A Course to Atlantis
I sail to find my fair mermaid...9 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written mono-rhyme poem about the mermaid and her pirate love that made it to the palace to get married forever. The sailor pirate thinks he caught the best wife in the ocean.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very well-written mono-rhyme poem about the mermaid and her pirate love that made it to the palace to get married forever. The sailor pirate thinks he caught the best wife in the ocean.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thanx so much for your read and review, Sandra -- I do always appreciate your comments! :) ;) Yvette
Comment from jenintorre
This a great mono-rhyme poem and an excellent entry for the competition. I love the well chosen artwork and superb rhyme.
Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This a great mono-rhyme poem and an excellent entry for the competition. I love the well chosen artwork and superb rhyme.
Good luck and best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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So glad you enjoyed this one Jen -- was definitely a challenge! :) Thanx for stopping in -- Happy New Year! :) ;)
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
Exceptional poem accompanied by perfect artwork.
Your end rhyme could not be more perfect;
perfect font for this poem;
good choice of background color;
really good flow to the poem;
LOVE THE STORY itself!!!!!! A beautiful story of love and change, very descriptive of the pirate and mermaid, and very descriptive of the scene.
Great contest entry!
Gale
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Exceptional poem accompanied by perfect artwork.
Your end rhyme could not be more perfect;
perfect font for this poem;
good choice of background color;
really good flow to the poem;
LOVE THE STORY itself!!!!!! A beautiful story of love and change, very descriptive of the pirate and mermaid, and very descriptive of the scene.
Great contest entry!
Gale
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thanx for the read and review, Gale - always much appeciated!) ;) Take care and make the most of the year ahead! :) :)
Comment from Debbie Pope
This is awesome. I had no idea that mono-rhymes could be so creative. You get the prize for use of creative rhymes. My favorites are marmalade and shade, renegade and trade, and palisade and glade. But then, I like them all. You could have entered this is a poem that tells a story. You really made the most of the challenge. Amazing.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This is awesome. I had no idea that mono-rhymes could be so creative. You get the prize for use of creative rhymes. My favorites are marmalade and shade, renegade and trade, and palisade and glade. But then, I like them all. You could have entered this is a poem that tells a story. You really made the most of the challenge. Amazing.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thanx, MQ, you started my day off on the right foot - here's sending sunny smiles right back atcha! ;) ;) Take care and have a wonderful week ahead!! ;) ;)
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Terrific job on this mono-rhyming poem! You told a great story in a poem and created vivid imagery for your reader. I so enjoyed reading this. I especially liked the imagery you created in your second stanza. Perfect pairing of picture and poem. This was a pleasure to read. This poem deserves to fare well in the contest.
Connie
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Terrific job on this mono-rhyming poem! You told a great story in a poem and created vivid imagery for your reader. I so enjoyed reading this. I especially liked the imagery you created in your second stanza. Perfect pairing of picture and poem. This was a pleasure to read. This poem deserves to fare well in the contest.
Connie
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review and especially for those wonderful stars - so very much appreciated!! ;) ;) Be sure to drop by again some time, and have an awesome week ahead! ;)
Comment from Colette
I really like this, it should have music written for it. I am so fed up with the usual written word, this one lifts my spirits.
I found myself carried along on the "waves" and the lighthearted approach to your poem.
Thank you and happy new year!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I really like this, it should have music written for it. I am so fed up with the usual written word, this one lifts my spirits.
I found myself carried along on the "waves" and the lighthearted approach to your poem.
Thank you and happy new year!
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review and for those wonderful comments! ;) Be sure to drop by again some time and have an awesome week ahead!! ;) ;)
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Your reply ; "Thank you for the read and review and for those wonderful comments ;) Be sure to drop by again some time and have an awesome week ahead ;) ;) Have I offended you? annoyed you in some way? that was not my intention. I apologise for my comments.
Comment from Michele Harber
This is absolutely charming, and a perfect entry into the Mono-rhyme contest. You tell a complete story, spoken through the voice of an intriguing character, using wonderful details, i.e., "We dined on fish and marmalade." Your mono-rhymes all worked well to add to the undersea picture you were painting. The actual picture you chose was a perfect accompaniment.
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This is absolutely charming, and a perfect entry into the Mono-rhyme contest. You tell a complete story, spoken through the voice of an intriguing character, using wonderful details, i.e., "We dined on fish and marmalade." Your mono-rhymes all worked well to add to the undersea picture you were painting. The actual picture you chose was a perfect accompaniment.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review and for those wonderful comments! ;) Be sure to drop by again some time and have an awesome week ahead! ;) ;)
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You?re quite welcome, and you enjoy the week as well.
Comment from susand3022
Hello Author, I really liked your poem, A Course to Atlantis." I thought the story was really good. I do have one suggestion...
As I was reading it, I kept natrually readint the line, "A course to Atlantis I've laid!" as, "A course to Atlantis I have laid!" I am thinking that your meter will be better kept if you break the words apart instead of keeping the contraction in the first and last stanzas.
I really like the story a lot, a fun old tale about the pirate getting the treasure from the sea at last! :)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hello Author, I really liked your poem, A Course to Atlantis." I thought the story was really good. I do have one suggestion...
As I was reading it, I kept natrually readint the line, "A course to Atlantis I've laid!" as, "A course to Atlantis I have laid!" I am thinking that your meter will be better kept if you break the words apart instead of keeping the contraction in the first and last stanzas.
I really like the story a lot, a fun old tale about the pirate getting the treasure from the sea at last! :)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Thank you for the read and review and for your suggestion - much appreciated! ;) Have an awesome week ahead! ;)
Comment from meeshu
this is really outstanding mono-rhyme, doesn't sound at all. some do. now I enjoy mint jelly on lamb and liver, guess I should try marmalade on fish..
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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this is really outstanding mono-rhyme, doesn't sound at all. some do. now I enjoy mint jelly on lamb and liver, guess I should try marmalade on fish..
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Yeah, I wouldn't recommend it, dude, but it really worked well in the stanza...lol!! ;) :) Thanx for the review -- Happy Epiphany! :) :)
