Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Hi, Marvin, and Happy New Year to you. This scene has some great banter between Amanda and Brennan, such as the money possibly being on the rooftop.
I enjoyed the bit about the Heffermans, too, and how they were just interested in compensation for their expenses, and then enumerating them. We find out that Trudy's condition is worse. And we're about to find out why a real ambulance company wasn't called for Trudy. I'd suggest giving a brief summary of what's happened before, especially as you don't post frequently. Not that I mind infrequent posts. judi

 Comment Written 01-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019

?Great banter? is music to my ears. I'm tempted to give a brief summary of events up to now, but it's too close to the grand finale I'm planning.
The background on the Heffernans:
Months before the robbery, Sterling dragged Ronald into a scheme to cheat the Heffernans out of a couple thousand dollars in a card game. If Ronald passed the test, Sterling would include him in robbing his own bank, blackmailing him to comply.
Trudy's health did not get worse. She called Brennan to share information.
Sterling was hoping she would die by not getting treated right away. She was only shot in the arm.
I think your name, judiverse, is clever and likable.
Thanks for everything.
Marv

reply by judiverse on 02-Jan-2019

You're very welcome. I did enjoy the dialogue in this. I kinda like the name I choice. My actual first name is Judith, and when I first joined FS I thought I'd primarily write poetry, hence judiverse. judi

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

This is a very fine piece of writing. It has a wonderful cadence and pace. Excellent verse and verbiage Well done, Marvin. looking forward to the next................meeshu

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019

I think I've died and gone to heaven. It's tremendously satisfying and encouraging to read your words.
Look forward to having your company til this tale is completed.
Marv

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Marv. I haven't seen a post from you in a while. You left us with a cliffhanger here and I like that. It's a good way for readers to come back to see what's going to happen next. I hope you and your family have a wonderful New Year's Eve and you have a productive 2019 writing. Marilyn

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018

Thanks for your review and the five stars.
I hope you enjoy the remainder of today and have a beneficial new year.
Working on some artwork in a high school kept me busy for the last 2 weeks.. One more day might do it.
Marv

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

I am still enjoying your story, Marvin. The plot is great, and I like your ending. It keeps the reader reading into the next chapter.

I have made a New Year's resolution to be more helpful with my reviews so I looked carefully for grammatical mistakes. I found only a few.
P. 1--"Brennan speaking,"
P. 12--woods conundrum
P. 15--"I can picture Sterling with a smile on his face as he opened the vault this morning."

This is a good story. I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018

I'm very glad you're still enjoying this story, Debbie. I appreciate your reviews and compliments.
Thanks for finding the 3 typos and thank you for the five stars.
Marv

Comment from country ranch writer

Excellent

Well looks like the plot is coming together and they just might get the goods on the bad guys since they has to take Trudy to the hospital themselves so we shall see what happens next.

 Comment Written 31-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 31-Dec-2018

Thanks for stopping by.
Trudy, the teller, got shot by Ronald, the robber, both acting at the behest of Sterling, the mastermind.
The gun was supposed to have blanks. More about that later.
I get the impression you've been following along, somewhat. I'll appreciate anything you care to contribute.
Trudy is in the hospital, already. She had someone call detective Brennan to come see her, so she could share some facts with him.
Thanks for your review and the 5 stars.
Marv

reply by country ranch writer on 31-Dec-2018

Smiles

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

Of course she knows the answer. She's an expert driver and a smart gal. :)
Good chapter ending - leaving us in the dark.
There is one small error - (in spelling conundrum). You just forgot a syllable.
Do they ever find the money????
Stay tuned.
Good show, Willem. (Marvin)

 Comment Written 30-Dec-2018

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reply by the author on 30-Dec-2018

Thank you for being the first reviewer of this latest chapter. Not much more to go.
Thanks for the compliments.
This might be the longest period of time between chapters.
Thanks for the 5 stars.
I'm glad you spotted the typo.
Marv

reply by pome lover on 31-Dec-2018

I await with bated breath.