Man for God
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Note to Self?"God Helps man who lives to work for mankind
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Comment from DeboraDyess
Oh, Alcreator, I like this! the repetition works better here than in anything else of yours I"ve read. I like it!
Favorite lines:
Tell a story truly, simply, realistically or truthfully
Omniscient God knows and reads all and everything lovingly
and
Write a simple, soft, symphonic word
This is really good! Thank you for sharing. It's the goal of all of us to fulfill this mandate.
Be blessed,
Deb
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Oh, Alcreator, I like this! the repetition works better here than in anything else of yours I"ve read. I like it!
Favorite lines:
Tell a story truly, simply, realistically or truthfully
Omniscient God knows and reads all and everything lovingly
and
Write a simple, soft, symphonic word
This is really good! Thank you for sharing. It's the goal of all of us to fulfill this mandate.
Be blessed,
Deb
Comment Written 01-Jun-2020
Comment from Huguette M. Forest-Coultry
So many important words in this piece. I am new at this FS review forum, so I will try for 'true and honest! I personally see this being more easily consumed as an essay...but that's just me. And my ranking in all of this is so far down you may not find it! I learn from people like you. And thank you for the author notes. It brings clarity. As a senior, I write with too much punctuation. Residue from a late 50's onward education. I am learning to ignore it as I read more and more work like yours. thank-you
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So many important words in this piece. I am new at this FS review forum, so I will try for 'true and honest! I personally see this being more easily consumed as an essay...but that's just me. And my ranking in all of this is so far down you may not find it! I learn from people like you. And thank you for the author notes. It brings clarity. As a senior, I write with too much punctuation. Residue from a late 50's onward education. I am learning to ignore it as I read more and more work like yours. thank-you
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from Sankey
Hey mate! So good to see you actually writing something. This was great and I liked the picture as well. You have not been writing anything for years unless I am not being informed? You are still one of my favourite reviewers. I put up a new poem today and another Ramble is coming. An old poem you probably read years ago is also up for some more looks but if you saw it I guess you won't be told.
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Hey mate! So good to see you actually writing something. This was great and I liked the picture as well. You have not been writing anything for years unless I am not being informed? You are still one of my favourite reviewers. I put up a new poem today and another Ramble is coming. An old poem you probably read years ago is also up for some more looks but if you saw it I guess you won't be told.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Packs a punch with the rat-tat-tat of synonyms--I like the alliteration of simple, soft, symphonic--also a startling image and apt advice for us writers. Cheers. LIZ
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Packs a punch with the rat-tat-tat of synonyms--I like the alliteration of simple, soft, symphonic--also a startling image and apt advice for us writers. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your poem lays out many many things to consider when writing. Of course, many authors have those intentions and try to stick with them. Your presentation indicates how much you care about what we write and is to be appreciated. However, each author has his own guidelines to follow. It is possible some you mention may be added. :)Ralf
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Your poem lays out many many things to consider when writing. Of course, many authors have those intentions and try to stick with them. Your presentation indicates how much you care about what we write and is to be appreciated. However, each author has his own guidelines to follow. It is possible some you mention may be added. :)Ralf
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from Bichon
This was a very interesting write! I liked how each time you read it over again, you can develop other meanings and take them in. The use of writing style is really highlighted too. Great work!
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This was a very interesting write! I liked how each time you read it over again, you can develop other meanings and take them in. The use of writing style is really highlighted too. Great work!
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from January L'Angelle
I really enjoyed this work with all the synonyms. This poem seems like it would have been fun to write. I like the way everything just fell into place. I'm sure that every word was precisely placed. This felt really rhythmic and flowed really nicely. I liked it a lot. Well done. -January L.
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I really enjoyed this work with all the synonyms. This poem seems like it would have been fun to write. I like the way everything just fell into place. I'm sure that every word was precisely placed. This felt really rhythmic and flowed really nicely. I liked it a lot. Well done. -January L.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from richie b
Alcreator,
Your poem is interesting. Your word flow is
natural, no easy task for the complex style of
your work.
Although I agree with much of your verse, I
could not follow that many rules. Freedom of
speech, free verse, poetic license and creative
freedom all play into a writers craft.
Discernment and wisdom grow with age and
experience.
Your writing is of fine quality as usual. We all find
our own voice and grow from there.
Thank you for sharing.
Many Blessings,
Richie
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Alcreator,
Your poem is interesting. Your word flow is
natural, no easy task for the complex style of
your work.
Although I agree with much of your verse, I
could not follow that many rules. Freedom of
speech, free verse, poetic license and creative
freedom all play into a writers craft.
Discernment and wisdom grow with age and
experience.
Your writing is of fine quality as usual. We all find
our own voice and grow from there.
Thank you for sharing.
Many Blessings,
Richie
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from A. Louise Robertson
Wow - I'm sure this took a substantial amount of time to write, The poem contains lots of good advice for writers, but needs to be read several times for all of the meaning to be understood. It is nice to read something with a whole different "twist" than the normal types of submissions here at FanStory. Thanks for taking a chance on this and for sharing it with all of us.
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Wow - I'm sure this took a substantial amount of time to write, The poem contains lots of good advice for writers, but needs to be read several times for all of the meaning to be understood. It is nice to read something with a whole different "twist" than the normal types of submissions here at FanStory. Thanks for taking a chance on this and for sharing it with all of us.
Comment Written 31-May-2020
Comment from Alchera
Write a simple, soft, symphonic word
Utter everything free of a hard, harsh, obsolete word
Speak the truth honestly, actually, really, truly just
Address readers direct, straight, open, honourably and fast.
I prefer these two stanzas most! Wow ! what could I add to all those specific themes or subjects and adjectives used in such a beautiful way of writing if not: Chapeau poet and thank you for such a read sharing piece!
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Write a simple, soft, symphonic word
Utter everything free of a hard, harsh, obsolete word
Speak the truth honestly, actually, really, truly just
Address readers direct, straight, open, honourably and fast.
I prefer these two stanzas most! Wow ! what could I add to all those specific themes or subjects and adjectives used in such a beautiful way of writing if not: Chapeau poet and thank you for such a read sharing piece!
Comment Written 31-May-2020
