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Every anxious visit20 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with the contest prompt. Congratulations on placing in it. Your words are poignant. It is clear to readers what is transpiring. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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You did a good job with the contest prompt. Congratulations on placing in it. Your words are poignant. It is clear to readers what is transpiring. Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much, I am getting there with much help
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your touching poem certainly meets the criteria of the prompt.
Loss of memory is terrifying for everyone affected by it.
Sometimes I forget what I was going to say--in the middle of a conversation.
So embarrassing--and scary.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Your touching poem certainly meets the criteria of the prompt.
Loss of memory is terrifying for everyone affected by it.
Sometimes I forget what I was going to say--in the middle of a conversation.
So embarrassing--and scary.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you and yes it is scary
Comment from The Cowboy Poet
A very emotional work. It's difficult to see a loved one's faculties diminish over time. You have expressed that theme well in a very short space. Well done. Cowboy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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A very emotional work. It's difficult to see a loved one's faculties diminish over time. You have expressed that theme well in a very short space. Well done. Cowboy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Kelly Grim
This... this is a great subject for this prompt... I felt the anxiety right along with your words and each line until she remembers... well done! Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This... this is a great subject for this prompt... I felt the anxiety right along with your words and each line until she remembers... well done! Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
Wow, definitely powerful and something many people can identify with. It is hard to see love ones grow old, and it is especially painful to see them suffer with Alzheimer's or dementia. You've really captured something many can identify with, here. Keep up the good writing!
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Wow, definitely powerful and something many people can identify with. It is hard to see love ones grow old, and it is especially painful to see them suffer with Alzheimer's or dementia. You've really captured something many can identify with, here. Keep up the good writing!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for understanding
Comment from Thomas Bowling
I'm not sure this is what you're alluding to, but my father had Alzheimer's. Each time I visited him I asked him who I was. Finally, he said, "You know who you are."
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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I'm not sure this is what you're alluding to, but my father had Alzheimer's. Each time I visited him I asked him who I was. Finally, he said, "You know who you are."
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This is what was meant, Thank you very much
Comment from Mark D. R.
as our family members advance in age, sometimes the shared memories make us younger again.
your illustration is a great complement to your word restricted verse
Do you want to place your last two lines in double quotes? Or, you can add a semi-colon, instead of your comma, after "words." Or, consider writing the last sentences in italics.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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as our family members advance in age, sometimes the shared memories make us younger again.
your illustration is a great complement to your word restricted verse
Do you want to place your last two lines in double quotes? Or, you can add a semi-colon, instead of your comma, after "words." Or, consider writing the last sentences in italics.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Many thanks I went for the semi colan
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OMG, I meant to write colon (!) not semi-colon. 'Mea culpa' twenty times for my carelessness. Most reviewers will not see your punctuation anyway. Recalling from my school days, my teacher would say the proper way to include a quote would be:
Anxiously waiting, for these words, "Of course, I remember, Son!" So methinks without including quotation marks, the colon after 'words' is almost the same thing.
Comment from jenintorre
This is a very sad and poignant poem. You tell a very complete story in so few words. Very moving. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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This is a very sad and poignant poem. You tell a very complete story in so few words. Very moving. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Many thanks
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a plaintive write both in its hope for the one afflicted and its love and warmth in anxious anticipation. It complies completely with the prompt, and I wish you best of luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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In my opinion, a plaintive write both in its hope for the one afflicted and its love and warmth in anxious anticipation. It complies completely with the prompt, and I wish you best of luck in the contest...
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2019
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Many thanks
Comment from Six-Star Writer
If this is about Alzheimer's disease, I'm sorry. I haven't dealt with anybody in my own life who has experienced this disease, but I've known people who have dealt with someone who has had Alzheimer's disease. It seems like a terrible disease. If this isn't about someone with Alzheimer's disease, sorry for guessing wrong.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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If this is about Alzheimer's disease, I'm sorry. I haven't dealt with anybody in my own life who has experienced this disease, but I've known people who have dealt with someone who has had Alzheimer's disease. It seems like a terrible disease. If this isn't about someone with Alzheimer's disease, sorry for guessing wrong.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019
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Thank you and yes, very well read