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Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "Scene at a Dump Site"Pons and Ned meet at different locations
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Comment from susand3022
Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basically sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember... LEARNING IS EARNING!
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Hi,
Recently I was told that my reviewing basically sucks. So this week,
this is my review. I'm taking a survey... Would you rather:
A: Have a true review
B: Have a certain 5-star generic review
Choose wisely and be sure of your choice so I can save myself the
needless time and tears over those who don't want to hear them.
I'll make a list.
And remember... LEARNING IS EARNING!
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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A. I?m willing to take it on the chin if anything you?ve got is authentic and not just your nonspecific opinion.
B. I think, of course, that my stuff is great. So you must defend your review.
C. Typically, reviewers who say things you are saying (and there are a few) think their shit doesn?t stink and that I and others need your input. If you are a publishing editor I would, of course, want your guidance. If not, I?m sure I?ll survive not getting your input.
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Bill, I'm going to consider all that you have said. In doing so, I have decided that since I am NOT a publishing editor, you won't pay any attention to any advice I may have for you however brilliant it may be. You're one of those people who think "letters" are everything. Glad I'm not stuck in that box.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- so many folks getting rid of their spouses....kinda scary. LOL! :) A good write, here -- have to say, was certainly one that I 'did not see that coming'. :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Wow -- so many folks getting rid of their spouses....kinda scary. LOL! :) A good write, here -- have to say, was certainly one that I 'did not see that coming'. :) :) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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No wives were injured in the writing of this piece.
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Good to know. : ) :) :)
Comment from WryWriter
Priceless! I do love that twisted ending! Interesting name choice for your named character. Foggy morning for foggy brain.
(an) old rug
reinforced co(n)crete
I like the use of alliteration with "food fight"; "fist fight"; "Rock'em Sock'em Sid"; "Pasta Palace"; "force fed"; "Cookie Nook" and "Rug-rolled."
Good artwork choice for this theme.
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Priceless! I do love that twisted ending! Interesting name choice for your named character. Foggy morning for foggy brain.
(an) old rug
reinforced co(n)crete
I like the use of alliteration with "food fight"; "fist fight"; "Rock'em Sock'em Sid"; "Pasta Palace"; "force fed"; "Cookie Nook" and "Rug-rolled."
Good artwork choice for this theme.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Thanks, WW, for the help.
Comment from nomi338
Hunh? Excuse me, but I am totally confused. Who is who, what is what? Tell me, Does your head hurt from thinking up this crazy tale? Do you even remember your own name? This story is so convoluted that I am not even sure of who I am anymore.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Hunh? Excuse me, but I am totally confused. Who is who, what is what? Tell me, Does your head hurt from thinking up this crazy tale? Do you even remember your own name? This story is so convoluted that I am not even sure of who I am anymore.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I?m sorry if I broke you, nomi.
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Too late.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very good script you have penned. This had to take a lot of time figuring out who was who and who did what? At the end it made perfect sense! Nice job. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This is a very good script you have penned. This had to take a lot of time figuring out who was who and who did what? At the end it made perfect sense! Nice job. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Teri
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I don't know what to say, Bill. This reminds me of the old Charlie Chan Movies. Ages ago! Maybe Colombo series. "And one more thing" it has quite a clever theme and it's quite entertaining. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I don't know what to say, Bill. This reminds me of the old Charlie Chan Movies. Ages ago! Maybe Colombo series. "And one more thing" it has quite a clever theme and it's quite entertaining. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Nancy.
Comment from Earl Corp
Very cool twist at the end, I did not see that one coming at all. I also like the chain of events man 2 related to explain all the stains. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Very cool twist at the end, I did not see that one coming at all. I also like the chain of events man 2 related to explain all the stains. Very nice job.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Earl.
Comment from phill doran
Hello Bill
Truly excellent.
It is witty, pacey and has a bizarre, twisted feel to it, making it stand out, interesting. A detective spoof that reads something like Waiting for Godot meets Twin Peaks.
Great character-creating dialogue, which reads effortlessly.
I think there is one small typo in the description of Sid's "...reinforced comcrete..." jaw - I think it may be 'concrete'.
I see that the site is trying to encourage scripts this year- you should stick with it. This is great stuff.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Hello Bill
Truly excellent.
It is witty, pacey and has a bizarre, twisted feel to it, making it stand out, interesting. A detective spoof that reads something like Waiting for Godot meets Twin Peaks.
Great character-creating dialogue, which reads effortlessly.
I think there is one small typo in the description of Sid's "...reinforced comcrete..." jaw - I think it may be 'concrete'.
I see that the site is trying to encourage scripts this year- you should stick with it. This is great stuff.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Phil, for the exceptional review. This dialogue spilled out aimlessly until I saw a place to throw in the twist and close the scene. Thank you for pointing out the spelling error. Time to clean my glasses.
Comment from Miss Sherry
What does your wife feed you? This is the most convoluted story I have read of yours yet. I got so confused I forgot I was reading and ate some ice cream, thus leaving a mustache and, wait, the cops are at my door. Could you loan me that rug? Wonderfully funny - you are a genius at this stuff.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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What does your wife feed you? This is the most convoluted story I have read of yours yet. I got so confused I forgot I was reading and ate some ice cream, thus leaving a mustache and, wait, the cops are at my door. Could you loan me that rug? Wonderfully funny - you are a genius at this stuff.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you, OP, for this terrific review. Tell whoever?s at the door that you?re not home. If they go away, it was Pons and Ned.
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Waiting for the next escapade!
Comment from lyenochka
I think he's not recovered from the beating last night and he's looking at a mirror at the dump having this conversation. That's what I make of it. Entertaining one, Bill!
"preferrable" (preferable)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I think he's not recovered from the beating last night and he's looking at a mirror at the dump having this conversation. That's what I make of it. Entertaining one, Bill!
"preferrable" (preferable)
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Maybe that's what's going on. Your idea is probably "preferable" to mine.
