Yes, Sheriff, There is a Santa Claus
There's a real explanation for everything...10 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
This was a ride full of surprises for the sheriff and had a happy ending.
This kept a person wanting to read it to find out who Santa really was.
Congratulations on your win.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2018
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This was a ride full of surprises for the sheriff and had a happy ending.
This kept a person wanting to read it to find out who Santa really was.
Congratulations on your win.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping in for the read and review, artisart4u -- I appreciate your time in doing so! :) ;) Please know that you are welcome to drop by any time: rain or shine, contest or not! :) ;) Happy Upcoming New Year! :) Yvette
Comment from royowen
I watched a film called "The Santa Claus chronicles" yesterday and portrayed Santa as being omniscient as your Santa, I had to laugh at his diabetes, that was a good touch, and a darn good twist to your tale. Most enjoyable, good luck, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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I watched a film called "The Santa Claus chronicles" yesterday and portrayed Santa as being omniscient as your Santa, I had to laugh at his diabetes, that was a good touch, and a darn good twist to your tale. Most enjoyable, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 25-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2018
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Glad you enjoyed this one, too, Roy....are you needing some 'lone computer time' away from the crowds or just catching up? :) :) LOL! :) LOL! :) Thanx for dropping by for this one, too -- you need to stay for some iced tea next time! :) :) LOL! Yvette
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I will Yvette, well done
Comment from Jraokmepala
That was a great read that was a bit funny, too. The only thing is that you changed Alfred to Albert about two-thirds of the way in. Otherwise, great read!
-Jr
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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That was a great read that was a bit funny, too. The only thing is that you changed Alfred to Albert about two-thirds of the way in. Otherwise, great read!
-Jr
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Old eyes will do that to you, but Batman would still be horrified!! :) ;) Thanx for the heads up, Jr, and thanx for the wonderful review -- so glad you enjoyed! :) Be sure to stop by any time -- Merry Christmas! :)
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello, Yvette, what a fantastical and fun write you have done. The Sherriff was bombarded on all sides.... by the townsfolk, a slurring Santa, and eventually, elves and reindeer. Whaat a wonderfully active imagination you have... Well done.
Have a lovely and Merry Christmas
Melissa
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Hello, Yvette, what a fantastical and fun write you have done. The Sherriff was bombarded on all sides.... by the townsfolk, a slurring Santa, and eventually, elves and reindeer. Whaat a wonderfully active imagination you have... Well done.
Have a lovely and Merry Christmas
Melissa
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Melissa -- thanx so much for your time today and always -- please know that it is so very much appreciated! :) ;) A very Merry Christmas to you and yours, ma'am! :)
Comment from Bill Schott
This was a totally fun story about Clayton and his time with Santa in the squad car. You never know when the Santa you arrest might be the genuine article.
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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This was a totally fun story about Clayton and his time with Santa in the squad car. You never know when the Santa you arrest might be the genuine article.
Comment Written 24-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Thanx so much for dropping by, Bill -- always so good to hear from you!! ;) Merry Christmas! :)
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
What a clever and creative response to this contest, "Hey, Isn't that Santa?" Love your fun-loving slurring dialogue throughout (later we learn he's a poor diabetic) and the magical tradition of the sled and reindeer made me smile. Great luck to you in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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What a clever and creative response to this contest, "Hey, Isn't that Santa?" Love your fun-loving slurring dialogue throughout (later we learn he's a poor diabetic) and the magical tradition of the sled and reindeer made me smile. Great luck to you in the contest. :)
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2018
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Thanx for the review and wonderful comments, Cindy - Merry Christmas!
Comment from Dean Kuch
I tried to gently extricate her, but she simply wouldn't let go, ... ..."Extricate her"? Really? Who uses the word "extricate" in the course of their daily lives? An attorney, perhaps? But especially not a Sheriff in a small, podunk country town. I live in a small, podunk country town and our Sheriff woulda said something like, "I tried to get her outta there as gently as I could. But she was clingin' to the guy like a baby possum to it's Momma up a tree..."
