Lettre d' Amour
Eights 'n Sixes28 total reviews
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Hi Susan,
This Lettre d' Amour is absolutely stunning. I need to let you know I think you fell off my radar again. Another person that I liked reading and having noticed that your new writing came out - has disappeared from my inbox. I will be fanning you again if that is what I need to do. This poem is so beautiful and I needed to write to you and let you know that it touched me deeply, your Stanza:
"For seldom seems, life mimics dreams or yearnings of our hearts.
Yet, karma weaves in tapestries...'pon silken thread imparts."
Was some of the most profound words I have ever read in anyone's poem. It was a beautiful way of explaining how I feel regularly. This entire poem was superb and to me, I would like to be able to read more of this style of writing as well as ideas within the poetry. It was absolutely beautiful. Thank you. I do not have any sixes for the week but this is definitely my VIRTUAL six. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hi Susan,
This Lettre d' Amour is absolutely stunning. I need to let you know I think you fell off my radar again. Another person that I liked reading and having noticed that your new writing came out - has disappeared from my inbox. I will be fanning you again if that is what I need to do. This poem is so beautiful and I needed to write to you and let you know that it touched me deeply, your Stanza:
"For seldom seems, life mimics dreams or yearnings of our hearts.
Yet, karma weaves in tapestries...'pon silken thread imparts."
Was some of the most profound words I have ever read in anyone's poem. It was a beautiful way of explaining how I feel regularly. This entire poem was superb and to me, I would like to be able to read more of this style of writing as well as ideas within the poetry. It was absolutely beautiful. Thank you. I do not have any sixes for the week but this is definitely my VIRTUAL six. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 01-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2019
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Hi Fonda! Thank you for this amazing review!! Omgoodness i am so pleased you enjoyed this. Sigh, you picked my favorite line too.I am just smiling reading this again. No need for a six star! Your beautiful words here mean so much to me! Thank you so very much!!
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Your favorite line and now mine too! I am glad my review was meaningful to you Susan and you are welcome! Cheers, Fonda
Comment from Wabigoon
Susan--
Your words here are so poetic, enraptured...something like that they do not make logical sense. Like this: "By happenstance nor flit romance
should twin flames merge as one." Is that a sentence? I doubt it. "Flit romance?" Oh, I think I understand what you mean and you have vast poetic license here...still. I'm a bit hesitant. Beautiful in a lot of places though.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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Susan--
Your words here are so poetic, enraptured...something like that they do not make logical sense. Like this: "By happenstance nor flit romance
should twin flames merge as one." Is that a sentence? I doubt it. "Flit romance?" Oh, I think I understand what you mean and you have vast poetic license here...still. I'm a bit hesitant. Beautiful in a lot of places though.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 08-Jan-2019
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By coincidence ? nor fit ( swift/quick) romance... enwrap is sheer delights ( engrossed or absorbed)
It's a sentence.I suppose I tend to write emotion and feelings, rather than in literal sense.
More poetic license the better lol I want my poetry to be felt and ooze the feelings I'm trying to capture..I hope this explains better..Thank you for stopping by and reviewing!! I do so appreciate you taking the time. :-))
Comment from Abby Baker
I love the rhyme scheme. (I've never taken a poetry course/class so I know near nothing about it, so bear with me here.) The language you use paints a beautiful picture, and it feels as though every single word was thought out and fits perfectly in its place. I love it :)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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I love the rhyme scheme. (I've never taken a poetry course/class so I know near nothing about it, so bear with me here.) The language you use paints a beautiful picture, and it feels as though every single word was thought out and fits perfectly in its place. I love it :)
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Hi Abby! thank you so much for such a lovely review! I have the format listed below...you should give it a try :-)
Comment from Artasylum
This is lovely and loving and a joy to read... great job with this romantic and tender love poem... I love your choices:
For seldom seems, life mimics dreams,
or yearnings of the heart.
Yet, karma weaves a tapestry
'pon silken threads impart.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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This is lovely and loving and a joy to read... great job with this romantic and tender love poem... I love your choices:
For seldom seems, life mimics dreams,
or yearnings of the heart.
Yet, karma weaves a tapestry
'pon silken threads impart.
Comment Written 08-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you Artasylum! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review! have a wonderful day :-)
Comment from Jaye Bennett
In this day of email, we may not have those who have written or received a Lettre d' Amour. A shame. They have missed out on something special. The poet has written of the thoughts from the writer of this missive. The poet tells of the romance and yearnings of the writer - what he wants in the future, and explicitly want the carrier to speed it on its way. Impatient fellow. I am having difficulty following the Rhyme scheme the way you show it in your afternote. I did pick up on the syllable count. Really nice romantic poem. Thank you for sharing with us. Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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In this day of email, we may not have those who have written or received a Lettre d' Amour. A shame. They have missed out on something special. The poet has written of the thoughts from the writer of this missive. The poet tells of the romance and yearnings of the writer - what he wants in the future, and explicitly want the carrier to speed it on its way. Impatient fellow. I am having difficulty following the Rhyme scheme the way you show it in your afternote. I did pick up on the syllable count. Really nice romantic poem. Thank you for sharing with us. Good job.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Hi Jaye, does this help?
