp
You obviously did your research, your piece is very historically accurate. You might want to use the advance editor to bold the dates of a new journal entry. I'm also writing a period piece with backwoods jargon. I've had reviewers suggest scrapping it and just writing. I can kind of see the point after reading all the "Them thar" and t'weres and t'werents in yours, they were very distracting.Keep at it.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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You obviously did your research, your piece is very historically accurate. You might want to use the advance editor to bold the dates of a new journal entry. I'm also writing a period piece with backwoods jargon. I've had reviewers suggest scrapping it and just writing. I can kind of see the point after reading all the "Them thar" and t'weres and t'werents in yours, they were very distracting.Keep at it.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Earl, Thank you for your excellent rating; and your kind words. Yes, I did extensive research. lol Earl, I grew up with that back woods jargon from the older members of my family [I'm 78].
Comment from Rob Caudle
Now, you may think I'm out of my skull for the 3, but I am just totally confused. I don't know whether it's because I came late to the story or what. If I'm off base, please tell me, and I'll go back and adjust.
So, here we go. First of all, I was enchanted in the beginning by the dialect and language of the time. Then I started noting punctuation problems but let it go because those problems were in quotes, so I let it go.
Secondly, when I got to the parts that were not dialogued--more like narration, there were still punctuation and grammatical errors.
Lastly, by the second paragraph under July, I was just so confused my head hurt. I didn't know whether all of this was supposed to be told from a soldier's point of view with author narration and then quotes, or just your narration from someone's viewpoint???
Help!!!!!!!! Please let me know, and I'll be happy to reread and adjust stars.
Rob
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Now, you may think I'm out of my skull for the 3, but I am just totally confused. I don't know whether it's because I came late to the story or what. If I'm off base, please tell me, and I'll go back and adjust.
So, here we go. First of all, I was enchanted in the beginning by the dialect and language of the time. Then I started noting punctuation problems but let it go because those problems were in quotes, so I let it go.
Secondly, when I got to the parts that were not dialogued--more like narration, there were still punctuation and grammatical errors.
Lastly, by the second paragraph under July, I was just so confused my head hurt. I didn't know whether all of this was supposed to be told from a soldier's point of view with author narration and then quotes, or just your narration from someone's viewpoint???
Help!!!!!!!! Please let me know, and I'll be happy to reread and adjust stars.
Rob
Comment Written 09-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Rob, Your critic is interesting! I never ignore a critic good, bad, or indifferent because each in their own way give me an opportunity to learn. If I have to explain, then I have failed to convey the story in a way that is clear. I will say this....the story is told from the point of view of Jeb---who both remembers episodes and tells at other times. It would seem I need to clarify. [I use 'ProWriting' as a way to improve my work; and find it one of the best.] Thank you for you time and comments. Catherin
