A Consequential Condiment
A poem.72 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Consequential Condiment, presented with seven ABAB-rhymed quatrains, seems to announce the speaker's freedom and new sight for the positive and enjoyable future.
This poem, Consequential Condiment, presented with seven ABAB-rhymed quatrains, seems to announce the speaker's freedom and new sight for the positive and enjoyable future.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
The beauty of one's muse can only be applied when there is surrounding quiet. It's a rarity when people find that kind of serenity and can successfully apply it to a specific purpose without distraction. This piece seems to have been written in the quiet of your mind. Beautiful and relatable. Best, JohnC
The beauty of one's muse can only be applied when there is surrounding quiet. It's a rarity when people find that kind of serenity and can successfully apply it to a specific purpose without distraction. This piece seems to have been written in the quiet of your mind. Beautiful and relatable. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 02-Jul-2023
Comment from Loretta Bigg
You know this is a very good poem that works in many ways. I do have a suggestion. I would change the words that are archaic. Simply because this poem is written today, and I don't think you want it to sound like it's from the 19th century which it will with those archaic words.
Example: Earthen; bliss; quietude.
But this is my opinion to improve in my mind an excellent verse with good scanning and meter.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
You know this is a very good poem that works in many ways. I do have a suggestion. I would change the words that are archaic. Simply because this poem is written today, and I don't think you want it to sound like it's from the 19th century which it will with those archaic words.
Example: Earthen; bliss; quietude.
But this is my opinion to improve in my mind an excellent verse with good scanning and meter.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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That century has better poetry by far LB. So, thank you for the compliment. easy
Comment from Kaiku
A fine recognition that simple love can translate into the beauty of recognizing the clarity of what is and has always been in front of us. So often we are either blinded by ambition or just plain selfishness.
A fine recognition that simple love can translate into the beauty of recognizing the clarity of what is and has always been in front of us. So often we are either blinded by ambition or just plain selfishness.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
Comment from Tirza Savellano
I love how the title of the poem mirrors the same consonance in the first line and throughout the poem. The repetition by sound and rhyme scheme makes the piece easy to read and cohesive. I like how the end of the poem returns to the possessive "I" and provides a sense of relief from the heaviness of the prior words.
I love how the title of the poem mirrors the same consonance in the first line and throughout the poem. The repetition by sound and rhyme scheme makes the piece easy to read and cohesive. I like how the end of the poem returns to the possessive "I" and provides a sense of relief from the heaviness of the prior words.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
Comment from D H Goulden
easyeverett1, this poem is thoughtful and soothing. It's like a lake's calm surface above depths of swirling, emotion-laden undercurrents. Definitely a poem to re-read, and re-think upon.
Thank you for writing it.
-Darby
easyeverett1, this poem is thoughtful and soothing. It's like a lake's calm surface above depths of swirling, emotion-laden undercurrents. Definitely a poem to re-read, and re-think upon.
Thank you for writing it.
-Darby
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
Comment from nancy_e_davis
So what did you bribe your muse with? "I can't get no satisfaction." LOL You make it sound so easy but somewhere I lost it and I only connect with ideas occasionally. Maybe I try too hard. Wonderful alliteration and great meter.
Well done, Thomas. Nancy:)
So what did you bribe your muse with? "I can't get no satisfaction." LOL You make it sound so easy but somewhere I lost it and I only connect with ideas occasionally. Maybe I try too hard. Wonderful alliteration and great meter.
Well done, Thomas. Nancy:)
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I'm glad I had a six left to show my appreciation for this wonderful poem you have created. The peace you have achieved through quiet thought is remarkable. Blessings to you.
I'm glad I had a six left to show my appreciation for this wonderful poem you have created. The peace you have achieved through quiet thought is remarkable. Blessings to you.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
Comment from suep
I read this poem and enjoyed it so much I reread it several times, each time appreciating it even more. I love the rhythm and the flow of words and thoughts. You have great rhyming and wonderful alliteration throughout. I also read your FanStory profile, and am happy you decided to return. The thing on my mind, however, is what Buddy Boy thought of this work. I found it very enjoyable!
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
I read this poem and enjoyed it so much I reread it several times, each time appreciating it even more. I love the rhythm and the flow of words and thoughts. You have great rhyming and wonderful alliteration throughout. I also read your FanStory profile, and am happy you decided to return. The thing on my mind, however, is what Buddy Boy thought of this work. I found it very enjoyable!
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Buddy Boy bites my ankles while I write. True intelligence understands I've a lone way to go. lol
Cats, to me, are mesmerizing and BB lets me know when I get to full of myself. Thanks a million suep. Love your review. easy
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hmmm, Everett, you've penned a complex poem here. I'll admit poetry can often be just that, complex, but I think what you've saying is that when you get in that zone, that place where writers get when they are flowing, time and space seem to disappear and you fly with the eagles.
If I missed the mark, I'm sorry, but I will say your poem got me to think.
Take care,
Rhonda
Hmmm, Everett, you've penned a complex poem here. I'll admit poetry can often be just that, complex, but I think what you've saying is that when you get in that zone, that place where writers get when they are flowing, time and space seem to disappear and you fly with the eagles.
If I missed the mark, I'm sorry, but I will say your poem got me to think.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023