Man for God
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Note to Self?"God Helps man who lives to work for mankind
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Comment from Zue65
I used to write too about the writing craft and the writers in poetic lines. I enjoyed your fresh approach in defining writers and the incredible job they do. The lines are quite fluid too and made reading quite fun. Thanks for sharing.
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I used to write too about the writing craft and the writers in poetic lines. I enjoyed your fresh approach in defining writers and the incredible job they do. The lines are quite fluid too and made reading quite fun. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2018
Comment from Earl Corp
I'm not a free verse fan, but I did like your poem. It had a few rhymes , it makes sense, it's spiritual, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
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I'm not a free verse fan, but I did like your poem. It had a few rhymes , it makes sense, it's spiritual, and it invokes emotions within the reader. Very nice job.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Alcreator: amazing note to self. I like your thoughts and inspirations.
Speak the truth, write simple and use his gifts. We are scribes for
the Lord as we shine the light in the darkness. Great witness to the world.
I used to be filled with words that spun in my head. The Lord taught me to
let the words flow free and share with others. God bless.
flylikeaneagle - nancy
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Alcreator: amazing note to self. I like your thoughts and inspirations.
Speak the truth, write simple and use his gifts. We are scribes for
the Lord as we shine the light in the darkness. Great witness to the world.
I used to be filled with words that spun in my head. The Lord taught me to
let the words flow free and share with others. God bless.
flylikeaneagle - nancy
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from apky
It's been some time since I last read one of your uplifting poems, Alcreator. As always this one too, gave me much to ponder and to take heed to.
Word, as if writing to God
Arrange alphas, as if speaking to Almighty God
Say to protect and promote humanity
Never lie on priority
Thanks for sharing.
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It's been some time since I last read one of your uplifting poems, Alcreator. As always this one too, gave me much to ponder and to take heed to.
Word, as if writing to God
Arrange alphas, as if speaking to Almighty God
Say to protect and promote humanity
Never lie on priority
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from Madeleine Kelly
Very interesting! Some very pleasant sounding lines. The close rhymes are well done. Personally, I would not rhyme wisdom with wisdom, but it still works in the larger context of the poem. Thanks for sharing!
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Very interesting! Some very pleasant sounding lines. The close rhymes are well done. Personally, I would not rhyme wisdom with wisdom, but it still works in the larger context of the poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your poem offers a generous helping of advice to poets. My favourite pieces of advice:
Scribble here no assumptions
Convey no fallacies or controversial presumptions
If I were advising you how to improve this, I would suggest that you try and arrange the lines so that they build towards a climax - put your strongest words at the end, perhaps the lines about writing for God.
Steve
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Your poem offers a generous helping of advice to poets. My favourite pieces of advice:
Scribble here no assumptions
Convey no fallacies or controversial presumptions
If I were advising you how to improve this, I would suggest that you try and arrange the lines so that they build towards a climax - put your strongest words at the end, perhaps the lines about writing for God.
Steve
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from nomi338
Sounds like Holy Scripture 101 to me. I believe that the Bible writers acting on inspiration of Holy Spirit, stuck to those self same rules religiously. Belief in and obedience to All Mighty God, is not, I believe, a specific religion, it is the only religion. If you believe in God and obey his requirements you are in line with salvation and in line for untold blessings.
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Sounds like Holy Scripture 101 to me. I believe that the Bible writers acting on inspiration of Holy Spirit, stuck to those self same rules religiously. Belief in and obedience to All Mighty God, is not, I believe, a specific religion, it is the only religion. If you believe in God and obey his requirements you are in line with salvation and in line for untold blessings.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hey, nice to see a work of yours on the homepage and best of luck with it. I think if we followed all the restrictions on writing that you have here, no one would post anything, as it is a bit like the ten commandments, we know they're there, and full of wisdome and law, but no one can keep to them.
FanStory is a very ego centred site, so good luck with people following these rules for writing. I did enjoy your poem, but at times it was unclear as to what you are saying. For example:
Write for man (-do you mean 'mainly'?)
Forecast never in summations - what are you trying to say here, as it isn't written clearly?
Most people write from experience and that is fine. I don't see what's wrong with writing about things that aren't warm and fuzzy, life is full of things that aren't very warm and fuzzy, lol
Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing which was fun and interesting to read and reveiw, Anastasia.
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Hey, nice to see a work of yours on the homepage and best of luck with it. I think if we followed all the restrictions on writing that you have here, no one would post anything, as it is a bit like the ten commandments, we know they're there, and full of wisdome and law, but no one can keep to them.
FanStory is a very ego centred site, so good luck with people following these rules for writing. I did enjoy your poem, but at times it was unclear as to what you are saying. For example:
Write for man (-do you mean 'mainly'?)
Forecast never in summations - what are you trying to say here, as it isn't written clearly?
Most people write from experience and that is fine. I don't see what's wrong with writing about things that aren't warm and fuzzy, life is full of things that aren't very warm and fuzzy, lol
Cheers, and thanks for sharing your writing which was fun and interesting to read and reveiw, Anastasia.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from country ranch writer
Well, I don't exactly know where you are heading with this but my version would be written from the heart and think of others before one speaks because we all know God is watching us and wants us to be the best we can be.
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Well, I don't exactly know where you are heading with this but my version would be written from the heart and think of others before one speaks because we all know God is watching us and wants us to be the best we can be.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
Comment from judester
This poem is a lesson to us all. The written word can be powerful, uplifting, destructive or demeaning. The power of our words can be positive and create beauty or cruel to break hearts and mislead. Bravo, judester
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This poem is a lesson to us all. The written word can be powerful, uplifting, destructive or demeaning. The power of our words can be positive and create beauty or cruel to break hearts and mislead. Bravo, judester
Comment Written 17-Dec-2018
