Man for God
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Comment from Cindy McIntyre
"God knows, reads everything"...that line really caught my eye and I enjoyed that bit of inspirational truth. "Say to protect and promote humanity" is a very powerful moment in your work. Well written and enjoyed.
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"God knows, reads everything"...that line really caught my eye and I enjoyed that bit of inspirational truth. "Say to protect and promote humanity" is a very powerful moment in your work. Well written and enjoyed.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Raul1
I understood what you intend to say and this is an excellent poem. Wo do need to write better like you said and we get better. I think these advices are good. Very good work! Thanks for sharing!
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I understood what you intend to say and this is an excellent poem. Wo do need to write better like you said and we get better. I think these advices are good. Very good work! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes, write what speaks to your heart.
God will give you the words if you are searching.
If it comes from your heart and soul, it will be beautiful.
Blessings...
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Yes, write what speaks to your heart.
God will give you the words if you are searching.
If it comes from your heart and soul, it will be beautiful.
Blessings...
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Wabigoon
alcreator--
Why in the heck does "god" need your pep talk? I do not understand. You "offer" almost all of your ego, pride, etc. and claim God wants it? Why, unless you are creating Him?
Not a bad poem, just not my taste a bit.
I will keep it to that.
Best
Wabigoon?Jeff
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alcreator--
Why in the heck does "god" need your pep talk? I do not understand. You "offer" almost all of your ego, pride, etc. and claim God wants it? Why, unless you are creating Him?
Not a bad poem, just not my taste a bit.
I will keep it to that.
Best
Wabigoon?Jeff
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Blue Hendrix
By far your best work ever. You are advancing more and more. I think this poem poses wonderful questions about our inner selves, as well as expressing views that make the heart smile.well done great job.
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By far your best work ever. You are advancing more and more. I think this poem poses wonderful questions about our inner selves, as well as expressing views that make the heart smile.well done great job.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from A. Willow Bends
I have no sixes. This is one of the best things I've read since being on Fanstory. Love the movement of the piece, the consistency of your voice. This is fantastic. Creative. Open. Honest. Pure. Great job and continue doing what you do. Remarkable job and I hope you have a winner with this. If not, it is a winner in my personal opinion.
Wendy
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I have no sixes. This is one of the best things I've read since being on Fanstory. Love the movement of the piece, the consistency of your voice. This is fantastic. Creative. Open. Honest. Pure. Great job and continue doing what you do. Remarkable job and I hope you have a winner with this. If not, it is a winner in my personal opinion.
Wendy
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from sunnilicious
Great poem. And you are a devil to relish writing that long. You covered it all. Brilliant as you are creative and focused. Great couplet form. Nice flow with alliterations and rhythm. Excellent :)
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Great poem. And you are a devil to relish writing that long. You covered it all. Brilliant as you are creative and focused. Great couplet form. Nice flow with alliterations and rhythm. Excellent :)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Ulla
Hi Al, I think at least I sort of understood what you were saying in this poem. I have to say that what I like the least is the preaching tone that always come through in your writing. All best. Ulla:))
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Hi Al, I think at least I sort of understood what you were saying in this poem. I have to say that what I like the least is the preaching tone that always come through in your writing. All best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from Tyl3R
A great read. It kind of reminded me of Revelations in the Bible. I'm non-denominated yet felt liberated reading this. Thank you for your time. May your holidays be jolly.
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A great read. It kind of reminded me of Revelations in the Bible. I'm non-denominated yet felt liberated reading this. Thank you for your time. May your holidays be jolly.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
Comment from rama devi
This is the most coherent poem of yours I've read, Al. I like it! It's slightly preachy but in a good way, and has tons of good advice. I especially appreciated these lines:
God knows, reads everything
Write simple, soft, symphonic word
Two spag issues to note for your consideration:
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Use His gifts righteously for ever
forever is one word
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Advice no short-cut,
Advise
(not advice--since it is used as a verb).
Good work. I enjoyed it.
Blessings,
rd
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This is the most coherent poem of yours I've read, Al. I like it! It's slightly preachy but in a good way, and has tons of good advice. I especially appreciated these lines:
God knows, reads everything
Write simple, soft, symphonic word
Two spag issues to note for your consideration:
*
Use His gifts righteously for ever
forever is one word
*
Advice no short-cut,
Advise
(not advice--since it is used as a verb).
Good work. I enjoyed it.
Blessings,
rd
Comment Written 19-Dec-2018
