Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

Hi, Craig.

Read through this short 100 flash. It's Psyhco meets Space Odessy, (er...if I could spell oddesy...)

With artificial intelligence learning how to interact with humans via following what humans do, then murder for jealousy would not be surprising. Though I'm ahead of myself! Maybe Michelle was murdered for listening to James Taylor. ; )

Perhaps what was really going on, Tanya and David have a more compatible music playlist. If Tanya had to listen to Michelle butcher one more song... well...

All kidding aside, I enjoyed this fast read. Only a few side thoughts:

Michelle sang along with Fire and Rain as she reached for the face washer,

(The face washer? Like a wash cloth? Or the soap... face wash?


"Hi honey, sorry I'm late.
What I would suggest for punctuating this: Hi, honey. Sorry I'm late.
But that's just a random thought, because they both sound the same.

 Comment Written 11-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

LOL I love that description. The guy's name in the story isn't David by accident. Hitchcock, or Kubrick? Hmmm tough choice - not!

Did you just diss James Taylor? Them's fightin' words. I might have to get Tanya onto you. Next thing you'll be going after Gordy or Neil or, maybe Jackson, or heaven forbid... Joni!

When I was a little lad, a face washer was known as a flannel... I've moved with the times ;-)

I think you're right with the punctuation thing. I'll get onto that.

Thanks so much for yet another great review, Turtle.

Craig

Comment from Santiago2

Exceptional

Very cleverly done, CD. Hal on the kitchen countertop rather than in the bowels of an interstellar ship. Really like your efficient leap to personification of pseudo AI. Luck in the contest. jon

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019

Thanks so much for the good wishes, the wonderful rating and the very kind comments, Jon. All are much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

You set the scene well, a nice shower, a little sing song and then - a good twist to this hot, hot shower flash fiction story Craig. One way to get rid of the competition. Good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019

Thanks so much for the great comments and good wishes, Valda. I'm not sure I got the right idea when a friend told me to "write something hot", but it is what it is :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, The Other Woman, finds me feeling a bit uncomfortable with my Amazon Echo. I guess I'll unplug her for awhile.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019

Mission accomplished! Thanks, Bill.

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh dear. Now this sounds like a really good reason not to purchase a smart house. But this is exactly the kind of reason why I never go in the shower without my gun. Just on the off chance (such as you have written so eloquently here) that I have to shoot my way out because of some devious droid.

This is well written and funny in a scary kind of way.

Best of luck to you with the Contest Committee friend, Craig.

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2019

Thanks so much, Gloria. Much appreciated, as always. I wouldn't have been surprised to hear of people south of the border showering with their Winchesters. But the good, chillin' folk of Canadia? Say it isn't so! Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Oh. Is Tanya the smart house? Or the whatever program that's running the house? It's sort of sci-fi or even horror. I'm not sure that David would be really pleased with Tanya. I guess AI could go that far. Scary.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019

You got it, Helen. Thanks for a great review :) Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

YIKES!!!! This is just a little too realistic, my friend. Why is it that I can so easily imagine "Tanya" doing exactly what she does...

We live in an age that astounds me -- artificial intelligence, robots that do our chores... Once upon a (growing up) time, science fiction. Yowza, Mister, my pleasant little flash doesn't stand a CHANCE against this gem, and I suspect few will!

You get my last six.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019

You're very kind, Dawn. And I'm stoked that you honoured me with your last sixer for the week. But I'm sure you are downplaying your own piece, which I haven't reviewed yet. I'm slowly catching up :) Thanks so much for the wonderful comments, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

This is fabulous. What a great entry for the contest. It will be hard to beat this one. This is the problem with technology. Will it go rogue on us? That's what's feared--a la BOT. Marilyn

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019

Well, I can't wait to see what Reuben is up to, or where your story takes us. I'm a little behind in my reviewing, but I'll get there. Thanks so much for the wonderful comments, Marilyn. Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written hundred word flash fiction. That is quite a drastic way to get rid of the competition which seems to be a very jealous AI that get rid of David's wife.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019

She's not at all nice, is she? Thanks so much Sandra, much appreciated. Craig

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Oh wow, what a twist in this flash fiction piece. I read it twice to understand how the character Michelle died. what a horrid situation. You told the story with good word economy and a bare bones plot to carry the story forward. Excellent write.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019

Thanks so much, Pam. I don't imagine it would be a nice way to go. I suppose Michelle knows how a lobster feels. Most grateful, Craig