The Predator
Once was not enough.27 total reviews
Comment from Chris Davies
Yes, it does have the same feel. You accomplished so much in so few words. That's not easy to do. (I'd have given it six if I had them to give.) I love your style!
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Yes, it does have the same feel. You accomplished so much in so few words. That's not easy to do. (I'd have given it six if I had them to give.) I love your style!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kind words. Sorry no goodies or bonuses with this. It was very kind of you to grace me with a review.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment from Christine C Autry
Thank you so much for your writing I enjoyed it very much I wanted to see what happened. Very very interesting I like reading it. I appreciate your work.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for your writing I enjoyed it very much I wanted to see what happened. Very very interesting I like reading it. I appreciate your work.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kind comments. This is based on a true story from my life. I enjoyed the challenge of telling it in such a short format. Thank you for stopping by today!
All my best,
Sally :+)
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Ha! :) Good for the officer -- and, yeah, they're out there...everywhere the kids frequent..ballparks, fast-food joints, you name it. Thanx for shining the light, Sally - your write is wonderful in only 100 words. :) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Ha! :) Good for the officer -- and, yeah, they're out there...everywhere the kids frequent..ballparks, fast-food joints, you name it. Thanx for shining the light, Sally - your write is wonderful in only 100 words. :) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and encouraging comments. Predators are like cockroaches. You gotta shine the light to stamp em? out! So glad you could appreciate this.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from Earl Corp
I love this story, especially the twist at the end. The picture of the spide kind of threw me off, I thought predator was something entirely different. Your ability to get this told in 100 words is extraordinary. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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I love this story, especially the twist at the end. The picture of the spide kind of threw me off, I thought predator was something entirely different. Your ability to get this told in 100 words is extraordinary. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Earl. I am honored by your high marks and sincere compliments. Part one is entirely true. My sister and I were walking home in the rain after school when he first approached us. My younger sister wanted to accept his invitation. I pulled her away and put my arm around her as we continued on in the rain. Years later, she thanked me for saving her life. Part two was my fantasy of someone catching the creep red-handed and hauling his ass to jail.
All my best,
Sal :+)
Comment from BeasPeas
Love it. Great little story here and that's poetic justice. Written well, clear, and interesting. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Love it. Great little story here and that's poetic justice. Written well, clear, and interesting. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 13-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, dear Marilyn. I appreciate the excellent review and kind comments. I am glad it had received so much positive feedback.
All my best,
Sally :+)
Comment from LaRosa
You have covered a lot of information in a short space: historic memory, child to adult finding justice finally. Love it all. Don't we all wish we could see such justice served?
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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You have covered a lot of information in a short space: historic memory, child to adult finding justice finally. Love it all. Don't we all wish we could see such justice served?
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, dear LaRosa. I appreciate the excellent review and kind words. Yes, I do wish for justice to be served for everyone who has suffered such crimes and been exposed to these evil criminals.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from meeshu
Your writing is smooth and the language is powerful. this is a story that must told. you have brought it out in fiction, good way to get it heard. Very well done, Sal.........................................meeshu
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Your writing is smooth and the language is powerful. this is a story that must told. you have brought it out in fiction, good way to get it heard. Very well done, Sal.........................................meeshu
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review review and kind comments. This is an issue close to my heart as my sister and I are the true part of the story in part one. She wanted to get in his car and out of the rain. She thanked me years later for saving her life. Part two is my fantasy fiction. This is what I hoped happened to him?justice served and his removal from the streets.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Sally, if only there were more undercover cops patrolling the streets to infiltrate and sieve out the bad predators and culprits of this world. There is an imbalance of bad which is close to tipping the scales! A well written short story that leaves the reader wishing the ending happened more often. Great read. ~DD
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Sally, if only there were more undercover cops patrolling the streets to infiltrate and sieve out the bad predators and culprits of this world. There is an imbalance of bad which is close to tipping the scales! A well written short story that leaves the reader wishing the ending happened more often. Great read. ~DD
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and wise words. I agree wholeheartedly with you. Our young children are our precious possessions and must be protected.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from poetwatch
Thank you Sally. Once more the Law was there to keep our children safe. It is true what you say there too many child molesters, different predators that prowl the streets waiting in the shadows. This is a good entry for the 100 Word Writing Contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you Sally. Once more the Law was there to keep our children safe. It is true what you say there too many child molesters, different predators that prowl the streets waiting in the shadows. This is a good entry for the 100 Word Writing Contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the excellent review and insightful comments. So true and I agree with you. The law should be there to serve and protect our little ones, our most precious possessions in this world.
All my best,
Sal
Comment from Kathleen Washnis
Wow Sally, you never cease to amaze me with your diverse ability to write about so many different things on many levels. This one was creepy but I love how the girl had the upper hand to the unexpected Pervert, pulling out a gun to protect herself - awesome! And you said this was based on a true story? Great picture of the spider to depict a predator.
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Wow Sally, you never cease to amaze me with your diverse ability to write about so many different things on many levels. This one was creepy but I love how the girl had the upper hand to the unexpected Pervert, pulling out a gun to protect herself - awesome! And you said this was based on a true story? Great picture of the spider to depict a predator.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and kindest comments. I am glad you were able to appreciate this. My sister and I are the young girls represented in part one.My sister wanted to get in the car and out of the rain. She thanked me years later for saving her life. Part two is my fantasy fiction, hoping he got caught red-handed and removed from the streets.
All my best,
Sal
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Oh my! You and your sister; good thing you were together and you were able to not allow her to go with him. That more than made up for 'ditching' her when you were love struck! LOL! Seriously, there are a lot of scary people in this world so thank God you are both ok. I remember being a little girl and we were warned about a guy in a blue van so reality can strike us anywhere we live.