Our Dance
free verse4 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This is lovely. The imagery is rich. The reader can be drawn in to received encourage to dance their dance and live to dance it again, even dipping a bit. This is very poignant. Nicely written. Congratulations on your win.
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This is lovely. The imagery is rich. The reader can be drawn in to received encourage to dance their dance and live to dance it again, even dipping a bit. This is very poignant. Nicely written. Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
Comment from nordicgirl
Oh, my, my. This is so lovely. How beautiful that love overcomes everything including age. Damn straight, who gives a Damn what anyone thinks? I adore this. A real beauty. NG
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Oh, my, my. This is so lovely. How beautiful that love overcomes everything including age. Damn straight, who gives a Damn what anyone thinks? I adore this. A real beauty. NG
Comment Written 05-Jan-2019
Comment from phill doran
Hello Anon
A clever use of the words provided - I saw the prompt and could not for the life of me think how 'dipper' could be poetically used aside from a reference to the Big Dipper, so I upped your standing for being creative with that one word alone.
But aside from the compulsory wording, the narrative is excellent and the final dismount is a fitting tail to the tale.
My one reservation is 'whoosh' - but I think that is a matter of personal preference and I have not let that bear on my consideration of the piece.
A great write in a limited frame and in a limited time.
You must do well with this.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Hello Anon
A clever use of the words provided - I saw the prompt and could not for the life of me think how 'dipper' could be poetically used aside from a reference to the Big Dipper, so I upped your standing for being creative with that one word alone.
But aside from the compulsory wording, the narrative is excellent and the final dismount is a fitting tail to the tale.
My one reservation is 'whoosh' - but I think that is a matter of personal preference and I have not let that bear on my consideration of the piece.
A great write in a limited frame and in a limited time.
You must do well with this.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Whoosh kind of grew on me after looking at it for a while. LOL What a great review. Most appreciated. Thanks so much!
Comment from Susanjohn
Awww so lovely! In fact, for a moment I forgot that you HAD to use certain words! The flow is easy peasy smooth and easy you free verse king! I love the feel of this poem or maybe the thought that this kinda love is posssible. :-) Nice job Mikey, I enjoyed reading this. Happy new Year to you! ( write more romantic mushy stuff ;-)
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Awww so lovely! In fact, for a moment I forgot that you HAD to use certain words! The flow is easy peasy smooth and easy you free verse king! I love the feel of this poem or maybe the thought that this kinda love is posssible. :-) Nice job Mikey, I enjoyed reading this. Happy new Year to you! ( write more romantic mushy stuff ;-)
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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How do ya know it's mikey? LOL
In any case, thanks a million. You got this perfectly. :))
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....yes, I forgot about it being a contest. I haven't been here much lately..so I just started going to all my friends profiles and started review.. Though, i STILL would know you! ;-)
