Man for God
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Note to Self?"God Helps man who lives to work for mankind
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have used mainly strong words in your poem, which gives it punch. This is a tremendous positive oint in your writing. I was slightly disappointed that you didn't follow your own advice:
Speak briefly, to the point,
I found that this poem could have benefitted from a little more trimming and streamlining.
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You have used mainly strong words in your poem, which gives it punch. This is a tremendous positive oint in your writing. I was slightly disappointed that you didn't follow your own advice:
Speak briefly, to the point,
I found that this poem could have benefitted from a little more trimming and streamlining.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from palmart
Your poem takes readers to your World and expands imagination while continue reading. Nice travel, dear Author!! You unveiled your poetry in a simple, direct manner that cannot be considered far away for real writers. And, in some parts, you teach from your experience which is important to thank for having new writers enriching from your own experience. And your notes also explodes the effect of your poem!
Recognitions are just starting, for sure!! Wish you a great future!
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Your poem takes readers to your World and expands imagination while continue reading. Nice travel, dear Author!! You unveiled your poetry in a simple, direct manner that cannot be considered far away for real writers. And, in some parts, you teach from your experience which is important to thank for having new writers enriching from your own experience. And your notes also explodes the effect of your poem!
Recognitions are just starting, for sure!! Wish you a great future!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This is a complete course in writing. It is informative and motivating. I appreciate the style of writing which is fresh and unique. It is noteworthy. Thank you
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This is a complete course in writing. It is informative and motivating. I appreciate the style of writing which is fresh and unique. It is noteworthy. Thank you
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from papa55mike
Write, write, write, and write some more. It's got to be from the heart, or it just doesn't matter. Things will fall into place if you keep writing. You'll find your voice and style along the way. What a wonderfully written poem, and thank you for sharing! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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Write, write, write, and write some more. It's got to be from the heart, or it just doesn't matter. Things will fall into place if you keep writing. You'll find your voice and style along the way. What a wonderfully written poem, and thank you for sharing! Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from Begin Again
Good morning, dear friend.. Beautiful thoughts you have shared with us. I started out to choose the ones I thought affected me the most, but in the end every line you wrote has a was personal to the writer and the reader. We all need to think on the words and adapt them to ourselves. Awesome! Smiles as always, Carol
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Good morning, dear friend.. Beautiful thoughts you have shared with us. I started out to choose the ones I thought affected me the most, but in the end every line you wrote has a was personal to the writer and the reader. We all need to think on the words and adapt them to ourselves. Awesome! Smiles as always, Carol
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
For appreciation of thoughts and in order to help you appreciate the essence of writing, writing and writing, repetition is necessary, useful and intentional...Well done with this excellent write. I often use repetition as a means of conveying emphasis in my writing. I love what you have shared and thanks so much for sharing your thoughts kindest regards Meia xx
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For appreciation of thoughts and in order to help you appreciate the essence of writing, writing and writing, repetition is necessary, useful and intentional...Well done with this excellent write. I often use repetition as a means of conveying emphasis in my writing. I love what you have shared and thanks so much for sharing your thoughts kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from Roberta Liszcz
Can't decide how I feel about this one. I really like the originality. I like the stanzas with nouns and verbs better than the ones with adverbs but not quite sure why that bugged me. Overall, it's a mighty piece for sure.
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Can't decide how I feel about this one. I really like the originality. I like the stanzas with nouns and verbs better than the ones with adverbs but not quite sure why that bugged me. Overall, it's a mighty piece for sure.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2021
Comment from Talia Shilling Rabin
Wow. This is really fantastic and amazing. I'm sure you've heard that a lot from other people, but I truly mean it. I love the detail and how you described everything, and I enjoy your repetition (it helps really make a point). I look forward to reading more of your poems!
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Wow. This is really fantastic and amazing. I'm sure you've heard that a lot from other people, but I truly mean it. I love the detail and how you described everything, and I enjoy your repetition (it helps really make a point). I look forward to reading more of your poems!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2021
Comment from Possummagic
What a beautifully crafted and totally original form of poetry you have created here, you are right of course it follows no rules of rhyme nor reason. It would take all day to comment on every single phrase. Lovely!
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What a beautifully crafted and totally original form of poetry you have created here, you are right of course it follows no rules of rhyme nor reason. It would take all day to comment on every single phrase. Lovely!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2021
Comment from WriterHeather
I love this. I was imagining someone performing it on stage. I think that would be powerful and an enjoyable performance to watch. My mind usually wanders when reading long peices but not with this one
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I love this. I was imagining someone performing it on stage. I think that would be powerful and an enjoyable performance to watch. My mind usually wanders when reading long peices but not with this one
Comment Written 19-Apr-2021