The words of your narrative must fit the place and situation the characters find themselves in at the time.
Other than that minor nit, I enjoyed your Christmas tale.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I tried to gently extricate her, but she simply wouldn't let go, ... ..."Extricate her"? Really? Who uses the word "extricate" in the course of their daily lives? An attorney, perhaps? But especially not a Sheriff in a small, podunk country town. I live in a small, podunk country town and our Sheriff woulda said something like, "I tried to get her outta there as gently as I could. But she was clingin' to the guy like a baby possum to it's Momma up a tree..."
The words of your narrative must fit the place and situation the characters find themselves in at the time.
Other than that minor nit, I enjoyed your Christmas tale.
Well done.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Wow, Dean, I know you say you lived in a small town, but I was born, raised, and still live in a small town (some in Louisiana and some in Alabama) and if ever one of our Sheriffs in any location had ever spoken like you have here, he would have been laughed out of town. Seriously, the only time I've heard a deputy or sheriff talk like that was in Hollywood movies. ;) ;) Thank you for the review and I'm glad you somewhat enjoyed. ;)
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We're all just simple country folk here in southern Ohio.
So, we're kinda used to it.
Take care, and good luck.
Comment from AdaJulie
A sleigh with eight reindeer was right here! Which meant...
This is simply magical! Great job. Talent indeed. Thank you
Merry Christmas to you�°???
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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A sleigh with eight reindeer was right here! Which meant...
This is simply magical! Great job. Talent indeed. Thank you
Merry Christmas to you�°???
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanx so much for the read and review, Ada --- you have a Merry Christmas! :)
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I see that you only awarded four stars, Ada, yet you had
only positive comments and no suggestions. Because four stars by definition means the work needs adjustments, would you please include the adjustments necessary to earn more stars? Thank you.
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I?m so sorry, I certainly meant 5 stars. I?m not sure how to fix my error. I will try to do so. Again, apologies!
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed meeting Sheriff Clayton and hearing about his adventure with Santa and Alfred. As the story continues, it becomes more and more plausible as we learn Santa is a diabetic. Excellent use of dialog to characterize all the characters. A fun read. My only question: why was Santa "collared" in the first place?
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I really enjoyed meeting Sheriff Clayton and hearing about his adventure with Santa and Alfred. As the story continues, it becomes more and more plausible as we learn Santa is a diabetic. Excellent use of dialog to characterize all the characters. A fun read. My only question: why was Santa "collared" in the first place?
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Thanx so much for the read and review, Rod --- I would refer you to paragraph number five for your answer, sir! :) ;) Merry Christmas! :)
Comment from WineNSarcasm
I found this to be quite delightful ! Lots of attention to detail and very descriptive. Well written, enjoyable and amusing as well. Smooth flow through the entire story
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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I found this to be quite delightful ! Lots of attention to detail and very descriptive. Well written, enjoyable and amusing as well. Smooth flow through the entire story
Comment Written 23-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2018
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Hello Wine N Sacrcasm,
Since this only rated a four star, and that means that, in your opinion, it needs some adjustments, could you please suggest what adjustments you would make? All of your comments are positive, not negative or suggestions... thank you.
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The only reason for not giving a 5 star was 1: there is always room for improvement and 2: the 5 star would be for something like a "classic". I found this to be totally wonderful. But, as a stand-alone writing, yes...perhaps, I should have given it a *5*
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Actually, according to the Fanstory rating system, 6 stars is the classic to which you refer here. 5 stars means enjoyable with no adjustments needed. 4 stars means somewhat enjoyable but needs adjustments. If you have no corrections or adjustments to suggest for a post, a 4 would not be the correct choice. To give a 4 star rating to a post to which you can find no corrections or adjustments would appear as more of comment on the authors style or else. Thank you. ;)
