My Mom . . . My Savior!
The wait after the accident...6 total reviews
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
Thank God for good moms that come to the rescue of poor children. :) Sweet response to this writing prompt/contest. I hope you do well. I like your clever topic.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank God for good moms that come to the rescue of poor children. :) Sweet response to this writing prompt/contest. I hope you do well. I like your clever topic.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Cindy, and for your wonderful well-wishes -- always much appreciated! :)
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Short lines, clear words, revealed emotions in a very skillfully written short poem. There is a sense of suspense that gradually develops and culminates in the last line.
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Short lines, clear words, revealed emotions in a very skillfully written short poem. There is a sense of suspense that gradually develops and culminates in the last line.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review, Donka -- always much appreciated! :)
Comment from BrooklynnPreston
I believe this is a great write for the contest. May I ask, was the accident a bathroom one or a serious one? Also I love the illustration you put with this, it fits really well along with the color. I like your punctuation use too. Not too many periods or dashes, as many people tend to overuse including myself, but just enough to make everything flow together perfectly. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I believe this is a great write for the contest. May I ask, was the accident a bathroom one or a serious one? Also I love the illustration you put with this, it fits really well along with the color. I like your punctuation use too. Not too many periods or dashes, as many people tend to overuse including myself, but just enough to make everything flow together perfectly. Great job!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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A fictional write, Brooklyn, so the accident is whatever your mind imagines it to be when you read! ;) ;) ;) Thank you for stopping by for the read and review - please know that you're welcome to drop by again anytime! ;) Take care and make it a wonderful year ahead! ;) ;)
Comment from country ranch writer
Mom brings jeans to save the day of embarrassment. Now he has dry jeans to finish off his day she is his savior. Good work up for this poem.
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Mom brings jeans to save the day of embarrassment. Now he has dry jeans to finish off his day she is his savior. Good work up for this poem.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the great comments and for those wonderful stars! ;) ;) I appreciate your time and wish you a smile for the week ahead! ;)
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Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. This certainly could be anxious moments for a young boy! The first two lines set a suspenseful mood. Ending is lighthearted and makes the reader feel good. Because of the title I knew the direction this was going. Perhaps a more ambiguous title would have made a bigger impact on the reader. Just my thoughts. Really liked this. Hugh
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Excellent. This certainly could be anxious moments for a young boy! The first two lines set a suspenseful mood. Ending is lighthearted and makes the reader feel good. Because of the title I knew the direction this was going. Perhaps a more ambiguous title would have made a bigger impact on the reader. Just my thoughts. Really liked this. Hugh
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping by, High -- always appreciate your input and suggestions! :) Take care and make it a wonderful year ahead!! ;) ;)
Comment from Kelly Grim
This little poem brilliantly captures the anxious, awful moments of waiting for those dry jeans. What a clever, clever, clever write! "muffled voices- two, then one" is perfect! I felt that happiness and relief by the end of this read! Don't know if the vote is over, but good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This little poem brilliantly captures the anxious, awful moments of waiting for those dry jeans. What a clever, clever, clever write! "muffled voices- two, then one" is perfect! I felt that happiness and relief by the end of this read! Don't know if the vote is over, but good luck!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thanx so much for dropping by, Kelly - always appreciate your time and your smile! ;) Take care and make it a wonderful year ahead!! ;)