Oh, The Joys of River Life!
A Terza Rima Contest Entry12 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem has such peaceful images. It makes the reader just want to curl up on its banks and just be with the sounds of the water. There is a very powerful metaphor in this. You've also used some nice onomatopoeia to give a good sense of the sounds we would hear were we to spend time with the water. Well expressed. I am voting for this.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This poem has such peaceful images. It makes the reader just want to curl up on its banks and just be with the sounds of the water. There is a very powerful metaphor in this. You've also used some nice onomatopoeia to give a good sense of the sounds we would hear were we to spend time with the water. Well expressed. I am voting for this.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Wow, Liz! :) ;) Thanx so much for dropping by and for those wonderful comments! ;) :) You are my shot of positivity for the evening! :) Take care and a very Happy Holiday Season to you Bea and friends! :)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Terza Rhima about the joys of the river and how the water playfully go down the stream until they get to pools where the come to a still stand it is always great to see how the water flows.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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A very well-written Terza Rhima about the joys of the river and how the water playfully go down the stream until they get to pools where the come to a still stand it is always great to see how the water flows.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for the read and review -- so good to have you drop by, Sandra! :) A very Happy Holiday to your and yours over there! :)
Comment from WryWriter
Good Terza Rima poem with aba bcb cdc dd rhyming scheme and eleven syllable count. Good artwork choice for theme. I liked the first stanza most of all. Didn't really like the "exercise workouts" as the rest of the poem puts the reader into nature. Enjoyed reading this work.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Good Terza Rima poem with aba bcb cdc dd rhyming scheme and eleven syllable count. Good artwork choice for theme. I liked the first stanza most of all. Didn't really like the "exercise workouts" as the rest of the poem puts the reader into nature. Enjoyed reading this work.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review, WryWriter -- much appreciated! :) You're welcome to drop by anytime! ;) )Happy Holiday Season to you and yours! :) :)
Comment from Sugarray77
You have chosen lovely artwork for this prompt. You have done a good job following the prompt for this contest. The Terza Rima format is new to me and I am glad to read your verse to see how it can be done well.
All the best,
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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You have chosen lovely artwork for this prompt. You have done a good job following the prompt for this contest. The Terza Rima format is new to me and I am glad to read your verse to see how it can be done well.
All the best,
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thanx for stopping in, Melissa -- much appreciated! :) Merry Christmas! :) :)
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
This is certainly a winner! A beautiful Terza Rima, and beautifully illustrated. I truly enjoyed the personification of the river ... ripples, frolics, smiles ... working out, murmuring, relaxing, reflecting, lapping and being set in its ways.
Love it! I wish you the very best in the contest :)
Gale
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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This is certainly a winner! A beautiful Terza Rima, and beautifully illustrated. I truly enjoyed the personification of the river ... ripples, frolics, smiles ... working out, murmuring, relaxing, reflecting, lapping and being set in its ways.
Love it! I wish you the very best in the contest :)
Gale
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review, Gale -- much appreciated! :) Happy Holiday Season to you and yours! :) :)
Comment from LIJ Red
Eleven elevens, and carried over rhymes, looks like this is on spec for a terza rima.
Lanier had a similar infatuation with rivers, and Song Of The Chattahoochee was required reading in ancient times...excellent post.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Eleven elevens, and carried over rhymes, looks like this is on spec for a terza rima.
Lanier had a similar infatuation with rivers, and Song Of The Chattahoochee was required reading in ancient times...excellent post.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the read and review, LlJ -- much appreciated! :) Happy Holiday Season to you and yours! :) :)
Comment from rjuselius
this is a perfect entry for this writing prompt dear anonymous! I adore the imagery and the philosophical sentiment. very well written and thought out! bravo my friend!
Good luck!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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this is a perfect entry for this writing prompt dear anonymous! I adore the imagery and the philosophical sentiment. very well written and thought out! bravo my friend!
Good luck!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful comments and the warm sentiments, Rebekka -- appreciate your stopping by! :) :) You're welcome to stop by any time as the 'door' is always open over here! :) :) Have a very Happy Holiday Season with your family and friends! ;) :)
Comment from Pantygynt
I enjoyed the somewhat convoluted rhyme of this form particularly the c rhyme where the naturally stressed syllable is the eith and the full rhyme rests on the unstressed final syllable. This can be a dangerous route to tread but it works here because of the closenes to full rhyme of the penultimate syllable, and the random nature of the river's peregrinations. A case of a good match between form and content.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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I enjoyed the somewhat convoluted rhyme of this form particularly the c rhyme where the naturally stressed syllable is the eith and the full rhyme rests on the unstressed final syllable. This can be a dangerous route to tread but it works here because of the closenes to full rhyme of the penultimate syllable, and the random nature of the river's peregrinations. A case of a good match between form and content.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thank you for the detailed review. :)
Comment from Earl Corp
The picture you chose is very relaxing, I can see myself sitting on a bank with a fishing pole. I enjoy the terza rima style of poetry because it rhymes, it makes sense and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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The picture you chose is very relaxing, I can see myself sitting on a bank with a fishing pole. I enjoy the terza rima style of poetry because it rhymes, it makes sense and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Thank you so very much for the comments, Earl - this was my first terza rima so you have certainly made me feel like I can, perhaps, stop holding my breath as to how it 'went over'! :) :) Thanx for stopping in and Happy Holiday Season to you and yours!! ;) :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed your descriptions and metaphors for this river of life and you chose some clever words that resonated with me. I liked this line: "the exercise workouts it will twist and wind". You have created a beautiful poem and this form is not easy, a joy to read and deserves a six, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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I enjoyed your descriptions and metaphors for this river of life and you chose some clever words that resonated with me. I liked this line: "the exercise workouts it will twist and wind". You have created a beautiful poem and this form is not easy, a joy to read and deserves a six, love Dolly x
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2018
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Oh, Dolly, you just lit my entire day up with your review and those wonderful stars - this was my first terza rima so you have certainly made me feel like I can, perhaps, stop holding my breath as to how it 'went over'! :) :) Thanx for stopping in and Happy Holiday Season to you and yours!! ;) :)
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You?re very welcome, love Dolly x