"EIGHTS 'N SIXES"
by Richard W. Jenkins
Copyright 1 Apr 1987
Any number of 4-line verses about anything:
Aligned left or centered.
Syllable count per verse:
4-4,6 / 4-4,6
Rhyme scheme:
a-a,b / c-c,b
d-d,e / f-f,e
Etc...
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving me such a kind review! I do appreciate it :-)
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On the syllable count 4-4,6/4-4,6 looks like three lines, not four. On the rhyme scheme it looks like three lines not four. Thanks for trying. I'll check it out in the examples shed.
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ok maybe this way?
4-4 a/a
6 b
4-4c/c
6 b
or
4a-4a
6b
4c-4c
6b
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Soft gentle WAYS guiding my DAYS, 4-4aa (8)
with wonders ever tOLD-- 6 (b)
sweet lover's PLEA soon beckons ME,4-4cc (8)
true treasures I behOLD.6 (b) et...
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This poem is a sheer joy to read Susan, and I wish I had a six for you, every line is a gem and very inspiring, I wish you luck with the contest, this is a winner for me, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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This poem is a sheer joy to read Susan, and I wish I had a six for you, every line is a gem and very inspiring, I wish you luck with the contest, this is a winner for me, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Dolly you are so very kind to me. Thank you for reading and making me smile.
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This is an excellent example of how poetry should be written. This is an excellent contest entry and will do well in the voting booth. I hope you win. Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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This is an excellent example of how poetry should be written. This is an excellent contest entry and will do well in the voting booth. I hope you win. Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Thomas I'm kinda surprised to see this review...but it is a New Year and I would rather look forward, than back. :-) So, thank you for stopping by and leaving such a kind review! Actually, it brought a smile to my face :-) Thank you for the well wishes. Happy New year to you!
Comment from meeshu
this is really fine poetry, susanjohn. the language is fitting for the piece and seemingly from another, more romantic time. seamless verse and a gentle rhythm...................meeshu
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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this is really fine poetry, susanjohn. the language is fitting for the piece and seemingly from another, more romantic time. seamless verse and a gentle rhythm...................meeshu
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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You are too kind! Thank you for such a lovely review and for the extra star ( lucky me!) Happy New Year!!!!
Comment from dragonpoet
Nicely done love story about the beginning of a relationship. Maybe a first love letter. You followed the form well. In you notes I think you missed the last 6 syllable designation for the fourth line.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Nicely done love story about the beginning of a relationship. Maybe a first love letter. You followed the form well. In you notes I think you missed the last 6 syllable designation for the fourth line.
Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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I did. I corrected that. Thank you so much for the lovely review! Happy New Year!!
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My pleasure. Glad I could help.
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Comment from WalkerMan
What a beautiful response to a love letter from one who clearly adores the recipient and has proven so, over time, with more than the words within.
You are right that true, lasting love arises from neither happenstance nor brief encounter; it builds slowly but steadily -- just as a tapestry is woven with care.
Yes, each such letter would be awaited eagerly.
Richard's "Eights 'n Sixes" form, which you clearly have mastered, is ideal for this poem.
The illustration [painting by Jean-Baptiste Santerre (1651-1717): "Jeune Fille lisant une lettre a la bougie" (Public Domain)] is perfect for the theme.
Superb.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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What a beautiful response to a love letter from one who clearly adores the recipient and has proven so, over time, with more than the words within.
You are right that true, lasting love arises from neither happenstance nor brief encounter; it builds slowly but steadily -- just as a tapestry is woven with care.
Yes, each such letter would be awaited eagerly.
Richard's "Eights 'n Sixes" form, which you clearly have mastered, is ideal for this poem.
The illustration [painting by Jean-Baptiste Santerre (1651-1717): "Jeune Fille lisant une lettre a la bougie" (Public Domain)] is perfect for the theme.
Superb.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
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Hi Mike, thank you for this review and the extra star! I do appreciate it. As always, spot on with the theme and my intention.:-)
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You are most welcome, Susan. This lovely post certainly is up to your personal standards for poems related to love.
Apparently, some reviewers mistakenly assumed the narrator of the poem was the sender rather than the recipient of the letter, but the illustration clearly supports your wording showing the reverse is true. I confirmed that by researching the artist's caption for the painting (in English, "Young Girl reading a letter by candle[light]"), which is why I mentioned it.
The sender of such a letter would be delighted to know how well it was received, and how eagerly the narrating recipient awaits his next one. Having exchanged such handwritten letters decades ago with my then future wife, I well understand the feelings involved, which you accurately capture in this post.
-- Mike